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Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
Your 4 descriptive words weave an engaging topic about matter, which is the element what forms our entire world.
NB. Unfortunately, Your 4 descriptive words
Chatter
Batter
Matter
Shatter
Are in the wrong position.
They must be placed between the 5th and 8 th syllable.
The last word on both lines ( 9th syllable ) must instead rhyme.
Looking forward to seeing your edited version!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Ciao mystery poet,
Your 4 descriptive words weave an engaging topic about matter, which is the element what forms our entire world.
NB. Unfortunately, Your 4 descriptive words
Chatter
Batter
Matter
Shatter
Are in the wrong position.
They must be placed between the 5th and 8 th syllable.
The last word on both lines ( 9th syllable ) must instead rhyme.
Looking forward to seeing your edited version!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your comments and for letting me know that more than sure if I have it right or not. Thank you I will change that! To the time you took to do my review. I appreciate it very much have a great night.
Comment from JT traveller
A profound, deep, introspective Tyburn poem. Great selection of illustration to complement your words.
A powerful message indeed, words do hurt, whether intentional or not. No amount of apologising can take them back part; particularly if they were posted to social media.
Great work.
Jacqueline
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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A profound, deep, introspective Tyburn poem. Great selection of illustration to complement your words.
A powerful message indeed, words do hurt, whether intentional or not. No amount of apologising can take them back part; particularly if they were posted to social media.
Great work.
Jacqueline
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you Jacqueline I'm glad you like it. It's tough one to wrap my brain around but I managed. I appreciate your kind words and the time it took to do this review always and always will do appreciate that thank you again!
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My pleasure 😊 Have a great day. Jacqueline
Comment from kahpot
This is quite well thought out and very clever, though if I may, the prompt rules ask for is that the four rhyme words are used as the 5th to 8th syllables in the last two lines, you may need to inquire about this, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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This is quite well thought out and very clever, though if I may, the prompt rules ask for is that the four rhyme words are used as the 5th to 8th syllables in the last two lines, you may need to inquire about this, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thank you yes I was just wrestling with that very thing and I've got to make a change here. Thank you very much for pointing that out and thank you very much for looking at this poem. I'm going to rework it just a quebec. I hope you have a great evening thanks again!
