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Closure

She went back to get...

12 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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What a touching poem you wrote about a little girl who found a childhood treasure. It was a beautiful poem about a treasure which brought back memories about her life as a little child. Loved it.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
    Thank you so much for reading my poem. :)
Comment from Mary Shifman
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This powerful poem tells a tragic story. It is so well written and it contains the four specified words. The words rhyme well and the meter is excellent. It is an outstanding poem and it deserves a six but unfortunately, I'm all out.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thank you for reading my poem and for this thoughtful review. :)
reply by Mary Shifman on 19-Feb-2023
    You are welcome.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
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Beautiful and very moving.
There is a powerful story in these words.
The description was well painted with the walls, curtains, and the doll.
I wish I had a sixth star to give you for it is just that.
Well done!

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thank you, for both reading my poem and for this nice review.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Exceptional
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A very moving piece. I was gripped by the story. You brought Shelly and her family to life.

I liked that the poem rhymed, and none of the rhymes were forced. Very well-written.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thank you for this exceptional review and for your kind words.. both are very appreciated.
Comment from LisaMay
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This is a powerfully expressed poem, and clearly the best one in the contest so it got my vote. A harsh topic well-handled, the required words integrated with seamless skill.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thank you so much for this great review, it means a lot to me.
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 11 votes!

Our child/teenhood should be the happiest time of our lives.

Sadly, many kids grow up in unloving walls.

Parents are absent or abusive and their young victims are left with deep scars in later life.

Years after they still struggle to overcome the trauma, some find the strength to go back to their childhood home where they suffered.

Have you ever seen trapped in silence with young Kiefer Sutherland?

Here is the link:


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thanks so much for your vote and your insightful comments. I will check out this movie!
Comment from Wendy G
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An excellent poem for the contest. It tells a story, has smooth rhyme and metre, flowing well and incorporating the necessary words with ease. Best wishes for your poem.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
    Thank you for this terrific review, it's very appreciated.
Comment from Kaiku
Exceptional
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Great. Wonderful imagery and use of the required words. You told a sad story that held one in place from beginning to end. Well done and good luck in the writing prompt.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
    Thank you for this exceptional review, I'm honored. :)
reply by Kaiku on 16-Feb-2023
    A pleasure
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a horrible memory of domestic abuse at the hands of a drunken man and alcohol is the cause of many a dispute in the home as it heightens feelings of hate and resentment. Letting go is the only way to move on a moving piece for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
    Thank you for this thoughtful review, I'm always so glad to hear from you. :)
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
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This is a well-written entry to the 4 words contest. I wish the four words were in a different color so they would stand out in the poem. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and is easy to understand. The adult speaker is remembering her childhood and the abuse she and her mom endured. The implication is made that the mother was killed or maimed in some manner in the home. I wish there was more clarity around this implication. The rhyme scheme is done well. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you for this great review. Although implied and not explicitly stated, the behavior of the father led to his taking the mother's life. I appreciate you reading my poem.
reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 16-Feb-2023
    You are welcome.