A Peck on the Cheek
Contest entry38 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
John, this is a very good entry for this contest. You created a love affair that brought two people together in an unusual way at their old school. Your great imagination has executed the story flawlessly. Terry.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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John, this is a very good entry for this contest. You created a love affair that brought two people together in an unusual way at their old school. Your great imagination has executed the story flawlessly. Terry.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Terry, your review is very much appreciated.
John
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi John,
This is well-written for the writing prompt, "Imagine the romance!" You've created two original fictional characters, and yet we only know her name, Marie.
They found a good place to meet in secret, the elementary school where they once worked together... teachers, perhaps? custodians?
There are a lot of "affairs" going on these days. We used to live beside a couple, who we thought were in love. We even ran into them one day at New River Beach, walking hand-in-hand with cold salty waves gnawing their ankles. All seemed perfect. But one day, shortly after New Years celebrations, a knock came to our door... it was a detective! He asked if we had ever seen any trouble at our neighbors. We hadn't, of course. Their son played with our oldest son on a regular basis. We wondered what was the problem, and he told us the man was dead... suicide. We were shocked! Apparently his wife was having an affair with one of his co-workers, and it had been going on for a couple of years! The secret lovers had planned it out... to tell their significant others right after the holiday. The police believed the husband was bent on killing his wife and co-worker, but couldn't find them. He parked at a nearby beach and shot himself in the neck. Crazy stuff, eh? "Imagine the romance" the secret lovers had to live with after that bit of news!
Good Luck with the contest, John!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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Hi John,
This is well-written for the writing prompt, "Imagine the romance!" You've created two original fictional characters, and yet we only know her name, Marie.
They found a good place to meet in secret, the elementary school where they once worked together... teachers, perhaps? custodians?
There are a lot of "affairs" going on these days. We used to live beside a couple, who we thought were in love. We even ran into them one day at New River Beach, walking hand-in-hand with cold salty waves gnawing their ankles. All seemed perfect. But one day, shortly after New Years celebrations, a knock came to our door... it was a detective! He asked if we had ever seen any trouble at our neighbors. We hadn't, of course. Their son played with our oldest son on a regular basis. We wondered what was the problem, and he told us the man was dead... suicide. We were shocked! Apparently his wife was having an affair with one of his co-workers, and it had been going on for a couple of years! The secret lovers had planned it out... to tell their significant others right after the holiday. The police believed the husband was bent on killing his wife and co-worker, but couldn't find them. He parked at a nearby beach and shot himself in the neck. Crazy stuff, eh? "Imagine the romance" the secret lovers had to live with after that bit of news!
Good Luck with the contest, John!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2023
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So, though my story was fictitious, you know of a real life scenario. Crazy stuff.
Wow, thank you for those stars?
John
Comment from Tpa
Superb and delightful story that rendered my interest from the beginning to a surprise twist at the end. A marvelous scribe of action through and through that can only surmise how created you are.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Superb and delightful story that rendered my interest from the beginning to a surprise twist at the end. A marvelous scribe of action through and through that can only surmise how created you are.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your time to read and share with me. Also for all those stars, wow.
John
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, sir, as much as we'd all hate to admit it, there's a little cheater in all of us in the right situation when it comes down to it. But only once in a lifetime would we ever follow through. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Yes, sir, as much as we'd all hate to admit it, there's a little cheater in all of us in the right situation when it comes down to it. But only once in a lifetime would we ever follow through. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thanks Ric for the fantastic review. I appreciate it.
John
Comment from Soledadpaz
It is often that friendship turns to love, as this couple shows in this warm and comforting story.
Excellent imagery. I can actually see them enjoying their time together. Well done!
Sol
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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It is often that friendship turns to love, as this couple shows in this warm and comforting story.
Excellent imagery. I can actually see them enjoying their time together. Well done!
Sol
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Sol. I appreciate your reading my post and your kind words.
John
Comment from mermaids
Excellent writing here of two people in love who met at work but are married to others. You have vivid descriptions that create a clear scene and the love between the two people comes through clearly. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Excellent writing here of two people in love who met at work but are married to others. You have vivid descriptions that create a clear scene and the love between the two people comes through clearly. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you do much. I appreciate you reading my post.
John
Comment from Ulla
This is the sweetest story for the contest..I loved it. They developed a real friendship which slowly turned into true love. But neither wanted to upset their respective spouses. Good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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This is the sweetest story for the contest..I loved it. They developed a real friendship which slowly turned into true love. But neither wanted to upset their respective spouses. Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much,,Ulla.
Always appreciate your reviews.
John
Comment from w.j.debi
Your descriptive narrative is engaging. I felt like I was watching a movie and I was rooting for them. The 'what could have been' feeling reminds them they are married to other people and has them cherishing their stolen moments of romance.
I see you took second in the contest. Congratulations on a story well written.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Your descriptive narrative is engaging. I felt like I was watching a movie and I was rooting for them. The 'what could have been' feeling reminds them they are married to other people and has them cherishing their stolen moments of romance.
I see you took second in the contest. Congratulations on a story well written.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Debi. I always appreciate your stopping by.
John
Comment from royowen
How interesting, I have had that affinity with someone, but at the same time adoring the person I'm with, I'm not going to illuminate it anymore, but well done, but simply a great post, beautifully and imaginatively written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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How interesting, I have had that affinity with someone, but at the same time adoring the person I'm with, I'm not going to illuminate it anymore, but well done, but simply a great post, beautifully and imaginatively written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Roy. Always appreciate your good word.
John
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Most welcome
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I started to review this, and backed out. This time I could do it, albeit reluctantly. After all, you did call it fiction, and it was in response to a writing prompt, not ... Anyway, well written piece on stolen emotions.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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I started to review this, and backed out. This time I could do it, albeit reluctantly. After all, you did call it fiction, and it was in response to a writing prompt, not ... Anyway, well written piece on stolen emotions.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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The contest called for fictional characters and setting. Exactly what I did.
I appreciate your reading my post.
John
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Whew! I feel better.