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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Gypsy,
This eloquent modern Haiku elicits beautiful images in my mind, of flowers tucked in safely for the night, resting under a waning sun.
Your presentation is very nice.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
    Cindy, Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I'm glad you like it.

    Gypsy (*=*)
reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 13-Aug-2022
    You?re welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from lyenochka
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Do peonies close up at night? I know that the Rose of Sharon/hibiscus does and a few others but I didn't know that the peonies do. Lovely idea of the flowers being "tucked in for the night."

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    By what I found on Google search, they do close at night...Nyctinasty...you probably know this word.

    Thank you very much for your review, Helen! ❤️

    Thank
reply by lyenochka on 11-Aug-2022
    Cool!
Comment from aryr
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The picture was fantastic, Gypsy. It was a great modern haiku. I loved the way you encouraged the dusk to gently kiss the peonies, I thought the touch was great. Blessed be n hugs!

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    Thank you, Aryr, I appreciate your kind review and valuable feedback. Blessed be and hugs.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason". --Novalis
reply by aryr on 12-Aug-2022
    You are so welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I like the idea of tucking kisses in the peony pedals. It's so creative. "Tucked in the night" is a good metaphor for more nightly activities.

Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
    Lisa,

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your Haiku poem- good presentation picture- flows very well- words give a good visual- sanity kissed- nice - tucked in for the night - well done

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
    Ap

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, beautiful descriptive writing and alliteration. I especially liked:

dusk's dainty kisses
on closed peony petals --

(Vivid Imagery)

A pleasure to read. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Margaret ~ LateBloomer


 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    Margaret

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Teri7
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written Modern Haiku you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    Teri

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

You will know if peony implies a season or not. IMHO if it dies, then this becomes a classic Haiku. Regardless, your satori line is a terrific ending. Your color scheme and artwork just add to your overall presentation.

Mark

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    Hello, Mark,

    Peony is early summer.

    This is modern Haiku because I used metaphors. In classic haiku you only write what you observe. No metaphor or alliteration.

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Out of sixes, Gypsy, but this offering is so deserving!
Love every word and the imagery that you poetic forms in my mind!
I love peonies, the dusk, and the thought of flowers/foliage being "tucked in for the night"
Superb!

Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
    Diane,

    Thank you very much for your time and kind review.

    Gypsy
    "Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment from Raul1
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It is interesting and entertaining to read. Excellent work! I like it. No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2022

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2022
    Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate the excellent review.

    Gypsy