2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Amidst Burning Stars".
20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow, this is so sad and heart-breaking and I have felt pain like this at times in my life. This tale of betrayal is well composed and I enjoyed your touching words, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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Wow, this is so sad and heart-breaking and I have felt pain like this at times in my life. This tale of betrayal is well composed and I enjoyed your touching words, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 04-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, my friend. I hope you are having a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Beautifully sad, we do grieve when we lose a love, they say time heals but rejection can be very difficult during that time, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Beautifully sad, we do grieve when we lose a love, they say time heals but rejection can be very difficult during that time, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
I had to wait to review this stunning free verse... there was no way I would come a knockin' without a star-studded supply.
I'm a real fan of your free verses... and I know you are the undisputed Queen of short form... but, the free verses expand into a scene where mind's eye can absorb the meaning and intent within a story.
There is so much sadness, desperation and pain within a collective of a confused and hurting-lost soul.
Who could be as low to email someone they supposedly loved, or had loved a 'dear Jane' letter... and more so digging the knife in with the confession of a meeting someone else who made a 'better fit'.
Whilst I don't like the thought of all the pain and heartache... poems that are composed with these elements are for me, so impacting... they reach right into one's soul and tug at every heart string. Yes, something that a lot of us at one point or another have felt and experienced in so-called love.
The all-over hurt that not only aches through one's entirety and leaves a hole in the pit of a stomach that has no end... but the loss part of one's self when two becomes one. It's then the mind-fields of lost love explode into a confusion that clouds the senses... I guess it's our grieving period of misery and self doubt?
This is free verse poem is so exceptionally emotionally charged, I felt every cut!
I could say... hey Gypsy(((((((( I loved this verse, this line, this section of the poem... but no, everything slotted into a picture of heartache and pain... every word, every line, every verse, until the story concluded... and yet it didn't... because your last line says it all. The ones who love the hardest, fall the hardest, with all there love and being, always feel the echo of the flame in their heart.
Stunning Renia Lobo Gitana!
With our thoughts we create...
self-worth loving.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I had to wait to review this stunning free verse... there was no way I would come a knockin' without a star-studded supply.
I'm a real fan of your free verses... and I know you are the undisputed Queen of short form... but, the free verses expand into a scene where mind's eye can absorb the meaning and intent within a story.
There is so much sadness, desperation and pain within a collective of a confused and hurting-lost soul.
Who could be as low to email someone they supposedly loved, or had loved a 'dear Jane' letter... and more so digging the knife in with the confession of a meeting someone else who made a 'better fit'.
Whilst I don't like the thought of all the pain and heartache... poems that are composed with these elements are for me, so impacting... they reach right into one's soul and tug at every heart string. Yes, something that a lot of us at one point or another have felt and experienced in so-called love.
The all-over hurt that not only aches through one's entirety and leaves a hole in the pit of a stomach that has no end... but the loss part of one's self when two becomes one. It's then the mind-fields of lost love explode into a confusion that clouds the senses... I guess it's our grieving period of misery and self doubt?
This is free verse poem is so exceptionally emotionally charged, I felt every cut!
I could say... hey Gypsy(((((((( I loved this verse, this line, this section of the poem... but no, everything slotted into a picture of heartache and pain... every word, every line, every verse, until the story concluded... and yet it didn't... because your last line says it all. The ones who love the hardest, fall the hardest, with all there love and being, always feel the echo of the flame in their heart.
Stunning Renia Lobo Gitana!
With our thoughts we create...
self-worth loving.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Hello, James,
Thank you for the exceptional six stars review.
Have I mentioned I love your reviews? :) once or twice. You give such detailed and insightful feedback that I feel completely heard. One day I will tell you the details behind the poem.
If I need more room to express what I feel, free verse is my go to poem. It does take me longer to write and edit but it came out alright and people relate and connect at a deep level.
Okay, it's dinner time. Big big hugs, James.
Besitos y abrazos
Marival ❤️
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Gypsy. I enjoyed reading your moving poetry and think you did a fine job on the composition, meaning and presentation. Well done! I enjoyed reading it, my friend.
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Hello Gypsy. I enjoyed reading your moving poetry and think you did a fine job on the composition, meaning and presentation. Well done! I enjoyed reading it, my friend.
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Amidst Burning Stars, touches on the sensitive issue of being Dear Gypsyed while still holding on to the memories that do not seem to lead to this result.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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This free verse, Amidst Burning Stars, touches on the sensitive issue of being Dear Gypsyed while still holding on to the memories that do not seem to lead to this result.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
What a sad free verse, Gypsy. This was so sad that they were words of devastation, who would have thought that this was possible. It was almost great that showed through. The sense that this was such a sad free verse that it became well done. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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What a sad free verse, Gypsy. This was so sad that they were words of devastation, who would have thought that this was possible. It was almost great that showed through. The sense that this was such a sad free verse that it became well done. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Ending a relationship through and email is an example of a weakling. If he isn't man enough to face the person he's leaving, then he's really not man enough to be a loving relationship. This once again is a complete package. The words you chose were perfect for evoking the emotion.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Ending a relationship through and email is an example of a weakling. If he isn't man enough to face the person he's leaving, then he's really not man enough to be a loving relationship. This once again is a complete package. The words you chose were perfect for evoking the emotion.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for understanding and for the excellent review. May you have a wonderful day, Barbara.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This is a sad poem. The man is a coward to break up in an email. She remembers a strong love that somehow changed on his part but not hers.
Though it would be best to try to move on.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Hi MariVal,
This is a sad poem. The man is a coward to break up in an email. She remembers a strong love that somehow changed on his part but not hers.
Though it would be best to try to move on.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for understanding and for the excellent review. May you have a wonderful day, Joan.
Gypsy hugs
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No problem, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from zanya
Amazing isn't it the sheer power of words to convey our most profound emotions - amply illustrated here with a poem full of words so precisely chosen
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Amazing isn't it the sheer power of words to convey our most profound emotions - amply illustrated here with a poem full of words so precisely chosen
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for understanding and for the exceptional six stars review. May you have a wonderful day, Zanya.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
reminds me of adele's songs lol
this was sad, yet hopeful
like how each stanza is like a new phase in acceptance and moving on
nice free verse
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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reminds me of adele's songs lol
this was sad, yet hopeful
like how each stanza is like a new phase in acceptance and moving on
nice free verse
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for understanding and for the excellent review. May you have a wonderful day, Shelley.
Gypsy hugs