Halloween Ebbs and Woes
There are horrors where you least expect them11 total reviews
Comment from damommy
I enjoyed it very much. You held me through the story with your descriptions of the man. Sad to think there really are people like that out there. Even in the days my children grew up, I was always vigilant. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I enjoyed it very much. You held me through the story with your descriptions of the man. Sad to think there really are people like that out there. Even in the days my children grew up, I was always vigilant. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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There are far too many people like this out there. It is a shame.
Comment from Navada
This resonated with me on a few levels. I'm an Australian and we have a famous disappearance here of a young boy wearing a Spiderman costume who went missing nine or ten years ago and has never been found. He wasn't blonde and there are no potential embittered serial killers in the frame, though (as far as we know). This story is chilling and very well told.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This resonated with me on a few levels. I'm an Australian and we have a famous disappearance here of a young boy wearing a Spiderman costume who went missing nine or ten years ago and has never been found. He wasn't blonde and there are no potential embittered serial killers in the frame, though (as far as we know). This story is chilling and very well told.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I picked spiderman because I just put one of my grandsons toys away after he went home after staying the week end. I am chilled to the bone to learn of an actual case.
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Sadly, yes. His name is William Tyrrell. It's a very complex, sad and troubling case.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Halloween Story contest entry with us. It's one of the best ones I have read for this contest. I can't believe you won't do well in the contest, but just in case, good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for sharing this Halloween Story contest entry with us. It's one of the best ones I have read for this contest. I can't believe you won't do well in the contest, but just in case, good luck.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I once heard someone say about people who you can't really fathom (like Richerson): "think the unthinkable." Your evolving story is particularly dark, outlining just how monsters can develop from broken backgrounds. From that perspective, your theme is, sadly, all too realistic, albeit rare. But, once the deed is done, it can then trigger a compelling need to repeat the adrenaline rush. True evil and a great entry for this contest! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I once heard someone say about people who you can't really fathom (like Richerson): "think the unthinkable." Your evolving story is particularly dark, outlining just how monsters can develop from broken backgrounds. From that perspective, your theme is, sadly, all too realistic, albeit rare. But, once the deed is done, it can then trigger a compelling need to repeat the adrenaline rush. True evil and a great entry for this contest! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I'm just glad that this was fiction. I would think, though, that after the first few, steps would be taken to watch kids more carefully with the police involved with surveillance. Especially so since kids went missing on Halloween.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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I'm just glad that this was fiction. I would think, though, that after the first few, steps would be taken to watch kids more carefully with the police involved with surveillance. Especially so since kids went missing on Halloween.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is quite a horror story, inventive and difficult to comprehend, but in real life these things do sometimes happen and children become victims of cruel men and women, a horrific Halloween story for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is quite a horror story, inventive and difficult to comprehend, but in real life these things do sometimes happen and children become victims of cruel men and women, a horrific Halloween story for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a horror story you have written so well for the Halloween contest. You have described the scenes so vividly that I can picture them in my mind. Good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Wow what a horror story you have written so well for the Halloween contest. You have described the scenes so vividly that I can picture them in my mind. Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I am glad it was creepy.
Comment from jim vecchio
Excellent telling of aa good ol' Halloween story! unfortunately, the events you described could have been pulled from today's news. By the way, third paragraph from the end reminded me q little of one of my earlier posts, "AfterMask". But, my descriptions took up the whole story, yours was just icing on your cake. I found recently that some reviewers go to great lengths to point out typos, so let me tell you of two extremely minor ones:Blonde was never the peepers thing. Peepers should have an apostrophe. In the following paragraph, By you know, I am sure you understand the man, it should be "by NOW".
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Excellent telling of aa good ol' Halloween story! unfortunately, the events you described could have been pulled from today's news. By the way, third paragraph from the end reminded me q little of one of my earlier posts, "AfterMask". But, my descriptions took up the whole story, yours was just icing on your cake. I found recently that some reviewers go to great lengths to point out typos, so let me tell you of two extremely minor ones:Blonde was never the peepers thing. Peepers should have an apostrophe. In the following paragraph, By you know, I am sure you understand the man, it should be "by NOW".
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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I am so glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you for pointing out the errors I missed. I welcome it because that is one of the things other eyes are for. The writer knows what it is supposed to say and sometimes the brain fills it in and we miss it.
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This by no means detracts from the quality of your work. In fact, I just finished editing one of my posts which had an error I missed, but someone else didn't!
Comment from Thesis
A very interesting post, not gory or overly frightening, but rather gnawingly horrifying, focusing on a parent's worst fear of losing a child. You told the story well and expressed the anguish and guilt someone would experience in that predicament.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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A very interesting post, not gory or overly frightening, but rather gnawingly horrifying, focusing on a parent's worst fear of losing a child. You told the story well and expressed the anguish and guilt someone would experience in that predicament.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I felt it was something a little different for a Halloween story. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from royowen
I don't like Halloween, I can't.see the point of it all, and never have. We can celebrate other festivals, but for some reason humans are drawn to darkness, although the Richersons of this world don't need Halloween to become what they are. I am impressed by what you've created here Mia, although I usually run from dark writing, this was very good, an insight into unfathomable dark minds, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I don't like Halloween, I can't.see the point of it all, and never have. We can celebrate other festivals, but for some reason humans are drawn to darkness, although the Richersons of this world don't need Halloween to become what they are. I am impressed by what you've created here Mia, although I usually run from dark writing, this was very good, an insight into unfathomable dark minds, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I am so honored that you liked the piece. My husband is not fond of the genre in which I write. He is also not a great fan of Halloween.
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Well done