Summer
Anticipating Harvest26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I like the adjectives in your poem.
warm melodies
ripened air
elusive rhythms
pregnant fields
burgeoning plenty
Today was quite cold here in Saint John. I'd like to have those lazy hazy crazy days of summer back, when "rhythms ripple through pregnant fields". Nothing stops summer. Everything just keeps growing. But now it's coming to a dead stop, and soon snowflakes will be drifting down.
Ah well, a change is as good as a rest. I just wish summer was longer than winter.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Hi Melissa,
I like the adjectives in your poem.
warm melodies
ripened air
elusive rhythms
pregnant fields
burgeoning plenty
Today was quite cold here in Saint John. I'd like to have those lazy hazy crazy days of summer back, when "rhythms ripple through pregnant fields". Nothing stops summer. Everything just keeps growing. But now it's coming to a dead stop, and soon snowflakes will be drifting down.
Ah well, a change is as good as a rest. I just wish summer was longer than winter.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2021
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Hello there KB. so good to see your happy face!!! I am shivering at the moment, so I agree with you that those days of summer with its warmth would be lovely right now. Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Rolen K. West
Lovely word choice. Reading this poem feels like a warm summer breeze. I think it would work well to add a period at the end of the second line and then capitalize "Elusive" as the beginning of a new sentence. I always like when the punctuation helps the poem flow.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Lovely word choice. Reading this poem feels like a warm summer breeze. I think it would work well to add a period at the end of the second line and then capitalize "Elusive" as the beginning of a new sentence. I always like when the punctuation helps the poem flow.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2021
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Hello Rolex. Thanks so very much for your wonderful comments... I would mention that since a Tanka is a Japanese form, the use of punctuation is omitted. So appreciate your review!
Melissa
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Thanks for teaching me that about punctuation! I guess you'll need to omit the period at the end of your poem. :)
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Yes, you are right about that period. I edited it out :)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congratulations on your prize! This is lovely and elegant--graceful--vividly evocative of the season. Glad I caught up to this one. Excellent word choices. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Congratulations on your prize! This is lovely and elegant--graceful--vividly evocative of the season. Glad I caught up to this one. Excellent word choices. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Hello Liz... thanks so much. I always think of this time of year as the plumping of crops before the harvest ~ we come from a farming family :)
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
A beautiful peice of artword accompanies this poem. This a well done tanka using metaphor to describe a summer day.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Melissa,
A beautiful peice of artword accompanies this poem. This a well done tanka using metaphor to describe a summer day.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2021
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Hello Joan. Thank you so much for your lovely comment!!!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa
Joan
Comment from l.raven
HI Melissa, what a beautifully worded poem sweet girl...
you actually feel the warmth of summer reading it...
I'm so sorry I am out of sixes...******...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and love this stunning picture...so very nicely written you...really beautiful Melissa...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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HI Melissa, what a beautifully worded poem sweet girl...
you actually feel the warmth of summer reading it...
I'm so sorry I am out of sixes...******...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and love this stunning picture...so very nicely written you...really beautiful Melissa...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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HI Linda. Thank you, sweet friend. I really appreciate you and your lovely comments you give to us when you read our poems. Sincere Hugs!!!
Melissa
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your so welcome my talented friend...
you earn every compliment given...big hugs back at you...love xxoo
Comment from judiverse
I can't believe we're almost into August already. We've had so much rainy weather. Your Tanka is beautifully worded. Your lines hint of the fall to come, when the fields will, hopefully, yield their bounty. Excellent alliteration with ripened, rhythms, ripple and the words help connect the lines in your poem. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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I can't believe we're almost into August already. We've had so much rainy weather. Your Tanka is beautifully worded. Your lines hint of the fall to come, when the fields will, hopefully, yield their bounty. Excellent alliteration with ripened, rhythms, ripple and the words help connect the lines in your poem. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you Judi. Even though it is mid-July, I am seeing all of the fresh food at the road side stands, eating home grown tomatoes and reveling in summer produce. It all seems so bountiful? we are a blessed people. :)
Melissa
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You're very welcome. The home grown fruits and vegetables always taste better. I would like to find fresh strawberries because those I find in the supermarket taste terrible. judi
Comment from equestrik
This is a beautiful tanka for the season of summer. It is such a time of warmth and plenty and you have captured this well here. Your picture is lovely and I wish you the best.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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This is a beautiful tanka for the season of summer. It is such a time of warmth and plenty and you have captured this well here. Your picture is lovely and I wish you the best.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much for your thoughts on this Tanka!! :)
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Summer", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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"Summer", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Duchess!!
Melissa
Mellisa, you're welcome and certainly deserved the lovely review!
the Duchess
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh so beautiful, your pivot line, elusive rhythms speaks to much of life, not the least of which is the fields pregnant with the fullness of summer.
This is a fine tanka, Melissa, and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Oh so beautiful, your pivot line, elusive rhythms speaks to much of life, not the least of which is the fields pregnant with the fullness of summer.
This is a fine tanka, Melissa, and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hello Gloria. Thank you for your lovely words and comments. I so appreciate your opinion on this verse.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
I love the sentiments of this tanka and the glorious imagery of summer heat ripening the fields as they are being made ready for the fall harvest. Meanwhile, the birds in the fields get their share as well. Sunflower seeds can be quite a delight!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I love the sentiments of this tanka and the glorious imagery of summer heat ripening the fields as they are being made ready for the fall harvest. Meanwhile, the birds in the fields get their share as well. Sunflower seeds can be quite a delight!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, June. I really appreciate your thoughts on this Tanka!!! Hugs,
Melissa