Saving Mr. Calvin
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Comment from w.j.debi
Those four did get into a lot of trouble. Messing with chickens means they probably wouldn't lay eggs for a few days so I can see how that would upset people. But the game meant so much to them. How wonderful that they were industrious enough to start their own town and that other people are joining them. Of course, they have to play gowf.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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Those four did get into a lot of trouble. Messing with chickens means they probably wouldn't lay eggs for a few days so I can see how that would upset people. But the game meant so much to them. How wonderful that they were industrious enough to start their own town and that other people are joining them. Of course, they have to play gowf.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
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Yes, the Snogs are very fond of their chickens and did not take well to that sort of tomfoolery. (I can't believe I just wrote that sentence!)
Yes, and what a relief for the Foos to no longer have to dink around on the links.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, so this is a different story from the other one. Now both Scotland and golf is close to my heart.bi have lived in Scotland and I was married to a Scottish man for almost 18 years. My best friends are Scottish, but I live in Spain. My Scottish husband and I moved here more than twenty years ago. So you see. I'm Danish, half American, but deeply intertwined with Scotland. I'm now divorced but I still live in Spain.
I'm following your story with great interest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi Jim, so this is a different story from the other one. Now both Scotland and golf is close to my heart.bi have lived in Scotland and I was married to a Scottish man for almost 18 years. My best friends are Scottish, but I live in Spain. My Scottish husband and I moved here more than twenty years ago. So you see. I'm Danish, half American, but deeply intertwined with Scotland. I'm now divorced but I still live in Spain.
I'm following your story with great interest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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You have lived all over. You should enjoy this part of the story now that we're in Scotland. Part 1 took place in Holland in 1247.
Comment from Paul Manton
Have pity on a pur Englishman, Jim - this was aye lang!
But it was packed with narrative - less of the living in sin and a bit more marriage if you don't mind - what do they teach you in these colonial churches? For shame!
The story of the Snogs is fun - reminded me a lot of Gulliver's Travels and the little differences that were so important to the rival groups. So, I am itching to read about the Gowf Tournament between the Foos and the Snogs - Come On You Foos!!!
All the dialogue blends nicely - no lumpy bits - and everything sounds natural. Explanations of the shortened names was fun. I imagine thinking up the long versions was the most fun though.
Bring on the next part, James - and to hell with the expense!
Paul
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Have pity on a pur Englishman, Jim - this was aye lang!
But it was packed with narrative - less of the living in sin and a bit more marriage if you don't mind - what do they teach you in these colonial churches? For shame!
The story of the Snogs is fun - reminded me a lot of Gulliver's Travels and the little differences that were so important to the rival groups. So, I am itching to read about the Gowf Tournament between the Foos and the Snogs - Come On You Foos!!!
All the dialogue blends nicely - no lumpy bits - and everything sounds natural. Explanations of the shortened names was fun. I imagine thinking up the long versions was the most fun though.
Bring on the next part, James - and to hell with the expense!
Paul
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Perhaps if they said they would hold off having sex instead of marriage until they beat the Snogs, that would be even more of an incentive! I'll give you a clue about the outcome, though, and just say that it will end up not having mattered either way.
This chapter was a bit long, coming in at just over 2,000 words. Most of them in the future will be shorter.
Yes, it was fun thinking up the names. I've always had a thing about funny names, dating back to when I was a kid, and my mother told me the name of one of her doctors. It was Dr. Ephraim Boogatch, and it cracked me up.
Comment from lyenochka
Cheers for another smart and capable female character! Aggie is an interesting one, a no-nonsense businesswoman but one who is caring. I wonder how kolf entered into Scotland and became gowf? OR did they get invented simultaneously? I like that the sheep and goats keep the course mowed!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Cheers for another smart and capable female character! Aggie is an interesting one, a no-nonsense businesswoman but one who is caring. I wonder how kolf entered into Scotland and became gowf? OR did they get invented simultaneously? I like that the sheep and goats keep the course mowed!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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That's a good question. Because of the names kolf and gowf, I'm guessing it emigrated from Holland. Perhaps Kilian and Arie made one of their promotional trips to Scotland once? I'll have to write a short story about that sometime.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting near beginning to the story. They all seem to be devoted to gowf, and Aggie is into changing the game in the town they and their families have founded. Great way to start the story.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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This is an interesting near beginning to the story. They all seem to be devoted to gowf, and Aggie is into changing the game in the town they and their families have founded. Great way to start the story.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Carol. You're correct that gowf is very important to this new town. You'll even see it later in the layout of the town.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Oh, to be able to start my own town with people who thought and acted like me:-)
This is a good introduction to new characters and you've set us up nicely with this explanation of their love for gowf.
