The Return
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness, who is "you", the you that ended your chapter? Onto the next chapter. I really like your novel. You should publish this novel into a book.... everyone would love to read.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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Oh goodness, who is "you", the you that ended your chapter? Onto the next chapter. I really like your novel. You should publish this novel into a book.... everyone would love to read.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2022
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That is such a lovely compliment, Rosemary, thank you so very much. I'm delighted you have enjoyed reading my novel, you've really made my day! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from judiverse
This is great. You really left things up in the air for us. At least we know it was a woman who planned to cut the saddle straps. Meg is startled, but she understands that she's going to be murdered and accepts whatever Bessie and Margot can think of to stop it. Margot struggles because she has fallen in love with Miles. Great work. Sorry I'm out of sixes already. judi
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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This is great. You really left things up in the air for us. At least we know it was a woman who planned to cut the saddle straps. Meg is startled, but she understands that she's going to be murdered and accepts whatever Bessie and Margot can think of to stop it. Margot struggles because she has fallen in love with Miles. Great work. Sorry I'm out of sixes already. judi
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Judi! The next chapter reveals her identity, and reason for wanting Meg dead. Some women are really nasty!! Lol. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this part. Thanks for for lovely comments, my friend, they were as good as a six any day of the week!! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You're very welcome. I complain about the number of female murderers who turn up on some of the detective shows I watch, because in reality they're far outnumbered by the males. Of course. a woman killer can add more suspense and drama. judi
Comment from Fleedleflump
'a writhing crescendo' - what a great phrase! Half way through their conversation, I was reminded me of a line from the Matrix 'you have the look of someone who accepts what he sees because he is expecting to wake up' - that felt very much like Meg somewhere in the middle there.
Love the cliffhanger ending - I'd be shouting at the telly if this was an episode of a drama :-)
No nits to note - I very much enjoyed this chapter.
Mike
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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'a writhing crescendo' - what a great phrase! Half way through their conversation, I was reminded me of a line from the Matrix 'you have the look of someone who accepts what he sees because he is expecting to wake up' - that felt very much like Meg somewhere in the middle there.
Love the cliffhanger ending - I'd be shouting at the telly if this was an episode of a drama :-)
No nits to note - I very much enjoyed this chapter.
Mike
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I think in her position, that's exactly what Meg was feeling. Lol. Thanks so much, Mike, for another lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Judy Lawless
Wow, this one had me sitting on the edge of my chair, Sandra! Beautifully written, and I found no need for any corrections. Of course, I'm late getting to it, so if there were any, they've probably already been pointed out. :) I can't wait for the continuation!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Wow, this one had me sitting on the edge of my chair, Sandra! Beautifully written, and I found no need for any corrections. Of course, I'm late getting to it, so if there were any, they've probably already been pointed out. :) I can't wait for the continuation!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Aw, thank you, Judy, what a lovely review! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. The next chapter will reveal who the culprit is, and why. But, there is still the worry of Margot. :)) Thanks, dear friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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You're most welcome, Sandra. Hugs.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This chapter was awesome, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. You
did a great job adding pertinent details to keep the story flowing
smoothly. You gave readers a hint about two people in the kitchen
who could be, or possible one is, the culprit. I've always thought it
was Jane (I mentioned her in one of my previous reviews). She had
access, though her motive hasn't been made clear IF she's the one.
The scenes with Meg and Margot in the same room were handled
well. You did a great job portraying the feelings of both--esp
where Miles was concerned. You set the possible 'death scene'
up well. Readers were given the facts in a way they could picture
the possibility. Now. . . I can hardly wait for the outcome!
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This chapter was awesome, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. You
did a great job adding pertinent details to keep the story flowing
smoothly. You gave readers a hint about two people in the kitchen
who could be, or possible one is, the culprit. I've always thought it
was Jane (I mentioned her in one of my previous reviews). She had
access, though her motive hasn't been made clear IF she's the one.
The scenes with Meg and Margot in the same room were handled
well. You did a great job portraying the feelings of both--esp
where Miles was concerned. You set the possible 'death scene'
up well. Readers were given the facts in a way they could picture
the possibility. Now. . . I can hardly wait for the outcome!
