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One Man's Calling

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Comment from BethShelby
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This is another interesting chapter in the renewed life of Ben. It seems he was healed of his problems and not he has the ability to heal others. I'm anxious to see what God has in mine for him next.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
    Thank you. And thank you immensely for the six stars!
    Yes, people make huge mistakes when they lay claim to what God does through them.
Comment from Jay Squires
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There are a lot of empty tents waiting for Ben. Hey, Walter, sorry I'm late in getting to this. I've been so busy off FS, working on getting my books published. This has been hanging on my 'bookshelf' for a couple of days. You sure have developed a great character in Ben ... and this new book is working!

Jay

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
    Thank you. I appreciate your input.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is a really nice part to the story. Ben being able to fix Hank's back with the family sharing in the blessing makes it very special. It doesn't seem as if Ben's mission has changed in any way, just the place he's supposed to go. I didn't understand why Ben told Hank that he had fourteen children. Maybe you should explain that a bit more.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
    Ben was referencing Hank's son's age. I fixed it and made it more clear.
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from JSD
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A real mix here of the spiritual and the temporal. I enjoyed your writing which is fast paced, and your dialogue has an impressive authenticity. After reading your introduction, I'm glad I didn't feel that God was being forced on me too much. It was instead a really good read. Thank you.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
    Thank you.
    Some of the chapters are more weighted than others, depending on the action and necessary background set up stuff.
Comment from Wendy G
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Interesting that he looks so much like Hank! He is still doing a good work and it was a good idea to make a connection for Bobby with Jesus being raised by Josph who was not his natural father. Clever. He always had the right way of going about things.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
    Thank you.
    I found it peculiar (but understandable) that so many have depicted Christ as a Caucasian.
    Thanks for your very kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
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A moving chapter! I don't know how the lookalike feature will play in your upcoming plot development but it's interesting. Great idea of Ben to encourage Bobby to see he is loved and that Jesus was raised by Joseph, not His real father.

Ben touched Ben on the top of (Ben touched Hank?)

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Grrrr How could I do that?
    How could that error pass by 7 other reviewers???
    Thank you for your great review.
reply by lyenochka on 15-Jun-2023
    Your characters looked too much alike to you, too! 😊
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Hmmmm
    Except for Ben and Hank, I've tried to give them distinction.
    Maybe try harder?
reply by lyenochka on 15-Jun-2023
    Sounds good. You can make Hank have some quirks that are uniquely him.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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This is a wonderful chapter, Wayne. Teen age ers are really hard to control without the influence of God in their lives. I was fortunate to have been raised by Christian parents but I still did some things they never knew about, like smoking cigarettes'. LOL It looked so cool to me! Silly girl. Well done. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Thank you.
    (At least it wasn't crack cocaine!)
Comment from Jim Wile
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Ah, great to see Ben back in action, Wayne. This was a heartwarming chapter to see how Ben brought healing to this family. So glad you decided to send Ben on another mission to answer God's calling. Well done, my friend. Jim

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Thank you.
    You and both knew that it wasn't Ben's time to die.
    smiley face here
Comment from papa55mike
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That's how you do it, work a miracle and then slip out the door. I love this! Please check this one thing; recalling his agony. (")Anyway. You need a quotation mark before anyway. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your project!

Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Thank you. And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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I found this amusing that Ben was taken for Hank, and just went along with it, but I think you could have added a sentence to show his puzzlement or somesuch, explaining that he was totally at sea. Unless I missed a bit, Ben has developed a new skill, the laying of hands. Nicely brought in. kay

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Thank you. I'll go back and check the puzzlement area.
    You were right. I added a sentence. Thank you.