Jacket
A Simple Jacket Shared By Our Family10 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Brett, I didn't expect that ending. So the son took his own life as he couldn't face to be without the one parent he'd ever had. What a tragedy that was. I really liked it. Well written, and good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Wow, Brett, I didn't expect that ending. So the son took his own life as he couldn't face to be without the one parent he'd ever had. What a tragedy that was. I really liked it. Well written, and good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this little twisted tale. Appreciate the review.
Comment from BethShelby
This family story was of a life that turned out to not have such a happy ending. The narrator has gone to his grave as we learn in the last sentence. Apparently he took his own life not wanting to deal with cancer. The Jacket that once belonged to football player father was claimed by the son who now hopes the family secrets can rest in peace. Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This family story was of a life that turned out to not have such a happy ending. The narrator has gone to his grave as we learn in the last sentence. Apparently he took his own life not wanting to deal with cancer. The Jacket that once belonged to football player father was claimed by the son who now hopes the family secrets can rest in peace. Well written.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Actually, the narrator died from cancer and Tyler, now alone in the world without his sole parent, and having been abandoned by his mother when he was 2 months old, commits suicide. Glad you enjoyed the twisted tale. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Wendy G
Wow. Gut wrenching ending. Not expected either. You crafted your story with skill and care, not hinting at what was to come. I hope it really is fiction. I wish you every success in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Wow. Gut wrenching ending. Not expected either. You crafted your story with skill and care, not hinting at what was to come. I hope it really is fiction. I wish you every success in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Definately fiction. Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from karenina
Wow. I read all the entries. Lot's of good writing. This one packed an emotional punch that has me reeling. Worthy of six stars...can I owe you one? I'm short this week! Tell you what though? Your writing rocked me to my core. I have but one vote to cast for this contest. It's yours...
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Wow. I read all the entries. Lot's of good writing. This one packed an emotional punch that has me reeling. Worthy of six stars...can I owe you one? I'm short this week! Tell you what though? Your writing rocked me to my core. I have but one vote to cast for this contest. It's yours...
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
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Thanks for entering it! A wild ride!
Best of luck--
Karenina
Comment from Bill Schott
This family story, Jacket, is a sad tale of a dysfunctional family, destroyed by a wandering woman, and ending with a painful death and a suicide. Coiuldn't get much bleaker.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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This family story, Jacket, is a sad tale of a dysfunctional family, destroyed by a wandering woman, and ending with a painful death and a suicide. Coiuldn't get much bleaker.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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I couldn't get much bleaker? Hum! That may be a challenge. Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Wow! This gives me pause, Brett. It's hard to put into words how it makes me feel. At first loving the sweet memories, then feeling the sadness of love lost and abandonment, but the ending takes my breath away. It's a very powerful family story. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Wow! This gives me pause, Brett. It's hard to put into words how it makes me feel. At first loving the sweet memories, then feeling the sadness of love lost and abandonment, but the ending takes my breath away. It's a very powerful family story. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
The cycle of life is filled with many ups and downs. The circle that swings to many extremes. When things are bad, they usually get better. When they are good, they are destined to turn south. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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The cycle of life is filled with many ups and downs. The circle that swings to many extremes. When things are bad, they usually get better. When they are good, they are destined to turn south. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Insightful, much appreciated review. Thanks!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Simple Jacket Shared By Our Family
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Brett Matthew West
Well here I am reading your creative work, and you narrative work, imaginary in a manner that is not based on fact.
Yes, I found your family event of you laying I in front of this marble tombstone. And you Staring up at the brown dirt covering you and hearing a gunshot.
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Simple Jacket Shared By Our Family
Jacket
Brett Matthew West
Well here I am reading your creative work, and you narrative work, imaginary in a manner that is not based on fact.
Yes, I found your family event of you laying I in front of this marble tombstone. And you Staring up at the brown dirt covering you and hearing a gunshot.
Gert
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
Brett Matthew West
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Ouch!!!!!!!! I enjoyed reading your contest entry and loved it. You told a complete story using only a few words. You have characters, setting, plot, problem, and solution. I'm not to happy with the solution. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Ouch!!!!!!!! I enjoyed reading your contest entry and loved it. You told a complete story using only a few words. You have characters, setting, plot, problem, and solution. I'm not to happy with the solution. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this twisted little tale. Much appreciate the review.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Dang, that story didn't go where I thought it was going. Totally took me by surprise, which makes it good. It's a sad story, though, but that might just be me. Our 21 year old granddaughter attempted suicide last night.
You really have written an excellent piece of fiction.
Gale
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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Dang, that story didn't go where I thought it was going. Totally took me by surprise, which makes it good. It's a sad story, though, but that might just be me. Our 21 year old granddaughter attempted suicide last night.
You really have written an excellent piece of fiction.
Gale
Comment Written 06-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2021
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That is not good. Wishing you all the best!
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Thank you, Brett. Your story was truly a good one. All will be well.
Gale
