"The Book of Death"
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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces the protagonist's life as evinced from cradle to his seemingly turbulent days as a growing school child.
The work highlights his "crashing out of his mother as a newly born baby that ended up getting kissed by the naval nurses, because he was beautiful;" his three brothers: David, Wayne, and Christopher: "four little naval brats" that often spent their time waiting for their dad to return from war; his rascally manoeuvres with Ricky that left him worse of.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the protagonist's life as evinced from cradle to his seemingly turbulent days as a growing school child.
The work highlights his "crashing out of his mother as a newly born baby that ended up getting kissed by the naval nurses, because he was beautiful;" his three brothers: David, Wayne, and Christopher: "four little naval brats" that often spent their time waiting for their dad to return from war; his rascally manoeuvres with Ricky that left him worse of.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thanks Lord and another excellent review!
Much appreciated!
Doctor Ricky
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Remain Blessed.
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You're Welcome.
Comment from Frank Malley
"Taste the Waste of My Reality" is a biographical poem; the title has a negative suggestion which is largely unjustified by the events related in a less bountiful but Walt-Whitmanesque barrage of lines. The poem resounds with the strong feelings of its composer, and this is why I think the title is unduly moribund. I think some of the events in the poem could be expressed more concretely, pictures to replace explanation. 'Bigger and clever, David stole my show/ His shiny red bike I took in revenge!'
I do question whether this autobiography benefits by being versified rather than expressed in prose, but it is a good read.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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"Taste the Waste of My Reality" is a biographical poem; the title has a negative suggestion which is largely unjustified by the events related in a less bountiful but Walt-Whitmanesque barrage of lines. The poem resounds with the strong feelings of its composer, and this is why I think the title is unduly moribund. I think some of the events in the poem could be expressed more concretely, pictures to replace explanation. 'Bigger and clever, David stole my show/ His shiny red bike I took in revenge!'
I do question whether this autobiography benefits by being versified rather than expressed in prose, but it is a good read.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2022
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You are absolutely correct objective content extremely important in presenting your message.
I write so much sometimes as I create I edit and then add to it.
That hasn't been done yet.
Primarily because this will probably be a 5,000 word write.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024