The Return
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Comment from Begin Again
Me again!
This ghostly story is so intriguing and I truly enjoy the English history entwined within the story line and characters. You make it come alive and the reader wants to believe every word. Beautiful!
Always your friend and sending hugs and love, Carol
reply by the author on 29-May-2022
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Me again!
This ghostly story is so intriguing and I truly enjoy the English history entwined within the story line and characters. You make it come alive and the reader wants to believe every word. Beautiful!
Always your friend and sending hugs and love, Carol
Comment Written 29-May-2022
reply by the author on 29-May-2022
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I love ghosts, and use them a lot!! Lol. No one can say they can't do whatever I get them to do! LOL. Thank you, dear friend, for another lovely review and more stars!! You're such a lovely friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
nicely done once again with these two making strides to aide their cause.
And I's knowing you'll be pleased. Now, go and get something inside you before it gets cleared away. - oo-er... just like she did the night before, matron!!!
recently, and hadn't been able to answer any of them properly, or truthfully.- watch the adverbs close together here. (another to start the next paragraph too)
''The idea that his own father ruined- change the opening speech marks here to the single ones for consistency.
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Hi Sandra,
nicely done once again with these two making strides to aide their cause.
And I's knowing you'll be pleased. Now, go and get something inside you before it gets cleared away. - oo-er... just like she did the night before, matron!!!
recently, and hadn't been able to answer any of them properly, or truthfully.- watch the adverbs close together here. (another to start the next paragraph too)
''The idea that his own father ruined- change the opening speech marks here to the single ones for consistency.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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LOL!! Trust you! Thanks again for reading this one, too. I'll go through that sentence on my MS Word copy. Now you've pointed out the adverbs in that part, they stands out like a sore thumb! Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, Sandra,
Well, as I expected, another flawlessly written chapter for your novel.
Just to keep folks on their toes, you should put something up with a few problems that can be gleefully seized upon while the reviewers say to themselves, "I knew it. I knew it. She's human like the rest of us, and there are boo-boos in her writing."
But . . . I doubt that'll ever happen. And worse, I usually miss the racey parts when I stop by. Oh, well . . . .
Best,
J. P.
P.S.: If I had a six-star rating left over to give you, I would!
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Hi, Sandra,
Well, as I expected, another flawlessly written chapter for your novel.
Just to keep folks on their toes, you should put something up with a few problems that can be gleefully seized upon while the reviewers say to themselves, "I knew it. I knew it. She's human like the rest of us, and there are boo-boos in her writing."
But . . . I doubt that'll ever happen. And worse, I usually miss the racey parts when I stop by.
Best,
J. P.
P.S.: If I had a six-star rating left over to give you, I would!
Comment Written 06-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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LOL! You are so funny. Thank you so much, J.P. I loved your review. I'm so pleased you managed to read this one and that you liked it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think their plan will work. It looks like Miles' father's evil is about to be exposed, along with his solicitor. I can't wait to see how that affects events in the future.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I think their plan will work. It looks like Miles' father's evil is about to be exposed, along with his solicitor. I can't wait to see how that affects events in the future.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Hi Cindy, thank you so much for your lovely review, I really appreciate it. Yes, sparks will be flying soon!! Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, ok sweet girl...now we're cooking...
we need all the written proof we can get...
the question is...what will Miles do when he finds
out?...of course you left that part out...GUURRRRR....
and the next question is...what will he do when he
finds out Margot and Meg are the same person...at
least in bed???...still waiting to see how your going
to pull that off...so now besides for snooping around a bit more...getting written evidence...they have to wait for
Miles to get home...should be interesting my amazing
friend...
another awesome chapter you...and the next one should
tell what Miles does find out...MAYBE...still loving your story told...very well written you who...sending sooooo much
love your way...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Hi Sandra, ok sweet girl...now we're cooking...
we need all the written proof we can get...
the question is...what will Miles do when he finds
out?...of course you left that part out...GUURRRRR....
and the next question is...what will he do when he
finds out Margot and Meg are the same person...at
least in bed???...still waiting to see how your going
to pull that off...so now besides for snooping around a bit more...getting written evidence...they have to wait for
Miles to get home...should be interesting my amazing
friend...
another awesome chapter you...and the next one should
tell what Miles does find out...MAYBE...still loving your story told...very well written you who...sending sooooo much
love your way...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Hi, Linda, my lovely friend, thank you so much for coming and reading this part. I love your review, it's always fun to read, and always gives me a smile, and a giggle. Miles won't find out just yet, but when he does... oh my word! Lol.
How are you? Let me know how things are going now. Graham and I are over the Covid now, just having a little difficulty with breathing, nothing serious, lol. I have a stronger inhaler at the moment, I might have to keep it. Other than that, the weather is improving, we are managing to get out and have some nice walks, and I just won BoM! What a lovely surprise to wake up to this morning. The last time I looked, Jay and I were level at six votes.