I already see a potential problem in the determination to not get married unless they win the tournament against the Snogs.
We've come into the future a little, so golf has had time to mature and take hold across parts of Europe. Maybe the Scots could play the English and the winner of the tournament wins the war. Less bloody that way.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Oh, to be able to start my own town with people who thought and acted like me:-)
This is a good introduction to new characters and you've set us up nicely with this explanation of their love for gowf.
I already see a potential problem in the determination to not get married unless they win the tournament against the Snogs.
We've come into the future a little, so golf has had time to mature and take hold across parts of Europe. Maybe the Scots could play the English and the winner of the tournament wins the war. Less bloody that way.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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They're pulling out all the stops and doing everything they can to inspire their team (which includes themselves) to win this year against those cursed Snogs.
I like your suggestion on how to fight their war! Far less bloody.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait to see what Aggie created. I have a feeling it will be good. Thank you for sharing.
Jack's job was to make the cooking fires while Isla collected eggs from the chickens and fed them. (and feed them???)
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I can't wait to see what Aggie created. I have a feeling it will be good. Thank you for sharing.
Jack's job was to make the cooking fires while Isla collected eggs from the chickens and fed them. (and feed them???)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Aggie is a clever girl, something like Arie was (hmm...), so I agree. It will most likely be good.
Nice catch. I will change it in my manuscript.
Comment from jmdg1954
This is really getting interesting, Jim and I am enjoying it. I love the words, names time frame etc.
One correction in my opinion -
It will be held at our links this year, so we get to suggest the rules. With my plan, I'm guessing we will have a distinct advantage.(omit- written twice back to back didn't read well.)
Excellent post, John
Hilarious, where did you come up with these names - The first thing we did was to change our names to shorter versions of our given names. Thus, my full birth name, Kierkegaard Patterson, became Kirk Pate, Putaniscobrae Pellagrosion became Putney Pell (further shortened to Putt Pell), and Agrawinnia O'Luingeachain became Aggie Lang.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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This is really getting interesting, Jim and I am enjoying it. I love the words, names time frame etc.
One correction in my opinion -
It will be held at our links this year, so we get to suggest the rules. With my plan, I'm guessing we will have a distinct advantage.(omit-
Excellent post, John
Hilarious, where did you come up with these names - The first thing we did was to change our names to shorter versions of our given names. Thus, my full birth name, Kierkegaard Patterson, became Kirk Pate, Putaniscobrae Pellagrosion became Putney Pell (further shortened to Putt Pell), and Agrawinnia O'Luingeachain became Aggie Lang.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thanks, John. I agree about the repetition. I will change it in my manuscript.
I've always liked funny names, even as a kid. I got such a kick out of one of my mother's doctor's name: Dr. Ephraim Boogatch. It's just my warped sense of humor.
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Your warped sense of humor works!
Comment from royowen
Ah now I know what they called golf in those early days, so.I take it the golf was jointly developed in Scotland and Holland in those early days, so the Dutch group and the Scottish group were seperate development, they must have come together at some point. By the way, the Scots probably called the British less flatteringly Sasanach, which simply means Saxon. well done, blessings Jim,Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Ah now I know what they called golf in those early days, so.I take it the golf was jointly developed in Scotland and Holland in those early days, so the Dutch group and the Scottish group were seperate development, they must have come together at some point. By the way, the Scots probably called the British less flatteringly Sasanach, which simply means Saxon. well done, blessings Jim,Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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The earliest known versions of golf in each country were about 200 years apart, so my money is still on the Dutch for having invented it and transferring it to Scotland at some point.
Hey, I wonder if the name "Sasquatch" for the big, hairy Bigfoot of US fame was derived from Sasanach?
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Who knows? Perhaps God will tell us, but it makes a good story.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A great chapter elaborating on the background to the group and the town of Castasnogwary! The characters' names alone are enough to endear the reader to them and you've obviously had great fun with all your names, not least the shortened version of Putt:) Your story has the same pastoral, feel-good of the last but of course with an edge in the form of the ongoing war. Great job, Jim! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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A great chapter elaborating on the background to the group and the town of Castasnogwary! The characters' names alone are enough to endear the reader to them and you've obviously had great fun with all your names, not least the shortened version of Putt:) Your story has the same pastoral, feel-good of the last but of course with an edge in the form of the ongoing war. Great job, Jim! Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I've always had a thing about funny names. I guess that's why I always loved Abbot and Costello's "Who's on First" routine so much. I think my love of funny names began when I was a kid, and my mother told me the name of one of her doctors. It was Dr. Ephraim Boogatch.
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Ha ha! Great! And you remember it to this day!