Comment from Robert Zimmerman

Excellent

Hello Judi.

Lou is sort of like a bull in a China shop, however he's just doing his job. Of course any activity that Lisa was involved in will be suspect if she tells the whole truth. That's unfortunately how investigations work.

There are still quite a few people to sort through so we shall see what the next interviewed has to say.

Robert

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. I think I have too many characters. The sheriff and his deputy will be busy. judi

reply by Robert Zimmerman on 19-Jul-2021

You're welcome.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

I think Lisa need to tell the entire truth. I think the police will somehow discover it and think she's hiding something. I like this skit.

So you're the lady that discovered the body in the lobby. (it's dialogue so your choice, but 'lady who discovered')

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and the lovely six stars. I'm so glad you liked the scene. I wanted the Deputy not to be up to speed on grammar. judi

Comment from aryr

Excellent

MMMmmm the plot definitely thickens, judiverse. This was a great continuation on the script. Lou really digs hard, when he is on a case, doesn't he? I almost think he is a little overpowering and perhaps a tad jealous, when he interviewed Corrine, what will he do to Lisa. Very well done.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. We'll see what happens when he interviews Lisa. It's in the works. judi

reply by aryr on 18-Jul-2021

You are so very welcome.

reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

So glad you're following the script. It is gong to be a long process. judi

reply by aryr on 18-Jul-2021

Whether it is lone or short, I enjoy it, so keep writing.

reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021

Thanks for the encouraging words! judi

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I feel there may have been some big clues sent through here that I haven't picked up on yet. I'll have to start taking notes to keep the bread crumbs fresh.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Maybe I shouldn' have had as many suspects. Thanks for your review and comments. judi

Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

You've created a lot more questions in this scene, judi and I don't much trust the character of Deputy Lou. Poor Lisa is in a very vulnerable spot. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. Lisa will have someone who'll be looking out for her. judi

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

Oh, hey, I love where you're taking this. Especially with Corinne telling her niece not to volunteer information about the pass that Patterson made at her. We'll see how long Lisa will be able to keep that hidden.

Lou: At least you two got your stories straight. [Wow! That's harsh!

Great job!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and special thanks for the sixer. It's turning out to be quite a project. I don't know if I can keep my stories straight! judi

reply by Jay Squires on 18-Jul-2021

Yes, that can be hard, keeping the stories straight.

reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks again for your encouraging words. judi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Well, I hope Lou doesn't make a pass at Lisa! He's a character we can't trust. Good dialogue overall. I liked that Corrinne was able to stand up for herself.

Comments:
he has written a melodrama and wante the (wanted?)
He is staying at Corinne Martin's new bed and breakfast place (was staying)

Question:
Corrinne says " I had never seen him until this evening." But didn't she see him the night before when she checked him in and when she took him his breakfast?

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I'll have to clarify that comment by Corinne. She probably meant she hadn't seen him again until she saw the body. judi

Comment from BethShelby

Exceptional

This is an excellent script and you are doing a great job with the dialogue. The Sheriff seemed to be giving Corinne a hard time. I look forward to the next episode.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. Special thanks for the lovely sixer. I think I have too many suspects. Next episode will be Lisa's testimony. judi

Comment from BethShelby

Exceptional

This is an excellent script and you are doing a great job with the dialogue. The Sheriff seemed to be giving Corinne a hard time. I look forward to the next episode.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks for your review and comments. I appreciate the super sixer.
Have a great Sunday. judi

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Another well written act in your Clue mystery. There is always the scene of questioning, so the audience can try to glean a clue or two. Here we learn more about our victim's personality and a bit on Lou's. We see now Lisa has a motive. Things are progressing nicely.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021

Thanks so much for your review and comments. I think I have too many suspects, it's taking so long to tell their stories. I try to keep it moving. judi