Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Ricky,

I thought I just reviewed this piece - hmmm... though maybe the one I reviewed before had an additional stanza. This is kinda weird - like deja vu. So I'm not sure what to say - I already said it????

Weird. I'm going back to bed. Or click my heels three times, maybe.

 Comment Written 09-May-2022

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reply by the author on 13-May-2022

I gave her my cell phone number after the accident told her she owed me lunch.
Of corresponding texture about four times with no reply.
In other words this is a work in progress click your heels four more times Robin!

Comment from R. Marc Goodson

Needs Improvement

I couldn't really do a good job of reviewing this poem. It starts out great...and then the comment about 'to be continued...having breakfast.' Was that intended to be part of the the poem? Or was it a break in writing? Either way it's difficult to judge a fragment, rather than the whole work when it comes to poetry.

 Comment Written 09-May-2022

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reply by the author on 13-May-2022

This is a work in progress.
And, it won't be finished until I make contact the woman that hit me on the bike.
A, she responds, so I can finish the writing.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024