Man From My Past
A Short Love Story32 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
A Short Love Story
Man From My Past
amada , what a beautiful 5-7-5-5 for the contest
Best to you in the contest
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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A Short Love Story
Man From My Past
amada , what a beautiful 5-7-5-5 for the contest
Best to you in the contest
Gert
Comment Written 25-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much dear friend.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Great contest entry. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. This is unique and with your artwork, makes a package you can be proud of...
very nice work here, Poet!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Great contest entry. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. This is unique and with your artwork, makes a package you can be proud of...
very nice work here, Poet!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hi Sherry, thank you so much...
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, amada,
Very nice! I like the metaphor. Tastefully done. Excellent choice of image as well. Oh, for the days wine and roses . . . .
Best wishes,
J. P.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hi, amada,
Very nice! I like the metaphor. Tastefully done. Excellent choice of image as well. Oh, for the days wine and roses . . . .
Best wishes,
J. P.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, J,P,
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very simple contest entry, but it says a lot in only a few syllables. I enjoyed reading. The artwork is perfect for this entry. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is a very simple contest entry, but it says a lot in only a few syllables. I enjoyed reading. The artwork is perfect for this entry. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you Barbara.
Comment from Boogienights
This is incredibly sensual and I love the imagery you put forth in this well written poem. The image you chose goes so well with your words. It really does tell a story. :)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is incredibly sensual and I love the imagery you put forth in this well written poem. The image you chose goes so well with your words. It really does tell a story. :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Man From My Past
by amada
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest.
Good syllables count and presentation.
For such short poem I always advice to connect the lines grammatically to improve the flow... So it doesn't sound like a list of phrases. Also keep punctuation to a minimum.
I don't suggest you substitute your poem for this one, this is an example of what I mean by connecting lines...
satiated thirst
with elixir from my glass -
wine and roses days
Good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Man From My Past
by amada
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Poem contest.
Good syllables count and presentation.
For such short poem I always advice to connect the lines grammatically to improve the flow... So it doesn't sound like a list of phrases. Also keep punctuation to a minimum.
I don't suggest you substitute your poem for this one, this is an example of what I mean by connecting lines...
satiated thirst
with elixir from my glass -
wine and roses days
Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely metaphorical 5-7-5 poem about remembering a previous love and the good times you had.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Nicely metaphorical 5-7-5 poem about remembering a previous love and the good times you had.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Joan.
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No problem, amada
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in good form with the syllable count. The image is a good pairing, too. Your words are descriptive about a man and a women in the throes of passion. It sounds as if it wasn't a lasting relationship, but she looks back and remembers it fondly.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Your contest entry is in good form with the syllable count. The image is a good pairing, too. Your words are descriptive about a man and a women in the throes of passion. It sounds as if it wasn't a lasting relationship, but she looks back and remembers it fondly.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your great comments.
Comment from rama devi
Strong entry for the contest with subtle, clever double meaning and excellent phonics (especially the W, D, R and S sounds). Good form and presentation. red ripe glass - very good voicing! Bravo and good luck.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Strong entry for the contest with subtle, clever double meaning and excellent phonics (especially the W, D, R and S sounds). Good form and presentation. red ripe glass - very good voicing! Bravo and good luck.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, my friend.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
The essence of romance is beautifully put in a few words. Rose and wine pairs well with just about everything. Love is like red wine. Or it can be like a white wine. It may fall somewhere in between also. I liked your short poem. Good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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The essence of romance is beautifully put in a few words. Rose and wine pairs well with just about everything. Love is like red wine. Or it can be like a white wine. It may fall somewhere in between also. I liked your short poem. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your beautiful comments.