Love you mega amounts, my sweet friend, and sending warm cuddly hugs. Take care, love, Sandra xxxxxx
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see life is good...you won...and of course had my vote...can't let Margot and Miles and Bessie down...
I'll PM you...have to show you what I have been doing...and you my amazing friend are so welcome...loveeeeeeeeeee you forever...much...xxoo
Comment from estory
I thought you made a lot of progress in this chapter in highlighting the air of mystery and intrigue, as Margot discovers the letter that shows how Lord Crawley was defrauded of his money to keep his daughter from marrying Miles. It opens up all sorts of conjecture as to the motives of all this and leaves open if they will be successful or not or whether Bessie and Margot can intervene on Meg's behalf. You did it all through the dialogue and kept up the personalities of everyone involved, so the story grows more intriguing and holds our attention. estory
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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I thought you made a lot of progress in this chapter in highlighting the air of mystery and intrigue, as Margot discovers the letter that shows how Lord Crawley was defrauded of his money to keep his daughter from marrying Miles. It opens up all sorts of conjecture as to the motives of all this and leaves open if they will be successful or not or whether Bessie and Margot can intervene on Meg's behalf. You did it all through the dialogue and kept up the personalities of everyone involved, so the story grows more intriguing and holds our attention. estory
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Aw, thank you, Estory, that is such a lovely review, and the sixth golden star is a bonus. There is a lot coming up, and some of it won't be good. But Margot and Bessie are determined ladies, and they know what they have to do. It's just finding the right way to do it. I'm so glad you are enjoying my story, my friend, thank you! Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from tfawcus
Bessie seems to have turned up trumps. All plain sailing at the moment, but I guess not for long! At least Margot had kedgeree for breakfast to sustain her through the events of the coming day.
A couple of minor suggestions...
helping her getting [get] prepared
she said as gaily as she could muster. [with as much gaiety as she could muster/as gaily as she could manage]
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Bessie seems to have turned up trumps. All plain sailing at the moment, but I guess not for long! At least Margot had kedgeree for breakfast to sustain her through the events of the coming day.
A couple of minor suggestions...
helping her getting [get] prepared
she said as gaily as she could muster. [with as much gaiety as she could muster/as gaily as she could manage]
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, and the sixth star, Tony. And a big thank you for catching 'getting - get' I've made the correction, and a hug for the suggestion with the 'gaily' sentence. I've opted for your first suggestion, that sounds so much better. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one, and I certainly enjoyed your helpful review. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, my friend, Sandra. Things are getting good! This could go in so many different directions, it hurts my brain to think about it. I could feel (Margots) Meg wanting more of miles, but then I could feel the relief for (Margot) Meg of him being gone for a few days. So much emotion and mixed feelings in every chapter, my friend. It's simply sensational writing. Talk soon
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Hi, my friend, Sandra. Things are getting good! This could go in so many different directions, it hurts my brain to think about it. I could feel (Margots) Meg wanting more of miles, but then I could feel the relief for (Margot) Meg of him being gone for a few days. So much emotion and mixed feelings in every chapter, my friend. It's simply sensational writing. Talk soon
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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What a lovely review, thank you so much, John, I really appreciate it! I'm so sorry it hurts your brain!!!!! LOL. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from judiverse
This is so fascinating. I hope Margot will be able to find a guy who excites her as much as Miles when she gets back to her own time. Will she and Bessie be able to change the course of Miles's and Meg's lives? Bessie's got her hands on the information on Brandon and the lawyer's scheme to cheat Meg's father out of his money. If they can get that information to Miles. he'll know what's been going on. Then maybe he and Meg can live their lives as they had dreamed. Looking forward to the next chapter. judi
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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This is so fascinating. I hope Margot will be able to find a guy who excites her as much as Miles when she gets back to her own time. Will she and Bessie be able to change the course of Miles's and Meg's lives? Bessie's got her hands on the information on Brandon and the lawyer's scheme to cheat Meg's father out of his money. If they can get that information to Miles. he'll know what's been going on. Then maybe he and Meg can live their lives as they had dreamed. Looking forward to the next chapter. judi
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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You'll love the ending! Thank you so much, Judi, for this fabulous review, and the golden star. The sparks will be flying in a couple of chapters time. Thanks, my friend. Have a wonderful week. Warm hugs. Sandra xx
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You're welcome. Looking forward to what you've cooked up for the remaining chapters. judi
Comment from Annette R.
Well things are certainly getting interesting. You have a good handle on the past and time it is written in. I don't know if I would have thought of washing from a bowl of cold water even though I have such an item with candles and mirror in my house. Looking forward to chapter 19.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Well things are certainly getting interesting. You have a good handle on the past and time it is written in. I don't know if I would have thought of washing from a bowl of cold water even though I have such an item with candles and mirror in my house. Looking forward to chapter 19.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you so much for this nice review, Annette, and thank you for picking up on the small details. Those are what put us where we are in time, so have to come into the story. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying this story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx