One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Mark Schardine
The simplest tasks of everyday life can trigger the strongest reactions. We ponder how often we do something for the person, and how often the person showed generosity to us.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021
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The simplest tasks of everyday life can trigger the strongest reactions. We ponder how often we do something for the person, and how often the person showed generosity to us.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate your time, kind words, and excellent review.
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hi Gypsy, oh yes this is so emotive and moving, I would even say it has something of a subtle shock element. Written to the contest requirementsm, I like the spinning round association. Good luck, Giddy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Hi Gypsy, oh yes this is so emotive and moving, I would even say it has something of a subtle shock element. Written to the contest requirementsm, I like the spinning round association. Good luck, Giddy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Giddy. It's good to hear from you.
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Comment from estory
What I liked about this was the contemporary image of the clothes in the clothes dryer; it is such an everyday routine, but it sort of underscores how those everyday mundane things can be moments of precious time with someone. you never know when you are going to lose them. It is quite a poignant moment in the poem. And I liked how you came up with a unique, personal kind of image for it. estory
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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What I liked about this was the contemporary image of the clothes in the clothes dryer; it is such an everyday routine, but it sort of underscores how those everyday mundane things can be moments of precious time with someone. you never know when you are going to lose them. It is quite a poignant moment in the poem. And I liked how you came up with a unique, personal kind of image for it. estory
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, estory. I appreciate your exceptional review and kind words.
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
:):) You are so creative. Brilliant wordplay. When your hands are full of dirty cloths, it's no surprise murderous thoughts seize you.:):) Thanks very much for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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:):) You are so creative. Brilliant wordplay. When your hands are full of dirty cloths, it's no surprise murderous thoughts seize you.:):) Thanks very much for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Gypsy hugs
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. I thought about
the theme of this poem and it made me smile! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect as it makes a great point in the
last line! Have a great day!....Maria
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. I thought about
the theme of this poem and it made me smile! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect as it makes a great point in the
last line! Have a great day!....Maria
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Gypsy hugs
Comment from Patty Palmer
Cruel recurring thoughts can come from any adult we elected a man to be the president is having trouble with reality. He is forgetful and I'm afraid to go to sleep.Patty
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Cruel recurring thoughts can come from any adult we elected a man to be the president is having trouble with reality. He is forgetful and I'm afraid to go to sleep.Patty
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thanks
Comment from karenina
Ouch. Your author's notes took this to a whole other depth! I was sidswiped by an unimaginable grief! Parents should never have to bury a child... Huge emotional impact here!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Ouch. Your author's notes took this to a whole other depth! I was sidswiped by an unimaginable grief! Parents should never have to bury a child... Huge emotional impact here!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Karenina. It's always good to hear from you. I hope you are feeling better.
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Thanks... It's slow going but it's going!
Karenina
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Cruel Recurring Thoughts", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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"Cruel Recurring Thoughts", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Gypsy,
You certainly deserved both.
Hugs the Duchess
Comment from lyenochka
You captured the problem with negative thoughts - they do go round and round. It's clever to put "his clothes" as the constant reminder along with the cycling of the dryer. Great job with your
his last clothes in the drier (dryer)
Since it's supposed to address the loved one, I'd suggest changing the "his" to "your."
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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You captured the problem with negative thoughts - they do go round and round. It's clever to put "his clothes" as the constant reminder along with the cycling of the dryer. Great job with your
his last clothes in the drier (dryer)
Since it's supposed to address the loved one, I'd suggest changing the "his" to "your."
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for letting me know about the errors, I fixed them.
Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem.
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Comment from June Sargent
This piece is so thought-provoking - and touching. All the daily tasks we perform
- and never give a thought to - can suddenly become shards of glass that cut us to the core, when a loved one is gone. You have brilliantly highlighted the depth of grief in just three short lines.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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This piece is so thought-provoking - and touching. All the daily tasks we perform
- and never give a thought to - can suddenly become shards of glass that cut us to the core, when a loved one is gone. You have brilliantly highlighted the depth of grief in just three short lines.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, June. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. :)
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