Murder at the Melodrama
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Murder at the Melodrama, A1,s3d"Comedy-mystery set at rehearsals for melodrama.
9 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no - would the murderer strike again?? Enjoyed this scene. I like the Madge character - so fun and easy to imagine. I'm afraid Gale/Gayle might be a big suspect.
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GAYLE enters and sits in one of the chairs. (GALE)
I've heard that he and Gayle (Gale)
Question: Is the town Bellfield or Fairfield:
directing melodramas in little old Fairfield & Fairfield Methodist
but
He seemed anxious to get back to Bellfield,
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Oh no - would the murderer strike again?? Enjoyed this scene. I like the Madge character - so fun and easy to imagine. I'm afraid Gale/Gayle might be a big suspect.
Comments:
GAYLE enters and sits in one of the chairs. (GALE)
I've heard that he and Gayle (Gale)
Question: Is the town Bellfield or Fairfield:
directing melodramas in little old Fairfield & Fairfield Methodist
but
He seemed anxious to get back to Bellfield,
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments.
Glad you enjoyed. It is Bellfield. I have trouble juggling all the balls in this. Too many players. I probably should have used Gayle all along, as that's the gal's spelling. But I'll stick with Gale. judi
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My kids' doctor went by Gale so it can definitely spelled that way for women. I also saw it as Gail.
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I'm glad I hadn't thought of Gail. I'd be more confused than ever. judi
Comment from robyn corum
Judi,
Well done. Sounds like a right-regular mystery of the highest order. Also sounds like the type of guy people might stand in line to kill. hahahaha Poor thing. I'll be looking forward to the next installment!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Judi,
Well done. Sounds like a right-regular mystery of the highest order. Also sounds like the type of guy people might stand in line to kill. hahahaha Poor thing. I'll be looking forward to the next installment!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks a bunch for your review and comments. Isn't that always the way. The victim usually leaves good reasons for him or her to kill him. There will probably be more complications before it's over. judi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Clay: We're still trying to figure out how the he got into the theatre. Did you lose your keys to the theatre at any time? (theater, & figure out how he got, you can omit 'the')
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Clay: We're still trying to figure out how the he got into the theatre. Did you lose your keys to the theatre at any time? (theater, & figure out how he got, you can omit 'the')
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review, but it leaves me a bit confused. I'm wondering if I got the whole thing. judi
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hmmm
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This what I saw: Clay: We;re still trying to figure out how he got into the theatre. Did you lose your keys to the theatre at any time? (theater & figure out how he got. (theater and you can omit "the". I get the unneeded "the" but was surprised that's all you had to say. judi
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theater here is spelled wrong.
Comment from aryr
This was a great continuation chapter of your script, judiverse. Things are getting a little revealing, I would say. Gayle had a crush on Patterson who seriously let her down, Arlo also had a secret but he hadn't come out of the closet yet. I really enjoyed this one, only time will tell. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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This was a great continuation chapter of your script, judiverse. Things are getting a little revealing, I would say. Gayle had a crush on Patterson who seriously let her down, Arlo also had a secret but he hadn't come out of the closet yet. I really enjoyed this one, only time will tell. Great job.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments. A lot will happen before the truth comes out. judi
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LOL, now I know that. You are so welcome, judiverse. I really enjoyed it.
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I'm so glad you enjoyed. I've been getting very few reviews on this play, so I don't even know if it's worth it to continue. I may try a few more scenes before deciding. judi
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MMmm you do have to remember that Labor Day is fast approaching, the last big weekend until Thanksgiving, perhaps people are truly busy at this time.
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That's true. I can't believe summer's drawing to an end already. judi
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Yep, it's time for warmer sweaters etc.
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I can't believe fall is upon us so soon. judi
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It seems like the calendar knows, the month changes and thus the season change. Oh well.
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I just learned from watching our local TV meteorologist that September 1 marks the beginning of meteorological fall. No wonder it's starting to feel like fall already. judi
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Wow, that is truly amazing.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is getting more and more interesting, Judi. You're doing a great job of revealing these past relationships through dialogue. Some of them could be motive to murder. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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This is getting more and more interesting, Judi. You're doing a great job of revealing these past relationships through dialogue. Some of them could be motive to murder. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and comments, Judy. We've got to have a broad suspect pool. judi
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Captivating! Things are heating up. A jilted lover. A premonition that the killer will return. Red herrings, perhaps? Perhaps not! Can't wait for the next.
typo: Clay: We're expecting out=>OUR second child
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Captivating! Things are heating up. A jilted lover. A premonition that the killer will return. Red herrings, perhaps? Perhaps not! Can't wait for the next.
typo: Clay: We're expecting out=>OUR second child
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your review and encouragement. I have to keep stirring things up. Things will come together more as we get into the second act. I don't know why I'm always typing out instead of our. Fumbling fingers, I suppose. Thanks for catching it. judi
Comment from BethShelby
This play is realy good. All of the character have their own unique personality and they act like people we have all known. It a small town where Clay seems familiar with almost everyone he is interviewing and he chats with them on a personal level. I'm enjoying this.
Beth
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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This play is realy good. All of the character have their own unique personality and they act like people we have all known. It a small town where Clay seems familiar with almost everyone he is interviewing and he chats with them on a personal level. I'm enjoying this.
Beth
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your great review and comments, Beth. I value it highly. You make a good observation about Clay knowing most of the people involved. judi
Comment from lancellot
This is going along smoothly. I'm enjoying the friendly (on the surface) banter between the women. I do wonder how much all the crime/police drama on TV have ruined us for these types of mysteries.
Good work.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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This is going along smoothly. I'm enjoying the friendly (on the surface) banter between the women. I do wonder how much all the crime/police drama on TV have ruined us for these types of mysteries.
Good work.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thanks for your review and the encouraging words. I haven't watched any of the recent crime/police dramas on TV. I watch the oldies. No doubt political correctness has changed a lot of how they're presented. judi
Comment from royowen
Well, there's a person that has a motive, Gale Johnson, apparently dashed and Patterson had something going and he left town without a whisper, she was really embittered by the whole thing. But I'll also say that these murder/mysteries are not that easily solved...but then, I could be wrong, beautifully written script Judy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Well, there's a person that has a motive, Gale Johnson, apparently dashed and Patterson had something going and he left town without a whisper, she was really embittered by the whole thing. But I'll also say that these murder/mysteries are not that easily solved...but then, I could be wrong, beautifully written script Judy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much for your review, and thanks for making it through the lengthy script! There will be more twists and turns to come. judi
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Well done
