And Heaven Awaits
We can't even imagine24 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh well....this is as lovely to look at as it is to read... Love the script font you chose... It's how I imagine angels would write! I do want to go to heaven. (Just not quite yet!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Oh well....this is as lovely to look at as it is to read... Love the script font you chose... It's how I imagine angels would write! I do want to go to heaven. (Just not quite yet!)
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Hi Sweetie, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again
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You are so welcome!
Comment from jmdg1954
Being reunited with loved and cherished ones in, "And Heaven Waits".
God's eternal home that he longs to share with you
many rooms in His mansion
when we see loved ones again
Your poem has a nice story told that we should embrace.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Being reunited with loved and cherished ones in, "And Heaven Waits".
God's eternal home that he longs to share with you
many rooms in His mansion
when we see loved ones again
Your poem has a nice story told that we should embrace.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again
Comment from Wendy G
I like the image you chose. I love your suite of 5-7-5s and that is the belief and sure hope of all Christians everywhere. It has always been His plan for us to enjoy eternal life with Him. Best wishes for your entry
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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I like the image you chose. I love your suite of 5-7-5s and that is the belief and sure hope of all Christians everywhere. It has always been His plan for us to enjoy eternal life with Him. Best wishes for your entry
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Wendy, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again!
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Hi John,
Comment from Boogienights
A wonderful poem of faith and a lovely picture to go with it. I have read many of these and consider this one to be one of the best. Good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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A wonderful poem of faith and a lovely picture to go with it. I have read many of these and consider this one to be one of the best. Good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Sharon, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Maybe yes; maybe no. I agree there are many mansions but thinking we can visit one and move on? Needs more than a poem to convince meš???
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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Maybe yes; maybe no. I agree there are many mansions but thinking we can visit one and move on? Needs more than a poem to convince meš???
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Hey Tom, did you read my poem? My poem doesn't say any of that, silly! LOL - I'll try to get word to you somehow when I'm in one of the many rooms of His mansion and let you know how it's going.
Do doubters like hotter climates? Haha!
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Don't get me wrong. I have chosen to follow His path but dang it agency too often gets in the way.
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Haha! Just messin with ya! And l do understand.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I like the sentiment in your poem.
Being old enough to have family members that have transitioned before me, it is comforting to know they are waiting for me when my time comes to follow them.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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I like the sentiment in your poem.
Being old enough to have family members that have transitioned before me, it is comforting to know they are waiting for me when my time comes to follow them.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Andrea, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again
Comment from lyenochka
What a great entry for this contest! And yes, we all look forward to being reunited with out loved ones in Heaven. The Lord has said that He prepared a place for each one of us. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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What a great entry for this contest! And yes, we all look forward to being reunited with out loved ones in Heaven. The Lord has said that He prepared a place for each one of us. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Helen, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again sweet friend.
Comment from Terry Broxson
I have never seen or heard of a haiku suite. It is an interesting form of poetry. I think this is a very good one. I was also struck by the second line of the first haiku. I have never heard it expressed exactly that way before. Very well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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I have never seen or heard of a haiku suite. It is an interesting form of poetry. I think this is a very good one. I was also struck by the second line of the first haiku. I have never heard it expressed exactly that way before. Very well done. Terry.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Thanks for your kind words for this Haiku Suite. That line is one pretty much word to word out of the Bible, which says, "in my mansion there are many rooms. At least that is what I think I remember it saying. Thanks again for the kind review and comments.
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Mystery writer, the second line of the first haiku. "he yearns" that was new to me. I do know the second line to the second haiku... LOL
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Lol, oh that one. Don't tell anyone, but just a little of my own interpretation. I couldn't believe all the rules to these things. If I get the urge to do one again, I will write a novel instead. Haha
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LOL
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You have written a very good haiku suite
with a good topic.
-I like repetition at the end of each line.
-You have a very good progression beginning
with "God's eternal home," then there
is assurance there is plenty of room there;
finally, there is "joy...when we see loved ones again.
-Very well done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You have written a very good haiku suite
with a good topic.
-I like repetition at the end of each line.
-You have a very good progression beginning
with "God's eternal home," then there
is assurance there is plenty of room there;
finally, there is "joy...when we see loved ones again.
-Very well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Pam, I appreciate very much your lovely comments regarding my Haiku Suite.
Thanks again
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
This is really lovely and you have one heck of a good 3rd line, (satori) to work with.
Did you change this? I liked the first one better. There were two lines of interconnected imagery and "and heaven awaits" functioned better as the "ah ha" moment. Think of the first two lines as being one image (or thought), and the 3rd line the summation of the first two. Your 1st haiku is really, really good.
Your second reads like 3 separate sentences and your 3rd haiku, you have a totally stunning first two lines! "in the streets of gold and in the arms of Jesus" is as beautiful as it is inspirational but doesn't seem to work with your satori.
I don't know why you changed it but I read your other reviews and believe me; I can relate. I've done the same thing myself; jump for the edit button. I know why you capitalized certain words but haiku doesn't use them except for proper nouns like "Jesus"
Please don't go running for the edit button. Trust your instincts. Your first edition worked much better.
Forgive me for being long-winded here but I get nervous when giving someone this kind.of rating. Change the caps except for Jesus and rethink your 3rd stanza and I can raise your rating. Just do this SLOWLY please. It's hard to write in any kind of state of panic. haiku are very very hard to write despite their brevity so pat yourself on the back for even getting through one!
Hugs,
Katiemaedead
Now you're talking! I knew you could do it! I updated your rating.
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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This is really lovely and you have one heck of a good 3rd line, (satori) to work with.
Did you change this? I liked the first one better. There were two lines of interconnected imagery and "and heaven awaits" functioned better as the "ah ha" moment. Think of the first two lines as being one image (or thought), and the 3rd line the summation of the first two. Your 1st haiku is really, really good.
Your second reads like 3 separate sentences and your 3rd haiku, you have a totally stunning first two lines! "in the streets of gold and in the arms of Jesus" is as beautiful as it is inspirational but doesn't seem to work with your satori.
I don't know why you changed it but I read your other reviews and believe me; I can relate. I've done the same thing myself; jump for the edit button. I know why you capitalized certain words but haiku doesn't use them except for proper nouns like "Jesus"
Please don't go running for the edit button. Trust your instincts. Your first edition worked much better.
Forgive me for being long-winded here but I get nervous when giving someone this kind.of rating. Change the caps except for Jesus and rethink your 3rd stanza and I can raise your rating. Just do this SLOWLY please. It's hard to write in any kind of state of panic. haiku are very very hard to write despite their brevity so pat yourself on the back for even getting through one!
Hugs,
Katiemaedead
Now you're talking! I knew you could do it! I updated your rating.
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 14-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2023
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Thanks Katie. This has been been a nightmare as I thought all these recommendations were just that and not rules. I will never do this again. I just won a 5/7/5 at midnight and never had such rules thrown at me.
I om not talking about you, but everyone who kept making a big deal of everything l did. l will stick to real poetry for now on. Thank you tho for your help. I.have only done a few haikus and it is a shame that you have to worry about being dq'd for capping a belonging of God's. I have always done that but rules are rules. Thanks again.
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Oops. I forgot God needs to be capitalized as well
I've been in the nightmare zone myself trying to write haiku. You're not alone!