The Book of Sorrows
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Comment from Abilene Riley
I like the imagery of Mother Earth crying and wondering why. I think about that often. The cadence of the stanzas was a bit too stilted for my taste. I found myself re-reading them a few times because I wasn't really sure I got what was being communicated. For instance:
And, why my Heart's always Broken?
And, why my eyes are never Dry?
Why it never Heals?
What is "it" referring to here? If you changed the sentence order to 1, 3, 2, I think the stanza would flow easier.
What I did get however, was how much emotion was in these words. I hope writing this poem was a cathartic and enlightening experience.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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I like the imagery of Mother Earth crying and wondering why. I think about that often. The cadence of the stanzas was a bit too stilted for my taste. I found myself re-reading them a few times because I wasn't really sure I got what was being communicated. For instance:
And, why my Heart's always Broken?
And, why my eyes are never Dry?
Why it never Heals?
What is "it" referring to here? If you changed the sentence order to 1, 3, 2, I think the stanza would flow easier.
What I did get however, was how much emotion was in these words. I hope writing this poem was a cathartic and enlightening experience.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
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Sorrow tis but an upside down frown.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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