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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What an amazing review, Jan! Thank you so very much! I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this chapter, and already looking forward to the next. The identity of the hooded, would be killer will be made in the first line and then the reason.
I have always enjoyed your reviews, my friend, you have often given me ideas that I might not have had. Thanks, my dear friend. Love and hugs!! 😊🥰 xxx Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Finally, the big reveal, which turns out not to be a reveal at all, just another cliff-hanger. LOL
Now just who could "you!" refer to? Why any one of the many suspects. Well done.
I like the doppelganger section where Meg gets to meet Margot. One has to have a considerable imagination to accept meeting a person from the future as a fact.
I think we'll soon learn how deep friendship can go.
Marvelous chapter. The next one should prove interesting, if it's not another
deception. :)
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Hello Sandra,
Finally, the big reveal, which turns out not to be a reveal at all, just another cliff-hanger. LOL
Now just who could "you!" refer to? Why any one of the many suspects. Well done.
I like the doppelganger section where Meg gets to meet Margot. One has to have a considerable imagination to accept meeting a person from the future as a fact.
I think we'll soon learn how deep friendship can go.
Marvelous chapter. The next one should prove interesting, if it's not another
deception. :)
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I promise there will be no more deceptions, you will learn the identity of the person under the hood. 😊
Thank you so much for this lovely review, Robert, and the sixth star! I'm glad you enjoyed the Meg-Margot meeting. I tried to imagine what I'd feel like in Meg's place meeting my double. Margot had already seen her when she first transported back in time, before she took Meg over.
Next chapter is almost ready. I hope you enjoy that one, too.
Thanks again, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
It's a good thing Margot and Bessie are there. The culprit has been caught, and if she can't make it look like an accident, she'd have to use that knife on Meg. I can't wait to see what Margot an Bessie do.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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It's a good thing Margot and Bessie are there. The culprit has been caught, and if she can't make it look like an accident, she'd have to use that knife on Meg. I can't wait to see what Margot an Bessie do.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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Hi Cindy, it won't be long before all will be revealed, and I'm wondering how many people will be right. Who is this hooded lady? does Meg die? I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. Thanks, my friend. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Begin Again
On the edge of my seat...or maybe on the floor.... so close to the answer of the who-dunnit but left screaming for more. Very well done, my friend. What an awesome cliff hanger for the reader. Turn the page!!!!
Love it, of course! Perfect!
Thanks for putting a bit of enjoyment in my morning and a smile on my face. What a breath-taker!
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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On the edge of my seat...or maybe on the floor.... so close to the answer of the who-dunnit but left screaming for more. Very well done, my friend. What an awesome cliff hanger for the reader. Turn the page!!!!
Love it, of course! Perfect!
Thanks for putting a bit of enjoyment in my morning and a smile on my face. What a breath-taker!
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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The ending came at just the right moment, I'm glad you liked it. Next chapter will reveal the identity of the would be killer. Then it will almost be over. Just got to get Margot home and ......
Thank you for all these fabulous reviews, and for all the stars you have given me, you are an amazing friend. Love and lots more hugs. :)) Sandra xxxx
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Yes a great cliff hanger... but I am not sure I can hold my breath till the next post. LOL
Comment from alexisleech
You are such a tease! This beautifully written chapter brought us all up to speed via the natural and well structured dialogue throughout. You have mastered the art of moving your characters around the screen in a reader's mind, Sandra, and this makes reading your work such a pleasure.
I can't wait to find out who the cloaked 'strap cutter' is, but if it's a woman, I have my suspicions. I can't wait to find out if I'm right!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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You are such a tease! This beautifully written chapter brought us all up to speed via the natural and well structured dialogue throughout. You have mastered the art of moving your characters around the screen in a reader's mind, Sandra, and this makes reading your work such a pleasure.
