After-Mask
Avoid that Mask!16 total reviews
Comment from karenina
This stunned me. So very powerful to see the links in the chain from thrown rock to...thrown rock! I'm reading this in October but truly find it hard to believe this study in consequences wasn't the winner!
It's a winner in my book!
Karenina
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This stunned me. So very powerful to see the links in the chain from thrown rock to...thrown rock! I'm reading this in October but truly find it hard to believe this study in consequences wasn't the winner!
It's a winner in my book!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
Comment from royowen
Talk about sliding doors, it tells two stories, one that is and one that might have been. We probably don't know what would've happened if we'd turned left instead of right, yep, only speculation, but true, consequences are always the result of decision making, great story, blessings, Roy
Typo : mowed down by (a) machine gun.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Talk about sliding doors, it tells two stories, one that is and one that might have been. We probably don't know what would've happened if we'd turned left instead of right, yep, only speculation, but true, consequences are always the result of decision making, great story, blessings, Roy
Typo : mowed down by (a) machine gun.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you for writing and many blessings and happy trails to you!
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Most welcome
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, Jim, you have created a new definition for what goes around, comes around. Very creative story. I have read some good entries for this contest, and this one is as creative as any I have seen, good work, and good luck. Terry.
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LOL, Jim, you have created a new definition for what goes around, comes around. Very creative story. I have read some good entries for this contest, and this one is as creative as any I have seen, good work, and good luck. Terry.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry I missed this for the contest, Jim. This is great and with a word of caution inside. Well done, my friend. A compelling, gripping write. I hope this did well in the vote. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
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Sorry I missed this for the contest, Jim. This is great and with a word of caution inside. Well done, my friend. A compelling, gripping write. I hope this did well in the vote. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
Comment from Andrea Kepple
Your story is quite a rollercoaster ride. I like how you provided the explanation for the rock throwing at the end of the story at least that's how I'm reading the story. I also like how you are showing the ripple effect that one incident can have through other people's lives.
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Your story is quite a rollercoaster ride. I like how you provided the explanation for the rock throwing at the end of the story at least that's how I'm reading the story. I also like how you are showing the ripple effect that one incident can have through other people's lives.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
Comment from Julie Lau
What a chain of disasters, started with just one thrown rock. I always dreaded those rock-throwing boys - now that just proves me right! Best of luck in the competition - you write economically and well, and tell a great story. Just one thing... it STANK of old sweat.
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What a chain of disasters, started with just one thrown rock. I always dreaded those rock-throwing boys - now that just proves me right! Best of luck in the competition - you write economically and well, and tell a great story. Just one thing... it STANK of old sweat.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wow. Good thing this is a 'blind' contest. Any way that you can keep it anonymous if you win?
"Officer, all I did was say 'boo!'" and before I knew it half the town was dead.
Good luck in the contest.
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Wow. Good thing this is a 'blind' contest. Any way that you can keep it anonymous if you win?
"Officer, all I did was say 'boo!'" and before I knew it half the town was dead.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting story you have penned, but it is very sad also. Sometimes like that happen, but I am thankful that didn't happen to any of my family members. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very interesting story you have penned, but it is very sad also. Sometimes like that happen, but I am thankful that didn't happen to any of my family members. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
Comment from estory
This was a more imaginative spin on the opening line for this contest, I think you did a good job taking the line and running with it, bringing to light all the interconnected bad events that grew and spread from this one innocent moment of trying to scare a kid with a mask. It really digs a bit deeper than the scratch on the surface, and that's why I liked it. It shows that even what we think of as small things, can have a big effect on lives, and maybe many interconnected lives. It makes you stop and think. estory
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This was a more imaginative spin on the opening line for this contest, I think you did a good job taking the line and running with it, bringing to light all the interconnected bad events that grew and spread from this one innocent moment of trying to scare a kid with a mask. It really digs a bit deeper than the scratch on the surface, and that's why I liked it. It shows that even what we think of as small things, can have a big effect on lives, and maybe many interconnected lives. It makes you stop and think. estory
Comment Written 08-Aug-2023
Comment from JT traveller
Oh my goodness! I hope this is not a true tale. How heartbreaking for all involved. A good write which engaged me from beginning to end.
Life is full of misery and generational torment.
I wish you a wonderful life. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Oh my goodness! I hope this is not a true tale. How heartbreaking for all involved. A good write which engaged me from beginning to end.
Life is full of misery and generational torment.
I wish you a wonderful life. Jacqueline
Comment Written 07-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Not true. It came from my infinitesimal small brain.