Family is everything
I love my family7 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Family is Everything" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thank you for sharing this and good luck with your contest.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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"Family is Everything" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thank you for sharing this and good luck with your contest.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 11-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
I came from a large family as well and enjoyed every moment of it.
I always feel sorry for those who have very little family. They really don't know what they are missing, do they?
It does my heart good to hear about your love for your family.
Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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I came from a large family as well and enjoyed every moment of it.
I always feel sorry for those who have very little family. They really don't know what they are missing, do they?
It does my heart good to hear about your love for your family.
Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a beautiful poem about your beautiful, big family, and the love and closeness shows through in your words Joanne. Just one Edit-fun things togethet(r)
Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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This is a beautiful poem about your beautiful, big family, and the love and closeness shows through in your words Joanne. Just one Edit-fun things togethet(r)
Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much
Comment from Mintybee
This was submitted for the family writing prompt contest, and it's full of family. The rhyme scheme is fairly steady, though the formatting at times hides it a bit. You're using rhyming couplets, but sometimes you break up one half of the couplet, which throws off expectations. For example: "We had lots of precious memories living by the sea with Mom and Dad./ There were no cell phones or video games./ We had to make fun with what little we had." There is no reason to break up "There were no cell phones or video games. We had to make fun with what little we had." I think it flows better if you don't, because with the way it's split, it feels at first read like the rhyme scheme has shifted, but it hasn't. It's just the formatting.
Overall, a heartfelt recounting of your family tree. Thank you for sharing your fond and sad family memories.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This was submitted for the family writing prompt contest, and it's full of family. The rhyme scheme is fairly steady, though the formatting at times hides it a bit. You're using rhyming couplets, but sometimes you break up one half of the couplet, which throws off expectations. For example: "We had lots of precious memories living by the sea with Mom and Dad./ There were no cell phones or video games./ We had to make fun with what little we had." There is no reason to break up "There were no cell phones or video games. We had to make fun with what little we had." I think it flows better if you don't, because with the way it's split, it feels at first read like the rhyme scheme has shifted, but it hasn't. It's just the formatting.
Overall, a heartfelt recounting of your family tree. Thank you for sharing your fond and sad family memories.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. Powerful poem about the representation of family. Sorry of the loss of your sister and brother, but the remaining branches will continue to provide lasting memories and strength as it grows with nieces, nephews and cousins.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to a growing tree.
John
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Wow. Powerful poem about the representation of family. Sorry of the loss of your sister and brother, but the remaining branches will continue to provide lasting memories and strength as it grows with nieces, nephews and cousins.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to a growing tree.
John
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Lovely rhymes and sentiments here as you describe your inner feelings for your family and the support they bring and your love you all share, a sweet and endearing write for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Lovely rhymes and sentiments here as you describe your inner feelings for your family and the support they bring and your love you all share, a sweet and endearing write for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Dolly 🙂
Comment from JT traveller
A lovely poem that says a lot about your family and how much they mean to you.
The change in words has made all the difference. It reads so well and is obviously heartfelt without any unwanted distractions.
I did enjoy your poem and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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A lovely poem that says a lot about your family and how much they mean to you.
The change in words has made all the difference. It reads so well and is obviously heartfelt without any unwanted distractions.
I did enjoy your poem and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks
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I fixed it I think it reads better thanks
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I reviewed my score. Hope you have a great week. 😊
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I revisited and realized I had to much repetition thank you
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Thank you. You are a very kind person.
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Thankyou
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Have a fantastic day. Jacqueline 😊