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Comment from Eleri
You have mastered the Minute poem well here and produced a thought provoking poem - well done. The rhyming is great accept that you have used 'me' twice as an end rhyme in the first stanza. I would have tried to avoid doing this if possible.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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You have mastered the Minute poem well here and produced a thought provoking poem - well done. The rhyming is great accept that you have used 'me' twice as an end rhyme in the first stanza. I would have tried to avoid doing this if possible.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I was struggling with a way to use a different word but couldn't and keep the same idea. Thanks for seeing that. I value your input.
Comment from Bill Schott
This minute poem, Contemplation, has the proper formatting and gives credit for healing to the simple relaxation and disengagement from the pressures that deplete the soul.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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This minute poem, Contemplation, has the proper formatting and gives credit for healing to the simple relaxation and disengagement from the pressures that deplete the soul.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement and stars.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Minute poems are usually written in iambic metre Michelle, but this is probably not required for this contest, however it would help your poe to flow if the metre was consistent. I always think metre in minute poems adds the magic, I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Minute poems are usually written in iambic metre Michelle, but this is probably not required for this contest, however it would help your poe to flow if the metre was consistent. I always think metre in minute poems adds the magic, I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I wanted to get the rhythm but will try again. Thank you.
Comment from PENofFIRE
This a well-written poem. I like the way you placed the words; each line is a quick response to God's ability to help in times of need. I wish you the best in the contest.
PenofFire
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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This a well-written poem. I like the way you placed the words; each line is a quick response to God's ability to help in times of need. I wish you the best in the contest.
PenofFire
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I could relate to your poem. It's well written and every word was well chosen. I was thinking of panic attacks I've had, or life after my bad ex husband. It is for the reader to wonder. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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I could relate to your poem. It's well written and every word was well chosen. I was thinking of panic attacks I've had, or life after my bad ex husband. It is for the reader to wonder. Best wishes!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Glad you could relate but also sad you could relate. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Quite a mystery pome, and if you say that love heals everything: "But contemplation drew You near.
You took the fear.
What did I hear?
Silence was dear." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Quite a mystery pome, and if you say that love heals everything: "But contemplation drew You near.
You took the fear.
What did I hear?
Silence was dear." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement and stars.