last Thanksgiving
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Comment from prettybluebirds
The artwork you added to your writing made me hungry just looking at it. Your poem is nicely written and a delight to read. You did well with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
The artwork you added to your writing made me hungry just looking at it. Your poem is nicely written and a delight to read. You did well with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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thanks as always
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good poem. The text is an okay size. The message of a past Thanksgiving was clearly stated. The menu sounds mighty yummy to me.
The visual fits perfectly. You need to add an "s" to dinner in this line~Thanksgiving/Christmas
Dinner(s) right
I have two suggestions for your poem.
Firstly, make the font a color of one of the items in the visual. It will make it fit better with the lively and yummy meal. I would select a brown like the turkey.
Secondly, the last line is not connected to the poem. It's like an announcement, and now you have read my poem of a real event. Make that line blend better into the Thanksgiving described for example: Thanksgiving has never been the same since Sam left Arkansas and his Mom's Southern holiday feasts.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
This is a good poem. The text is an okay size. The message of a past Thanksgiving was clearly stated. The menu sounds mighty yummy to me.
The visual fits perfectly. You need to add an "s" to dinner in this line~Thanksgiving/Christmas
Dinner(s) right
I have two suggestions for your poem.
Firstly, make the font a color of one of the items in the visual. It will make it fit better with the lively and yummy meal. I would select a brown like the turkey.
Secondly, the last line is not connected to the poem. It's like an announcement, and now you have read my poem of a real event. Make that line blend better into the Thanksgiving described for example: Thanksgiving has never been the same since Sam left Arkansas and his Mom's Southern holiday feasts.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2022
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thanks as always great suggestion.
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You are welcome.