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haiku (a baby is born)

For haiku club holiday/ Christmas poetry contest

15 total reviews 
Comment from Father Flaps
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Hi Joan,
And we complain about paying taxes! Joseph and Mary had to travel about 80 miles from Nazareth to Bethlehem. That would only take 48 minutes today by car, traveling 100mph. But back in their day, it would be quite a long journey. And there's poor Mary, ready to give birth any day to her son, on the back of a ... No! There's no mention of Mary riding a donkey to Bethlehem. And, if she walked that distance, almost 9 months into her pregnancy, swollen feet and ankles, how did she ever do it? Mary was tough, no doubt about it. So Jesus was born in the "humblest of surroundings" to a very weary young woman. He came from Heaven to a dark world. He was light, and still is light. And the earth is as dark as it has ever been. 2024, and the world on the brink of war once again. Israel may not realize it even yet, but they are drawing us into a bitter conflict if they don't back off. But this is why Jesus came in the first place.
I'm way off base now, aren't I, Joan? Let's just hope peace can be reached before we celebrate Christmas 2024. Everyone wants peace, except the terrorists.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2024
    Hi Kimbob,
    Thanks for going back in my portfolio to find this. Glad you liked it.
    I hope she had a ride. I hope for peace too. don't think your so far off, which is sad.
    Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Great entry for the Christmas Poetry contest.

Already Christmas? LoL

Excellent 5-7-5 form with good syllables count and connection between lines. I like the presentation too.

One suggestion

a baby is born
in the humblest
surroundings~
Brings riches to world

Good luck!!!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
    Thanks for the kind words and good luck wishes, MariVal.
    I'd rather do Christmas than Halloween.
    Joan
Comment from jessizero
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This poem was perfect for Christmas. I like how you opposed humble with riches. Thank you so much for sharing this poem here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Jessi, for the nice review and good luck wishes. Both are much appreciated.
    Joan
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Haiku? Oh, bless you.

Okay that was my joke for the day. Great piece of work! I like the whole Christmas nativity scene. Mostly cause it was the start of saving our souls from eternal damnation. But also because putting the Son of God in a barn was so perfectly God-like.

D.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
    Hi Doug,
    Thanks for reading and reviewing. Both are much appreciated. I agree with your last comment.
    Joan
Comment from Ginda Simpson
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A sweet Haiku, painting the Nativity scene as we have imagined it from early childhood, but so much more. The last line carries the message and the meaning of why we celebrate Christmas.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
    Thanks for your kind comments and all the stars, Ginda.
    Joan
Comment from JSD
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Great entry for the contest. I love the way you carefully balance the humbleness with the riches. Very clever. All neatly encapsulated in seventeen syllables. Well done and good luck.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
    Thanks for both the nice review and the good luck wishes, John.
    Joan
Comment from Ulla
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It's a lovely short poem about the most important birth in the Christian faith.
Now, a haiku is always concerned with nature, but a birth can maybe also be seen as nature. All best, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
    Thanks for the comments and high rating,Ulla.
    I thought about the nature aspect right after I posted it. But decided to go with it.
    Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A fine Christmas nativity poem and I enjoyed the sentiments here, the festive season will be upon us before we realise, I enjoyed your sweet natured presentation Joan, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
    Thanks for your kind comments and all the stars, Dolly.
    Joan
Comment from royowen
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The amazing thing is He became poor to make us rich, born in a stable with an animal feeding manger for His bed, the owner of the universe show this setting for His birthplace, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
    Thanks for the nice review and rating, Roy.
    Joan
reply by royowen on 25-Sep-2023
    Most welcome
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Very well done. You do poetry nicely. I have talked to Tom and he says we are not allowed to ask each other to read our work. It is on our contract. Since this is the main reason lot of us came on here, I am confused. Karen

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
    Thanks for reading and reviewing. I think the rule means that its an automatic ask to read by just posting. You get an automatic 2 reviews for each poem. And if you promote your poem so it gets on the title page you get more readers.
    Joan
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 25-Sep-2023
    I think this policy will drive people to use email and not this site so much, Most folks I know were not fo;;;oeong that rule. Karen
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
    I?ve followed this rule since 2007, when I strongly this site. I give filters of poems when other members ask for them.
    Joan
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 26-Sep-2023
    Just finished the carnival contest bit. I hope it is okay.