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Comment from jessizero
The sentence about his sister is a comma splice. Other than that, I enjoyed your sweet little story about welcoming Tom home. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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The sentence about his sister is a comma splice. Other than that, I enjoyed your sweet little story about welcoming Tom home. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Thirty hours of flying would render anyone near deaf. I'm sure Tome was elated once he realized the family was there to greet him, even if he didn't hear their initial shout of "Surprise." Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
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Thirty hours of flying would render anyone near deaf. I'm sure Tome was elated once he realized the family was there to greet him, even if he didn't hear their initial shout of "Surprise." Great story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You told a story just in a few words. You had a beginning, a plot, and an ending. The ending was definitely a surprise. Welcome Home Traveler ... .so glad you are safe and sound.
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You told a story just in a few words. You had a beginning, a plot, and an ending. The ending was definitely a surprise. Welcome Home Traveler ... .so glad you are safe and sound.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful poem entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest. That was a happy surprise. :)
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Wonderful poem entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest. That was a happy surprise. :)
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Ricky1024
"Home" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
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"Home" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A fictional account of a true event?? How is that possible? This was a good 80-word story. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. The plot is rushed but cannot be helped in such a short narrative. The visual fits. Good luck in the text.
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A fictional account of a true event?? How is that possible? This was a good 80-word story. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated. The plot is rushed but cannot be helped in such a short narrative. The visual fits. Good luck in the text.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an uplifting story as Tom was so welcomed by his family, how lovely, this story is heartfelt and pleasing and I enjoyed the read, I was entertained and delighted with this post, love Dolly x
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This is an uplifting story as Tom was so welcomed by his family, how lovely, this story is heartfelt and pleasing and I enjoyed the read, I was entertained and delighted with this post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023