The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "A Surprise to All"Adventures around & upon a hill
10 total reviews
Comment from aryr
What a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed this because it gave a personal insight to what each of them had to survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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What a fantastic continuation chapter, Liz. I really enjoyed this because it gave a personal insight to what each of them had to survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your loyal review. I always enjoy your kind reviews.
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You are most welcome, Liz.
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***smile***
Comment from sunnilicious
That's a cute novel installation. I liked your characters, narration and dialogue. My insight to life doesn't take me way back to the 16th Century. So, I'll have to trust you. Creative. Nice work. Keep it up :)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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That's a cute novel installation. I liked your characters, narration and dialogue. My insight to life doesn't take me way back to the 16th Century. So, I'll have to trust you. Creative. Nice work. Keep it up :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your delightful review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. If you want to check back to some of the earlier chapters you are welcome to without any need to write any reviews.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It sounds as if they have plenty of reasons to not be too badly affected by what occurred to them in the sixteenth century. Is this the end of the story? Or do they have more adventures in England?
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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It sounds as if they have plenty of reasons to not be too badly affected by what occurred to them in the sixteenth century. Is this the end of the story? Or do they have more adventures in England?
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your appreciative review. There are a few more chapters before they make it to the top of the Tor. When they get there, they will be able to stand where the two ley lines cross and will finally feel balanced. If you are unfamiliar with the ley lines let me know & I will clue you in. They are introduced in the first few chapters. If you want to visit my portfolio few free without having to do any reviews. Just enjoy.
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Actually, I think I've read every chapter or nearly every one. I do remember your description of the ley lines.
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good
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Jill tended to the hens and chicken" should this not be hens and chickens since "gardens" and "chickens" are plural?
Good idea to flick "Richard" off their shoulders every time his memory annoyed them. "Ping...ping...ping."
Group therapy should help them overcome their 16th Century experiences.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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"Jill tended to the hens and chicken" should this not be hens and chickens since "gardens" and "chickens" are plural?
Good idea to flick "Richard" off their shoulders every time his memory annoyed them. "Ping...ping...ping."
Group therapy should help them overcome their 16th Century experiences.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your amusing review. I'm glad you are appreciating it.
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Karin has that knowledge of how to heal from being abused emotionally and physically by the Abbott. Perhaps I am not understanding the situation. Did these ladies actually return to some previous past life of their own? I guess I thought they just time traveled into some other bodies as they kept their own 21st century knowledge/awareness while having been returned there. Whichever way, that does require psychological healing after all they experienced.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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It's good that Karin has that knowledge of how to heal from being abused emotionally and physically by the Abbott. Perhaps I am not understanding the situation. Did these ladies actually return to some previous past life of their own? I guess I thought they just time traveled into some other bodies as they kept their own 21st century knowledge/awareness while having been returned there. Whichever way, that does require psychological healing after all they experienced.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your involved review. They did all return to a past life, which is probably why they've all connected in England at the Harp therapy course. It's a bit like the coming together in Close Encounters. Shakespeare say we're all actors on a stage. If people don't believe in past lives they will just see it as a science fiction adventure. But my friend, called Cordelia in her was named Sally Ann. When we got to the time waiting for the shuttle, we were reading the history of the place and she said, "we were here." We were both sure, we'd been there in a past life.
So when I saw a suggestion in the contests to write a past life experience, I thought I'm going to add that to my England experience.
Comment from Mabaker12
Another great story build-up this must have been fairly difficult to write Liz? but you have done a great job as usual. Sincerely Anne.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Another great story build-up this must have been fairly difficult to write Liz? but you have done a great job as usual. Sincerely Anne.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your loyal loving review. I'm glad you appreciate it. It was therapeutic to write.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I see the ladies are making progress.
At Cast of Characters:
Cyndy: SUGGEST (four) instead of (4) typically numbers less than 10 are spelled out rather than presented numerically. Also, the word (for) directly precedes it.
Mary Jo: SUGGEST inserting (was) between (Jo) and (in)
Incidentally, this same list appears in author's notes, just for your information.
At Previously:
Para 1, 3rd sentence: Add comma after (So) add comma after an introductory word or phrase.
After 1st ********
Para 6, 1st sentence: SUGGEST (validation) rather than (cohesion)
After 2nd ********
Para 8, 1st sentence: SUGGEST (was) instead of (were)
Para 10, 1st sentence: Add comma after (So) add comma after an introductory word or phrase.
