Reddened Leaves
Autumn6 total reviews
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Perhaps my favorite season and your words capture my sentiments exactly. The minute I see leaves like depicted in your illustration, I think fall.
Nicely said
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Perhaps my favorite season and your words capture my sentiments exactly. The minute I see leaves like depicted in your illustration, I think fall.
Nicely said
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great response to the prompt. I loved the images, especially "a red leafed floor." Well done and well crafted, especially with the use of alliteration throughout
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Great response to the prompt. I loved the images, especially "a red leafed floor." Well done and well crafted, especially with the use of alliteration throughout
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautiful poem. Tha background and font color go perfectly with the visual. It's well done but the last line is 6 syllables and not five.
Upon=2- I use a dictionary the dot in between is where the syllable is located.
a= 1
red=1
leaf=1
floor=1 Fix that line and you have a perfect contest entry.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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This is a beautiful poem. Tha background and font color go perfectly with the visual. It's well done but the last line is 6 syllables and not five.
Upon=2- I use a dictionary the dot in between is where the syllable is located.
a= 1
red=1
leaf=1
floor=1 Fix that line and you have a perfect contest entry.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review and correction. Not sure how that even got past the judges.
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That attest how good it was. F- the syllable count this is good, and it is good,
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Love that attitude lol
Comment from Julcia
Your words are beautifully set with their fall frame of leaves photo. The russet background is a great choice and pops out each word.
For this 5 - 7 - 5 poem your poem ends in 6 syllables. If you change Upon
to On you would then have the required 17 syllables. Just a suggestion, You
own your poem. Julcia
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Your words are beautifully set with their fall frame of leaves photo. The russet background is a great choice and pops out each word.
For this 5 - 7 - 5 poem your poem ends in 6 syllables. If you change Upon
to On you would then have the required 17 syllables. Just a suggestion, You
own your poem. Julcia
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review and correction. Much appreciated.
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You are welcome.Keep in touch.
Fondly. Julcia
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is nicely written and the artwork is gorgeous. It's hard to find a lot to say about these short poems so I will just say that it is great writing. I see it is a contest entry so I wish you all the luck in the world.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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This is nicely written and the artwork is gorgeous. It's hard to find a lot to say about these short poems so I will just say that it is great writing. I see it is a contest entry so I wish you all the luck in the world.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from RodG
I really like your metaphor of "flaming" leaves "crackling" in the "crispy autumn air." But I think your last line would benefit from a specific noun denoting where "there" is rather than your use of rhyme.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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I really like your metaphor of "flaming" leaves "crackling" in the "crispy autumn air." But I think your last line would benefit from a specific noun denoting where "there" is rather than your use of rhyme.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your review. I have altered the poem a little.
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Much better! I changed my rating to 5 stars.