Scenes at a Third Party
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Scene at a Third Party 22"A third party for President 2024
8 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
I really like the way this is going, everyone seems to have an idea, but not really as everyone is coming and going, the characters and lingo are excellent, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
  |
I really like the way this is going, everyone seems to have an idea, but not really as everyone is coming and going, the characters and lingo are excellent, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
-
Thank you, kahpot
Comment from BethShelby
You must have the record for the number or characters in your scripts. You keep cloning them and killing the truning them into dead characters. I'm glad you list most of them. Is Zombie Zed the murderer?
I didn't realize substitute teacher were unkempt. It must be because they get called at the last minute and don't have time to dress.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
|
You must have the record for the number or characters in your scripts. You keep cloning them and killing the truning them into dead characters. I'm glad you list most of them. Is Zombie Zed the murderer?
I didn't realize substitute teacher were unkempt. It must be because they get called at the last minute and don't have time to dress.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
-
Subs are short on dough, time, and training.
Comment from nomi338
GED is about to shock the heck out of a lot of people when they discover that he is not Ned, and that he has been gobbling up the brains of their friends and loved ones. In spite of this consumption of brains he has not gotten any smarter.
I agree, the poem needs work.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
|
GED is about to shock the heck out of a lot of people when they discover that he is not Ned, and that he has been gobbling up the brains of their friends and loved ones. In spite of this consumption of brains he has not gotten any smarter.
I agree, the poem needs work.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
-
Brains get bigger through the eyes and ears, not the stomach.
Comment from royowen
I'm loving this series, you've gathered such incredible quirkiness and a fantastically different characters, with a great plot to match, all thrown together in an eclectic mix, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
|
I'm loving this series, you've gathered such incredible quirkiness and a fantastically different characters, with a great plot to match, all thrown together in an eclectic mix, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
-
Thank you so much, Roy. That makes me glad. Bill
-
Well done
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! Someone tell them that it's not the real GED! I think Felix's tendency toward "clicking" with women shows that he's not the commitment kind of guy. But he did come up with a good limerick on the fly!
look less unkemp (unkempt)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
|
Oh no! Someone tell them that it's not the real GED! I think Felix's tendency toward "clicking" with women shows that he's not the commitment kind of guy. But he did come up with a good limerick on the fly!
look less unkemp (unkempt)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
-
I feel at this point GED is beyond hope of rejoining the living. He may have a home with the DED universe (DOA, Stu Stickman, Dethany, Expirella, D-red, and D-zed).
-
GED will have a good influence among those characters!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written scene you have posted. I do not know how you keep every one's speaking straight. You did a really good job on this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
|
This is a very well written scene you have posted. I do not know how you keep every one's speaking straight. You did a really good job on this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
-
Thanks, Teri
-
You are so welcome! I really do enjoy reading your scripts and scenes!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You really are having fun with this, Bill! I love your inspector's name, a nice little variation on your own:) And I see we are still looking for the suspect in the case of the missing Abebe and Brah (I like the way the former's name mutates to Abrabanana (mad!) And lo and behold, Zombie GED turns up. Can't be a good thing although he's being treated more like an object of fun (love the dig at substitute school teachers). I definitely want to know what happens next! There could well be bloodshed. Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
|
You really are having fun with this, Bill! I love your inspector's name, a nice little variation on your own:) And I see we are still looking for the suspect in the case of the missing Abebe and Brah (I like the way the former's name mutates to Abrabanana (mad!) And lo and behold, Zombie GED turns up. Can't be a good thing although he's being treated more like an object of fun (love the dig at substitute school teachers). I definitely want to know what happens next! There could well be bloodshed. Debbie
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
-
Hope I can get everyone out of this and on to the campaign.
-
Best of luck there, Bill:))
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Your character names just make me howl l o l. I just can't help it and I really appreciate the smiles too. Gotta grab a them while you can!
You've got some excellent dialogue written here, too. There's some really, cool turns of phrase too that gives your characters believability. Then that guy covered in blood wholly smokes Batman gotta see happens next. I'd say you've done a smashing job! I see no issues with grammar, esthetics, punctuation sentence structure, or subject matter. Youve some magic here. Good luck! I hope you have an awesome evening!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
|
Your character names just make me howl l o l. I just can't help it and I really appreciate the smiles too. Gotta grab a them while you can!
You've got some excellent dialogue written here, too. There's some really, cool turns of phrase too that gives your characters believability. Then that guy covered in blood wholly smokes Batman gotta see happens next. I'd say you've done a smashing job! I see no issues with grammar, esthetics, punctuation sentence structure, or subject matter. Youve some magic here. Good luck! I hope you have an awesome evening!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
-
Thank you, Lea.