A Penny for you Fought
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Comment from N.K. Wagner
***********************************************Basic information gathering has begun. I'm enjoying the interaction between your charaacters. I think I'll be disappointed if Smiff is a bad guy. I'm beginning to like him. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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***********************************************Basic information gathering has begun. I'm enjoying the interaction between your charaacters. I think I'll be disappointed if Smiff is a bad guy. I'm beginning to like him. :) Nancy
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Smiff is a character, isn't he? I wonder what's going to happen with him ;-)
Mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another great chapter. I agree with Roz, Terrence would scare the truth out of anyone just looking where his badge is hanging! Lol. I'm enjoying your story a lot. I like Harry, well, I like them all. I can understand there being a law against using magic, though if I was able to, I'd want to use it. But it could cause chaos if used liberally. I suspect that's what those who murdered that family enjoy, and don't obey the law. Why would they? They obviously don't care about getting caught. Well done, loving this story. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Another great chapter. I agree with Roz, Terrence would scare the truth out of anyone just looking where his badge is hanging! Lol. I'm enjoying your story a lot. I like Harry, well, I like them all. I can understand there being a law against using magic, though if I was able to, I'd want to use it. But it could cause chaos if used liberally. I suspect that's what those who murdered that family enjoy, and don't obey the law. Why would they? They obviously don't care about getting caught. Well done, loving this story. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you :-). I like Harry and Rozlyn's relationship - he's a little of her conscience, I think. So happy you're reading and enjoying :-).
Mike
Comment from royowen
They are a rum bunch, and they're not stupid, and typical of a bunch that live by their wits, cynical but "human" streetwise, but it could also be their demise, but like all who live by their wits are aware the potential for being in a dangerous place. Beautifully written Mike, excellent post, mostly rhetoric at the moment , blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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They are a rum bunch, and they're not stupid, and typical of a bunch that live by their wits, cynical but "human" streetwise, but it could also be their demise, but like all who live by their wits are aware the potential for being in a dangerous place. Beautifully written Mike, excellent post, mostly rhetoric at the moment , blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you, Roy :-). Things are starting to warm up in this story! I'm really glad you liked it.
Mike
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Well done
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You're writing, as usual, is excellent. Since I've been traveling, I have missed part of the story line, but that's not your fault. I'll try to get caught up. I can't wait to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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You're writing, as usual, is excellent. Since I've been traveling, I have missed part of the story line, but that's not your fault. I'll try to get caught up. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you, Barbara :-). It feels good to be getting my teeth stuck into something!
Mike
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a perceived thwarting of the vested interest of a trade union and how the protagonist and his co- unionists are trying to bring about a reversal.
The work highlights the stalemated meeting of the union; how the protagonist became worried about Harry's walk out from the meeting; their subsequent convergence at a drinking parlour and how they wish to carry out their assignment of a presumably poor group of people.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with trade unionism.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a perceived thwarting of the vested interest of a trade union and how the protagonist and his co- unionists are trying to bring about a reversal.
The work highlights the stalemated meeting of the union; how the protagonist became worried about Harry's walk out from the meeting; their subsequent convergence at a drinking parlour and how they wish to carry out their assignment of a presumably poor group of people.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with trade unionism.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you for the in depth and thoughtful response - I'm so happy you liked it :-)
Mike
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is very well written. I read some of the previous chapters in this story so I have a good idea of what it is about. The dialogue is especially smooth and carries the story forward in a nice manner.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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This is very well written. I read some of the previous chapters in this story so I have a good idea of what it is about. The dialogue is especially smooth and carries the story forward in a nice manner.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you for the positive words :-). I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from Frank Malley
"A Penny for You Thought" is a well-pace, skillful dialogue that I found easy to read. This chapter's events hooked me well enough to keep me going without the need of a self-remonstrating "finish it!" Magic is a frequent inclusion in fantasy stories, but in this chapter, magic is being built as an actual component of an imagined world, and within this limited exposure, it works, unlike the pieces where magic is continually, promiscuously used to make quick fixes to an uninspired plot.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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"A Penny for You Thought" is a well-pace, skillful dialogue that I found easy to read. This chapter's events hooked me well enough to keep me going without the need of a self-remonstrating "finish it!" Magic is a frequent inclusion in fantasy stories, but in this chapter, magic is being built as an actual component of an imagined world, and within this limited exposure, it works, unlike the pieces where magic is continually, promiscuously used to make quick fixes to an uninspired plot.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Frank! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this chapter :-). For me, magic needs to be a tool with limitations. Otherwise - as you say - it's too much of a get-out clause.
Mike