Dressed to Kill
Expect the unexpected31 total reviews
Comment from Judith B.
A gripping and outstanding piece of writing! The story was one I could not stop reading as I sometimes do. And the surprise ending was wonderful and welcome. Very rarely do I read something with no dialogue and like it this much. I saw absolutely nothing I would change except for the omission of one comma (after "getting out" early in the story--I didn't think that comma was necessary).
Great writing and I'll watch for more.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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A gripping and outstanding piece of writing! The story was one I could not stop reading as I sometimes do. And the surprise ending was wonderful and welcome. Very rarely do I read something with no dialogue and like it this much. I saw absolutely nothing I would change except for the omission of one comma (after "getting out" early in the story--I didn't think that comma was necessary).
Great writing and I'll watch for more.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Judith,
Thanks so much for your six star review. Note also your point about the comma. There will be more stories based around this story. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from JPGeo
Ouch! I wonder where poor JIm had to take the hit. I like the line "getting out is harder and more important than getting in". My mind lingered on that awhile.
Barry, this is pretty darn good!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Ouch! I wonder where poor JIm had to take the hit. I like the line "getting out is harder and more important than getting in". My mind lingered on that awhile.
Barry, this is pretty darn good!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. I intend to do a few more stories based around this story. Hopefully, I will get that done soon.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Amanda Hazlett
The description of the way he was waiting for the moment was very well described. I like sugar in my coffee as well. Great twist in the ending "Why kill a good man?".
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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The description of the way he was waiting for the moment was very well described. I like sugar in my coffee as well. Great twist in the ending "Why kill a good man?".
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Amanda,
Wow. Six stars is great. So glad you like the story. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from leather
This was an interesting story--I followed it to the end. I was a little surprised to find the Middle English word "whilst" in a modern day story that included Armani suits and telescopic rifles. That seemed to be the only hiccup in the whole read. Still, it is very well-written and delight to read.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This was an interesting story--I followed it to the end. I was a little surprised to find the Middle English word "whilst" in a modern day story that included Armani suits and telescopic rifles. That seemed to be the only hiccup in the whole read. Still, it is very well-written and delight to read.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thanks for your review and I am so glad you enjoyed the story. I will have to look out on the use of "whilst". Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You're welcome.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This well thought out story is filled with mystery and suspense. It leads the reader to want the protagonist to be successful, while hoping the victim escapes being killed. The story has a very satisfying ending. Especially notable is how smoothly the shooter's backstory is woven into the story. Additionally, it is a pleasure to read without being interrupted with punction, grammar, and spelling errors. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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This well thought out story is filled with mystery and suspense. It leads the reader to want the protagonist to be successful, while hoping the victim escapes being killed. The story has a very satisfying ending. Especially notable is how smoothly the shooter's backstory is woven into the story. Additionally, it is a pleasure to read without being interrupted with punction, grammar, and spelling errors. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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Wow. thanks for the six stars. Glad you enjoyed the story. There may be a follow up shortly. Just see how life goes. You have a good day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I don't give six stars unless I feel they are deserved. Your story definitely deserves six stars. The suspense holds from the beginning until the end of the story. Great writing. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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I don't give six stars unless I feel they are deserved. Your story definitely deserves six stars. The suspense holds from the beginning until the end of the story. Great writing. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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Wow. Thanks for the six star review and so glad you enjoyed the story. Might be a follow up soon. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barry, this was a very well written piece, with a surprise ending. So he had a change of heart at the very last minute. What we don't know is whether he will now be on the run from whoever hired him to do the killing.
A great story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2023
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Hi Barry, this was a very well written piece, with a surprise ending. So he had a change of heart at the very last minute. What we don't know is whether he will now be on the run from whoever hired him to do the killing.
A great story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2023
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Ulla, thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed the read. I am contemplating doing a follow on story and maybe more. Yes reprisals will be forthcoming for him. Lets see how it all turns out. Have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sally Law
Wow, Barry, this is fabulous! Very well-written and suspenseful. The assassin's last minute change was really quite a surprise. It seems he drew the line somewhere.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Wow, Barry, this is fabulous! Very well-written and suspenseful. The assassin's last minute change was really quite a surprise. It seems he drew the line somewhere.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors.
Sally :))
Comment Written 01-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Sally, thanks for your kind review. Glad you liked it. I am thinking of continuing his adventures so look out for some more. Hope you have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from jim vecchio
An excellent bit of storytelling. Totally believable and great pacing. You have a knack of making the reader feel he is there, witnessing every movement and moment. Far be it from me to offer advice to a superior writer, but I was just wondering...With a few adjustments, this could have been set in the Book Depository and the shooting be a fictionalized account involving President Kennedy.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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An excellent bit of storytelling. Totally believable and great pacing. You have a knack of making the reader feel he is there, witnessing every movement and moment. Far be it from me to offer advice to a superior writer, but I was just wondering...With a few adjustments, this could have been set in the Book Depository and the shooting be a fictionalized account involving President Kennedy.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Jim.
Thanks so much for your kind review. Ha Ha, I like your suggestion . From what I review from your profile you have not been too good of late. Well, best of wishes for a speedy recovery. Have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Thank you so much for your writing ad I'd love to read more of it!
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Thanks Jim. Help yourself to the stories in my profile. Try the Red Door. There are also some other Assassin like stories that might interest you. Hopefully, I can get a few more out there before Christmas.
Have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Thanks for all! I have a therapy session, but will try to take a peek into your portfolio as soon as I can afterward!
Comment from royowen
I was a bit doubtful about the direction of this particular story, but I was pleasantly surprised by the ending, but because I don't like stories about gratuities killing, so a man with a rifle, brings up a question or two, bur well done, a pleasant read, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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I was a bit doubtful about the direction of this particular story, but I was pleasantly surprised by the ending, but because I don't like stories about gratuities killing, so a man with a rifle, brings up a question or two, bur well done, a pleasant read, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Roy, thanks for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed it despite your aversion to stories relating to gratuities killing. You have a good day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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You too Barry