The Sad Little Mountain
Feeling of unimportance of a little mountain8 total reviews
Comment from GeraldShuler
This is an excellant lesson for children. Your poetry is easy to read, easy to understand and easy to remember the lesson. What more could you ask from a children's poem?
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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This is an excellant lesson for children. Your poetry is easy to read, easy to understand and easy to remember the lesson. What more could you ask from a children's poem?
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you so very much for this grand review! Verna
Comment from moongirlwriter
So very sweet. . .coming from a former Pre-School teacher. This is a poem perfect for any young child and carries a moral that might be remembers for years to come. You did well in the contest. . .congrats to you. :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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So very sweet. . .coming from a former Pre-School teacher. This is a poem perfect for any young child and carries a moral that might be remembers for years to come. You did well in the contest. . .congrats to you. :)
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for a great review from someone who knows children's stories!
Comment from pome lover
What a lovely poem and message for children presented with mountains as the subject. Original and perfect meter. This should be in a picture book. Congratulations on your win!
Katharine
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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What a lovely poem and message for children presented with mountains as the subject. Original and perfect meter. This should be in a picture book. Congratulations on your win!
Katharine
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Your review delighted me. Thank you.
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you're most welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your little story with a moral to teach the children about contentment for all that one has in life. Your poetic meter was perfect and enjoyable to read aloud. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Loved your little story with a moral to teach the children about contentment for all that one has in life. Your poetic meter was perfect and enjoyable to read aloud. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thank you, my friend.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
That is a very wise "old" mountain. He gives sound advice. It looks like the little mountain will take it to heart. One day he will grow. In the meantime, he has the children.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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That is a very wise "old" mountain. He gives sound advice. It looks like the little mountain will take it to heart. One day he will grow. In the meantime, he has the children.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much for an excellent review!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I really enjoyed this one, the rhyme and rhythm bounced along, which children like, and it also has a moral about being satisfied with what you have. That everyone is different and we all have something others admire. Excellent, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I really enjoyed this one, the rhyme and rhythm bounced along, which children like, and it also has a moral about being satisfied with what you have. That everyone is different and we all have something others admire. Excellent, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you very much for this great review!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was really, really sweet and cute! It had a very good message but it's presented in a clever way that I don't think kids would find as preachy or demeaning. (I saw a poem earlier that had a fab message but it was coming down far too heavy-handed.) This is deft and soft and with just the right amount of gravity. Nice job!
I do wish that each line was a bit more smooth. There were just a few (a VERY few) lines here that read with a bit of bumpiness. If you could work those out, I feel you'd either have a straight-out winner or one very close to the top. Thanks a lot and good luck!
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was really, really sweet and cute! It had a very good message but it's presented in a clever way that I don't think kids would find as preachy or demeaning. (I saw a poem earlier that had a fab message but it was coming down far too heavy-handed.) This is deft and soft and with just the right amount of gravity. Nice job!
I do wish that each line was a bit more smooth. There were just a few (a VERY few) lines here that read with a bit of bumpiness. If you could work those out, I feel you'd either have a straight-out winner or one very close to the top. Thanks a lot and good luck!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I'll go back and check out "bumpy." Mystery Writer
Comment from lindafisher
This is absolutely wonderful, the best children's poem I have read in quite a while. It has everything in the content. Pathos, happiness and last but not least, a moral.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This is absolutely wonderful, the best children's poem I have read in quite a while. It has everything in the content. Pathos, happiness and last but not least, a moral.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This was such an encouraging review. I loved it, and of course, the stars!