I am still trying to get my mind around the time travel bit. It is beginning to make sense and it makes the story even more interesting, I think I just have to go back and do some homework.
Very good story telling.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I see the ladies are making progress.
At Cast of Characters:
Cyndy: SUGGEST (four) instead of (4) typically numbers less than 10 are spelled out rather than presented numerically. Also, the word (for) directly precedes it.
Mary Jo: SUGGEST inserting (was) between (Jo) and (in)
Incidentally, this same list appears in author's notes, just for your information.
At Previously:
Para 1, 3rd sentence: Add comma after (So) add comma after an introductory word or phrase.
After 1st ********
Para 6, 1st sentence: SUGGEST (validation) rather than (cohesion)
After 2nd ********
Para 8, 1st sentence: SUGGEST (was) instead of (were)
Para 10, 1st sentence: Add comma after (So) add comma after an introductory word or phrase.
I am still trying to get my mind around the time travel bit. It is beginning to make sense and it makes the story even more interesting, I think I just have to go back and do some homework.
Very good story telling.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your extremely helpful review. I don't know if I already gave you the summary and invited you to read any chapters without need of writing a review.
I will give you my canned summary: This book
it is about a real trip to England but tweaked to go 'Twilight Zone ish' The first 18 chapters are about the power spots we visited, along with a crop circle. All with discussion about the Michael & Mary ley lines. This was building up to an idea of a sense we'd gotten, that we'd been there before. There were some pretty horrible things that happened. So I decided to write about them. You are welcome to scan through my portfolio to read any chapters leading up to this chapter. You could begin on chapter 16 to get into it. No need for a review, just enjoy.
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I have been toying with the idea of ransacking your portfolio. But I would probably read and review, but I will be nice since they are now well entrenched into the FS library. But I have to review, I need those 2 member cents, right? LOL
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I used to feel that but someone let me in on a goldmine. Maybe you know, but I'll tell you anyway. In the upper left corner is a picture of a house. Click on that and on the drop-down click on Fanstory then scroll down to featured stories.
These each pay at least $1.
I grab about 6 or 7 of those & I'm good to go so I can get to my 40 promised reviews. bwaaa
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Thanks, I will check that out
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***hugs***
Comment from jessizero
I want to keep encouraging you in your efforts to write this story. You are doing an excellent job. I don't have any criticisms this time. Thanks for continuing to share, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I want to keep encouraging you in your efforts to write this story. You are doing an excellent job. I don't have any criticisms this time. Thanks for continuing to share, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your delightful review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Trying to immerse in the16th century bodies sounds fun to me, except not as a labor. I would want to be an aristocrat like a princess or something. I'm already one since one of my brother-in-law married a British royalty while another married a Germany royalty who owns three castles. We have visited one three times for free.
Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Trying to immerse in the16th century bodies sounds fun to me, except not as a labor. I would want to be an aristocrat like a princess or something. I'm already one since one of my brother-in-law married a British royalty while another married a Germany royalty who owns three castles. We have visited one three times for free.
Well done.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your fun review. So you were probably a royal in a past life, too. I believe I was a monk at one time, possibly in the 16th century. When I was a child & we drove by the psych hospital. I said, 'someday, I'm going to work there.' I think in another life I had been on the other side of locked doors & was going to turn things around. When I was 60+ I was working in that hospital. The only thing I minded in the trip back to the 16th century was eating with wood & on wood. In this century, I detest wet wood. It's like fingernails on a chalkboard.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I think turning this into a 'group therapy session' worked, Liz. It certainly helped clear up any confusion that might have been felt at times by your readers while reading the whole story. Well done.
one thing: "...much of the incidences referenced(referred) to in our discussions."
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I think turning this into a 'group therapy session' worked, Liz. It certainly helped clear up any confusion that might have been felt at times by your readers while reading the whole story. Well done.
one thing: "...much of the incidences referenced(referred) to in our discussions."
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your sharp-eyed review. I struggled over referenced to vs referred to. There is a fine difference. But as you have reflected it to me, I see referred is less clumsy. Also the therapy idea did work. Thank you for that too.
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You're welcome, Liz. Referenced could have been used, but with the 'to', but I referred to is much less awkward. :)
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yes, you are right..hugs
