Lost Connections
At heart, we are all social animals4 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is luminous and memorable. The picture makes it even more so, but even without the picture, the haunting repetition of your dire message is tremendously well done. I agree that it's sad that this subject continues to be relevant today. I'm sure when you wrote it, you hoped that wouldn't be the case. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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This is luminous and memorable. The picture makes it even more so, but even without the picture, the haunting repetition of your dire message is tremendously well done. I agree that it's sad that this subject continues to be relevant today. I'm sure when you wrote it, you hoped that wouldn't be the case. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much.
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Of course!
Comment from créateur d'histoire
I think your poem is powerful. I can see and feel how much love you poured into it. You're right it can feel difficult to fix one's broken heart and be optimistic about the goodness in humanity. I'm glad that you're okay. Good luck in the contest! And excellent work!
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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I think your poem is powerful. I can see and feel how much love you poured into it. You're right it can feel difficult to fix one's broken heart and be optimistic about the goodness in humanity. I'm glad that you're okay. Good luck in the contest! And excellent work!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much - I really appreciate your comments!
Comment from JSD
Excellent response to the prompt and a beautifully constructed poem. The repeated lines just work perfectly and create a thumping heartbeat of sorrow throughout the poem. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Excellent response to the prompt and a beautifully constructed poem. The repeated lines just work perfectly and create a thumping heartbeat of sorrow throughout the poem. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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"Thumping heartbeat of sorrow" - what a lovely phrase! Thank you so much - I appreciate your feedback!
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a very written piece of poetry in pantoum style. You have expressed your thoughts and feelings very well. It seems quite a sad and mournful poem. Good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This is a very written piece of poetry in pantoum style. You have expressed your thoughts and feelings very well. It seems quite a sad and mournful poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Wendyanne!