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Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "The Special Tree"With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking
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Comment from Mabaker12
Dearest Liz, I have been 'out' of writing for sooo long due to moving from one state into another. Then to find there was no power, no this, no that I nearly went mad but now everything is kosher and I'm back online.
The girls finally get the car going again, only now they stop again to look at some strange trees. As usual, dearest friend there is commentary between the three friends. Well written as usual. Love U Anne
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Dearest Liz, I have been 'out' of writing for sooo long due to moving from one state into another. Then to find there was no power, no this, no that I nearly went mad but now everything is kosher and I'm back online.
The girls finally get the car going again, only now they stop again to look at some strange trees. As usual, dearest friend there is commentary between the three friends. Well written as usual. Love U Anne
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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I tried to call you so I need your new phone number
Thank you for the review. I'm relieved you are getting settled. I think you missed a couple of chapters. I can send them to you
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter, very descriptive. I'm glad you reminded the reader about the ADD, it sure explained things at the end.
notes:
Linda put both {hand} out and shook her head.
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Looking toward Liz, Tommy said, ["]So tell us what's going on in your head.["]
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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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A well written chapter, very descriptive. I'm glad you reminded the reader about the ADD, it sure explained things at the end.
notes:
Linda put both {hand} out and shook her head.
- hands
Looking toward Liz, Tommy said, ["]So tell us what's going on in your head.["]
- add
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your supportive review. I have attended to your observations. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Liz knew this was it. It was the last time they and the wonderful gentleman who had fed them and let them rest upon his aunt's gift to him would be cracking a joke.She wiped away a few tears as she climbed into the passenger's side.'aww so emotional and then it is also full of dry humour and mystery. A brilliant write well done you have a very special talent I loved reading this! love and best wishes Meia xx
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Liz knew this was it. It was the last time they and the wonderful gentleman who had fed them and let them rest upon his aunt's gift to him would be cracking a joke.She wiped away a few tears as she climbed into the passenger's side.'aww so emotional and then it is also full of dry humour and mystery. A brilliant write well done you have a very special talent I loved reading this! love and best wishes Meia xx
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. I invite you to read the first 13 chapters in my portfolio about the rescue. Every chapter is suspenseful. There is no need to write a review.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Clearly Liz and Tommy know something about the special trees that Linda doesn't know. As I was sad the adventure might be over, I was happy to read otherwise.
I found the ADD interesting, having raised a daughter that was ADHD and having once been married to a man that was ADD.
Am looking forward to the next chapter :)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Clearly Liz and Tommy know something about the special trees that Linda doesn't know. As I was sad the adventure might be over, I was happy to read otherwise.
I found the ADD interesting, having raised a daughter that was ADHD and having once been married to a man that was ADD.
Am looking forward to the next chapter :)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. There is just one more chapter. I am sad about it. I don't know if you have read the first 13 chapters. They are pretty nearly the best of the whole book. There is no need for a review of those chapters. Just enjoy them.
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What might you have in mind as you continue to write? Poetry, book?
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a good chapter, Liz, with lots of good feelings, no drama, well at least to the end. What is it about those trees? Will we find out in another chapter? Well done.
There are a few spag: "There was no quiet(,) happening in the other Honda..." - comma not needed there
"It felt good to be behind the wheel again, backed (backing)her car out from its sheltered spot."
"It was the last time they and the wonderful gentleman who had fed them and let them rest upon his aunt's gift to him would, (be) cracking a joke."
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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This is a good chapter, Liz, with lots of good feelings, no drama, well at least to the end. What is it about those trees? Will we find out in another chapter? Well done.
There are a few spag: "There was no quiet(,) happening in the other Honda..." - comma not needed there
"It felt good to be behind the wheel again, backed (backing)her car out from its sheltered spot."
"It was the last time they and the wonderful gentleman who had fed them and let them rest upon his aunt's gift to him would, (be) cracking a joke."
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your supportive review. Yes, is the next to last chapter. I'm already getting sad. I am slowly writng my next one about past life idea I got from a trip to Glastonbury England.
Comment from Eunice Amero
So the trees going to be spoken more about in the next chapter? This story is interesting. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing it. Good luck. One thing I did like is how the cher served them.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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So the trees going to be spoken more about in the next chapter? This story is interesting. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing it. Good luck. One thing I did like is how the cher served them.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. There is one more chapter to go. You will learn about the trees. I invite people to read the first 13 chapters in my portfolio about the rescue. Every chapter is suspenseful. There is no need to write a review. I just want you to treat it like a book you might read to enjoy. ***Spoiler *** Tommy, offers the ladies a place to rest & enjoy some of his cooking. He is on his way to a food festival & there is a traffic jam because of brush fires. The irony is he is the brother of one of the girls who are rescued. Enjoy it if you have the opportunity.
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Thank you will if I can find time. You are very welcome.
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***smile***
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This part moves along nicely and has good action. You also ended on a good cliffhanger since the trees were something significant. When Tommy asks what they are doing, it would be better if you didn't say it was a funny comment, the reader is supposed to realize he's joking with them. keep it moving as you write. Action is always better than a lot of discussion.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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This part moves along nicely and has good action. You also ended on a good cliffhanger since the trees were something significant. When Tommy asks what they are doing, it would be better if you didn't say it was a funny comment, the reader is supposed to realize he's joking with them. keep it moving as you write. Action is always better than a lot of discussion.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your involved review.
Comment from aryr
This was amazing Liz. It was definitely a tear-jerker. I am so very glad that Liz made Linda catch Tommy's attention to make him stop. Liz and Tommy truly realize what the trees are and it will take a few minutes for Linda to clue in. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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This was amazing Liz. It was definitely a tear-jerker. I am so very glad that Liz made Linda catch Tommy's attention to make him stop. Liz and Tommy truly realize what the trees are and it will take a few minutes for Linda to clue in. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Wow. Thank you for such a delightful review. It's my last Native American gem I have to gift readers with.
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You are so welcome, Liz.
Comment from pookietoo
Nice chapter. I want to know more. What is-slecial about the trees? How many chapters are in your book? Happy Halloween to you. Keep smiling. Take care.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Nice chapter. I want to know more. What is-slecial about the trees? How many chapters are in your book? Happy Halloween to you. Keep smiling. Take care.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. There is one more to go. I invite people to read the first 13 chapters in my portfolio about the rescue. Every chapter is suspenseful. There is no need to write a review. I just want you to treat it like a book you might read to enjoy. ***Spoiler *** Tommy, offers the ladies a place to rest & enjoy some of his cooking. He is on his way to a food festival & there is a traffic jam because of brush fires. The irony is he is the brother of one of the girls who are rescued. Enjoy it if you have the opportunity.
Happy Halloween
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What is special about the trees?
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That isin the next chapter. I can give you a ***Spoiler*** if you'd like.
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Fine.:)
Comment from lyenochka
I like trees. So I'm curious why Liz has everyone stop to look at the trees. I'm sure you will let us know. I hope this means that they will have a little more time with Tommy. Maybe they can get him to open a restaurant in Vermont. ð???
Linda put both hand out (hands)
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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I like trees. So I'm curious why Liz has everyone stop to look at the trees. I'm sure you will let us know. I hope this means that they will have a little more time with Tommy. Maybe they can get him to open a restaurant in Vermont. ð???
Linda put both hand out (hands)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2021
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Thank you for your delightful review. This is my last Native American gem I have to gift readers with.