His Wounded Heart
He finds joy at last.27 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh my. How many have I passed without thinking? How often might a simple gesture of kindness have arced the dangerous curve of fate? Ironic this is in a "No Rules Poetry Contest."
The Golden Rule is ricocheting in my brain!
Matthew 7:12
"Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you."
Thank you for reminding me...
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Oh my. How many have I passed without thinking? How often might a simple gesture of kindness have arced the dangerous curve of fate? Ironic this is in a "No Rules Poetry Contest."
The Golden Rule is ricocheting in my brain!
Matthew 7:12
"Do to others whatever you would like them to do to you."
Thank you for reminding me...
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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I think we're all guilty of passing by without a thought. Thanks for reviewing.
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I'll try harder...
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, His Wounded Heart, depicts the homeless, likely alcoholic drifter, existing in a society that has already deemed him dead. Hisbest life is one without thoughts or breathing.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This poem, His Wounded Heart, depicts the homeless, likely alcoholic drifter, existing in a society that has already deemed him dead. Hisbest life is one without thoughts or breathing.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from royowen
One forgets that mono matter who a person is and no matter whether he's wealthy or not, that person has infinite worth, although society measures worth in a much different way, it seems a homeless is more likely to die this way, beautifully written Yvonne, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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One forgets that mono matter who a person is and no matter whether he's wealthy or not, that person has infinite worth, although society measures worth in a much different way, it seems a homeless is more likely to die this way, beautifully written Yvonne, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
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Welcome
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Yvonne,
this is a rather sad poem. Frankly, I never know what to make of the homeless. I see some young men who appear to be healthy enough to get work, standing on street corners or at Wal-Mart wanting a hand out. I know I'm guilty of judging them. However, I do support organizations who feed them and one place in town offers them a chance to get a shower once or twice a week and to use a laundry facility. I firmly believe in giving people a helping hand, but I don't believe in enabling behavior that becomes a burden on society. Good luck in the contest gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Hello Yvonne,
this is a rather sad poem. Frankly, I never know what to make of the homeless. I see some young men who appear to be healthy enough to get work, standing on street corners or at Wal-Mart wanting a hand out. I know I'm guilty of judging them. However, I do support organizations who feed them and one place in town offers them a chance to get a shower once or twice a week and to use a laundry facility. I firmly believe in giving people a helping hand, but I don't believe in enabling behavior that becomes a burden on society. Good luck in the contest gal.
Tom
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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I agree. I give monthly to the Salvation Army because I know they do good work. I can pretty much tell which ones standing on the corner truly need help.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Yvonne,
This poem is a good reminder that we should treat the need and homeless as the real people they are. So many are treated so badly.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contests.
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Hi Yvonne,
This poem is a good reminder that we should treat the need and homeless as the real people they are. So many are treated so badly.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contests.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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I agree. Thanks for reviewing.
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You're welcome, Yvonne.
Joan
Comment from Kaiku
The last couple of lines, are you suggesting he has passed or has gone to sleep where dreams take him to his childhood? Very nice visual and the words offered a strong picture as well.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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The last couple of lines, are you suggesting he has passed or has gone to sleep where dreams take him to his childhood? Very nice visual and the words offered a strong picture as well.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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He died. Thanks for reviewing.
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That is what I thought. Thanks.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This contest entry it filled with societal issues, grief, and emotions. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. It touched my heart and is extremely well written. I want to wish you luck with the contest, but I feel it's a winner.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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This contest entry it filled with societal issues, grief, and emotions. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. It touched my heart and is extremely well written. I want to wish you luck with the contest, but I feel it's a winner.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate that!
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A sad and heart-wrenching poem about how one man's downward life spiral costs him his family.
Beautifully written and presented.
I have just one thought, I wonder if in the third paragraph if disgust and distrust should be in reversed places?
Of course, it is just a thought and does not distract from your beautifully worded poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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A sad and heart-wrenching poem about how one man's downward life spiral costs him his family.
Beautifully written and presented.
I have just one thought, I wonder if in the third paragraph if disgust and distrust should be in reversed places?
Of course, it is just a thought and does not distract from your beautifully worded poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
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Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is excellent, Yvonne. From the start, the
picture is perfect and adds to the tome of your well chosen
words. I like the color scheme and the use of end rhymes.
Your words are descriptive with a great, but poignant, story to
tell. Yes, the man had a wounded heart and so many things lead
to that outcome. The ran adds to his sadness as he searches
for some kind of shelter. While he does, he thinks of his long gone
family. He knows his life is in a and way, yet doesn't have the
strength or will power to improve it. All he can think of is happier
times when he was young. Our country needs to do more to help
those in this situation. It's a sad commentary on our society and
people who turn away from him (and others).
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Your contest entry is excellent, Yvonne. From the start, the
picture is perfect and adds to the tome of your well chosen
words. I like the color scheme and the use of end rhymes.
Your words are descriptive with a great, but poignant, story to
tell. Yes, the man had a wounded heart and so many things lead
to that outcome. The ran adds to his sadness as he searches
for some kind of shelter. While he does, he thinks of his long gone
family. He knows his life is in a and way, yet doesn't have the
strength or will power to improve it. All he can think of is happier
times when he was young. Our country needs to do more to help
those in this situation. It's a sad commentary on our society and
people who turn away from him (and others).
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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We never know what a person's been through, and it's uncharitable to judge them. Thanks for a great review.
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Thank you for this wonderful review!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
A poem that captures the pathos and desperation suffered by the flotsam and jetsam of our society. They seem to have increased in recent times and the gap between rich and poor is wider than in the Nineteenth century!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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A poem that captures the pathos and desperation suffered by the flotsam and jetsam of our society. They seem to have increased in recent times and the gap between rich and poor is wider than in the Nineteenth century!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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We never know what a person's been through an shouldn't judge them, or ignore them. Thankss for reviewing.
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All best wishes!