Visions of Grandeur
My guilty pleasure15 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You were tornadic in this piece. A Tilt-a-Whirl going full speed ahead, not that it has any choice. I don't think that ride had a reverse. Still, the imaginative used in this piece was turning back the pages of time.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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You were tornadic in this piece. A Tilt-a-Whirl going full speed ahead, not that it has any choice. I don't think that ride had a reverse. Still, the imaginative used in this piece was turning back the pages of time.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Ben returns to the story in part B.
Comment from Annmuma
Well, I think I just read the winning entry!!!! Super creative and spellbinding from word one until the last one. I love it. Not only well-written, but so easy for all of our 'child inside' to identify with on whatever basis works for each of us. Love it and good luck. ann
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Well, I think I just read the winning entry!!!! Super creative and spellbinding from word one until the last one. I love it. Not only well-written, but so easy for all of our 'child inside' to identify with on whatever basis works for each of us. Love it and good luck. ann
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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My wife says that you're gonna give the big head! And she'll just have to pop it again.
Thank you for your very kind review!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Great story, Wayne; I was a kid who walked around being the bravest, prettiest, and smartest kid in the school and projects in my own stories.
A kid by the name of Sylvester has a challenge right out of the gate. Perfectly told and truly an enjoyable read from beginning to end.
Best wishes in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Great story, Wayne; I was a kid who walked around being the bravest, prettiest, and smartest kid in the school and projects in my own stories.
A kid by the name of Sylvester has a challenge right out of the gate. Perfectly told and truly an enjoyable read from beginning to end.
Best wishes in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review!
Comment from jmdg1954
Shucks... a kid named Sylvester, a baseball MVP with a fingertip touching hook slide who instantly becomes a superhero! What a life!
Great story, Wayne. I could've kept on reading to see how he saves mankind!
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Shucks... a kid named Sylvester, a baseball MVP with a fingertip touching hook slide who instantly becomes a superhero! What a life!
Great story, Wayne. I could've kept on reading to see how he saves mankind!
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
And thank you for the six stars!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This story was totally captivating. I could easily relate to Sylvester as he sat at his computer hearing his mother call, and thinking of the things he wished he had the nerve to say. That scene took me back to my childhood. I enjoyed the account of Sylvester's choices for outside entertainment. You put me in the scene. But, my exhilaration on the baseball field warrants six stars. When Marine Corps One came for Sylvester (in his story), your descriptions allowed me to see it and feel it. I only wish this story was longer. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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This story was totally captivating. I could easily relate to Sylvester as he sat at his computer hearing his mother call, and thinking of the things he wished he had the nerve to say. That scene took me back to my childhood. I enjoyed the account of Sylvester's choices for outside entertainment. You put me in the scene. But, my exhilaration on the baseball field warrants six stars. When Marine Corps One came for Sylvester (in his story), your descriptions allowed me to see it and feel it. I only wish this story was longer. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your terrific review.
And thank you for the six stars!
Comment from eliz100
I think you captured the essence of a teenager and his mom. I liked the intertwining of the story in Sylvester's head and his family life. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I think you captured the essence of a teenager and his mom. I liked the intertwining of the story in Sylvester's head and his family life. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
Wow! I had to glance down to make sure I had another six while I was still in the baseball scene!
I went into a hook slide, dodged the tag and caught the plate with my fingertips! I was the MVP of the series! [This was some good writing, right down to the hook-slide and catching the plate with your fingertips. Very good!]
One more contest it would be foolhardy for me to enter!
Jay
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Wow! I had to glance down to make sure I had another six while I was still in the baseball scene!
I went into a hook slide, dodged the tag and caught the plate with my fingertips! I was the MVP of the series! [This was some good writing, right down to the hook-slide and catching the plate with your fingertips. Very good!]
One more contest it would be foolhardy for me to enter!
Jay
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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lol
Thank you for your terrific review.
And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from Mary Shifman
I enjoyed this peak into a young boy's imagination. When I was a kid, I was always making up stories in my head when we took the forty mile drive to the city and other time when I was bored. Of course, I was always the main character and my stories were usually westerns. I was big into westerns when growing up. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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I enjoyed this peak into a young boy's imagination. When I was a kid, I was always making up stories in my head when we took the forty mile drive to the city and other time when I was bored. Of course, I was always the main character and my stories were usually westerns. I was big into westerns when growing up. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
As I said, I may suffer of arrested development.
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Maybe, but there's nothing wrong with that. Your story is delightful.,
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, Wayne, I don't do blind contests anymore...sorry about that. But you have a good story, and what could be more fun than an active imagination and being a baseball hero and superagent? Indulging in this guilty pleasure is very fun. I think Sly and Ohmie could be buddies who have adventures. Excellent work, Thank you for entering the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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LOL, Wayne, I don't do blind contests anymore...sorry about that. But you have a good story, and what could be more fun than an active imagination and being a baseball hero and superagent? Indulging in this guilty pleasure is very fun. I think Sly and Ohmie could be buddies who have adventures. Excellent work, Thank you for entering the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A captivating story! I enjoyed it a lot. It was imaginative and probably quite relatable to many families and kids these days. If it's a teeny bit autobiographical, that's fine too. Everyone wishes they could be a hero at one time or another. Old and young and in between! Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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A captivating story! I enjoyed it a lot. It was imaginative and probably quite relatable to many families and kids these days. If it's a teeny bit autobiographical, that's fine too. Everyone wishes they could be a hero at one time or another. Old and young and in between! Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Now, if you will excuse me, I have to go save the world.