I can't wait to find out who the cloaked 'strap cutter' is, but if it's a woman, I have my suspicions. I can't wait to find out if I'm right!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review and all the stars, dear Alexis. Your comments have made my day, I'm over the moon. Thank you!! You'll see if your suspicions are right next week. Love you lots, my friend. Take care. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from l.raven
OH Hail No....I knew it...I was half way
through...and told myself...I bet...I bet...
that's where her evil side will stop it...
but I guess I should be grateful...hmmmmm...
at least we know it's a girl...
I hate to think it would be Jane...or maybe
Lucy...hmmmmm...or it could still be a guy...
well...it's a fact...each chapter gets better
and better...and I love it my amazing friend...
but before she gets herself killed...someone needs
to be there with her...
now give me a clue...is she in the serve department???...
I guess Meg will trust Margot and Bessie now...
but what is Margot to do...no more romping in the hay
with Miles...and you just can't walk away from love just
like that...
well....look on the bright side...if it is Jane...they will
be looking for some new help...
I love your story told beautiful you...always so very well
written...keeps me wanting more...love you the mostest...forever...God Bless....Linda xxoo
hope you and Graham are doing well...and staying safe...
I am back to babysitting...and my girlfriends son Johnny
is still here...he's going back to Texas the end of September...loveeeeee xxoo
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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OH Hail No....I knew it...I was half way
through...and told myself...I bet...I bet...
that's where her evil side will stop it...
but I guess I should be grateful...hmmmmm...
at least we know it's a girl...
I hate to think it would be Jane...or maybe
Lucy...hmmmmm...or it could still be a guy...
well...it's a fact...each chapter gets better
and better...and I love it my amazing friend...
but before she gets herself killed...someone needs
to be there with her...
now give me a clue...is she in the serve department???...
I guess Meg will trust Margot and Bessie now...
but what is Margot to do...no more romping in the hay
with Miles...and you just can't walk away from love just
like that...
well....look on the bright side...if it is Jane...they will
be looking for some new help...
I love your story told beautiful you...always so very well
written...keeps me wanting more...love you the mostest...forever...God Bless....Linda xxoo
hope you and Graham are doing well...and staying safe...
I am back to babysitting...and my girlfriends son Johnny
is still here...he's going back to Texas the end of September...loveeeeee xxoo
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Is she in the 'serve department?' Hmm, now what serve are we talking about??????? 🤣😂 I'm not telling you. That way you must come back on Sunday! Goodness me, this power I have is exhilarating! 😂🤪😳😵💫🤣
Okay, I'm calming down now, ahem, now let's see. Oh yes, you liked this chapter, (I can't stop laughing!) Can I give you a clue? Well, seeing as you are such a lovely friend, and you've asked so nicely, I'll have to tell you .... No I won't! 🤣
Thank you so much, dear friend, for another wonderful review and for giving me a sixth shining star! You are such a love! Thank you! Love you lots, dear friend, and sending you a warm wraparound hug! :)) Sandra xxx
We are fine, and I'm hoping you are too. I know what you're like. You worry about everyone and forget to worry about you! I'm sure you love the baby sitting, and having Johnny there. But don't do too much. xxxxx
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I don't know what serve...aren't they all the same???...maid meets home owner...and while he's using the shower...while she's cleaning it...
or there's always owner meets butler...
and your safer eating greasing fast foods...then joining them for...well...any meal...
Now...I think you've slipped your dripper 🤳(selfie) ... 🙃😉🙄😰👨⚕️👩⚕️🙏🙏🙏 ...but I'm sending you some medical help...and a few extra prayers...
and I'm so glad we're lovely friends...I would hate to see if we were enemies... 😜🤐😱🤺👅💪...
so glad to hear you are doing fine...and I do love babysitting...but I have to be careful...Eva is gaining weight...and with the 3 surgeries on my neck...I can't hold her to long...but she's a good baby and prefers
to lay on the floor and talk and play...
and it's good to have Johnny here...he helps
do odds and ends around here...it's been a long time sense I had someone take out the garbage...he just does it before I even know it's done...feels strange...he's already talking about coming back next summer...
love you soooo much my soooooo amazing friend...you are truly a gift from God...
the tightest hugs ever...and the biggest smiles back at ya...Linda xxoo 🧡💛💚💙💜💖