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A third party for President 2024

7 total reviews 
Comment from Ulla
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Oh Bill, I just love this. It's so funny, and if you will excuse my language, you just take the piss of everything that is taking place in American politics at the moment. Now, on to the next part. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Ulla, for your enthusiastic review.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh no! But would Bull believe that Ned's clone/cologne did it? Too bad for Felix as apparently fell hard for Zora. Hope Bed will be cleared. The Fine cousins will have to help better with the investigation.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
    I feel there is need of some otherworldly intervention.
Comment from nomi338
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By now the plot is thicker than a pot of pea soup. Thicker than the London fog on its worst day. Is GED a racist or just an opportunist? How many more people is he gonna kill before he is stopped?

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
    At this point, GED is a connoisseur of fine brains.
Comment from Daylily
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The setting here is obviously futuristic with the presence of clones and a zombie GED. The murder raises thoughts about the scant change that has occurred over the (centuries?) to upgrade human (and unhuman) nature.

Alas, with the current horrible events happening in Israel, it does not look like there is much hope for humanity's improvement for quite a while.

I enjoyed reading your thought-provoking and well written script.


 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Daylily. The story is humor driven, so the appearance of clones and zombies is purely for laughs, despite the horrific idea of murder.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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There is a lot of action occurring here and several characters. Feel like I am confused because I jumped in the middle, but I'm still going to rate it because it's interesting and caught my attention. Besides, I love 'cop mysteries, a lot!

Fast paced, exciting, and well done. Fun read.
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 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Thanks, Douglas, for popping in.
Comment from Frank Malley
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This author has a fondness for the humor that emerges from sound-alike words. The tone of the dialogue seems young and emotionally imperturbable, which leads me to guess that this colloquy is more about its humor than its drama. I hope to read more.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    I try to spread out cast of thousands so I don?t end up with a Skar Maninoff and a Felix Fine in the same room, sharing a personality.
Comment from BethShelby
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This is getting to be quite a crime scene. It seems the investigators have done some fast fingerprinting. Ged has turned into a zombie and seems to be a prime suspect.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
    Now how to get out of this without copping out with a lame *just a dream* deal.