Comment from LovnPeace

Excellent

Wow. I am blown away with your imagination. I am so lacking in that area. My mine iis bare of it. I can't imagine anything but stark reality. It must be refreshing in a way. Very descriptive visuals. Blessings, Barbara

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Hi Barbara,

Thank you for such a sweet review and comments on my little story. Both are truly appreciated!

Have a great week,
Senyai

reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Hi Barbara,

Thank you for such a sweet review and comments on my little story. Both are truly appreciated!

Have a great week,
Senyai

Comment from Leann DS

Excellent

This submission has a lot of detail and realistic dialogue that helps to carry forward your plot. I want to know more about the characters and the situation.

Very interesting, your story kept my interest throughout. Well done. Have a great week.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Hi Leann,

Oh thank you for such a lovely review and comments on my little story. I may post more on Rose Minton ... not sure what but maybe more of something, lol.

I appreciate your time to review.

Have a great week also :-)
Senyai

reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Hi Leann,

Oh thank you for such a lovely review and comments on my little story. I may post more on Rose Minton ... not sure what but maybe more of something, lol.

I appreciate your time to review.

Have a great week also :-)
Senyai

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Hello! Well, here I am, late to the party's always! Theodore recommended I peruse this. Glad he did!

I took the liberty of scanning the other reviews so as not to repeat little grammar issues/suggestions...

Your conversational style is refreshing! You might have been sharing this with me over a cup of coffee. Charmingly honest and approachable.

Not such an oddball thing, is it? We spend our childhoods racing to be adults!

When we get "here" those sweet days of fireflies and fun are gems we treasure!

In truth, between the lines, I felt you.

(A sign of a good write.)

Memories are best left in the misty fog...

Today's bright sunshine might allow us to see
much to clearly. The glow would diminish...

So, here's to "Rita Johnson"-+Defender of "rose"-colored glasses!

A gift to Ron as well? You will forever be the slightly more mature young lass he pined for.

Always just out of reach...

Still so, after thirty years!

Good instincts!

Bravo!

Karenina

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2021

Hi Karenina,

Oh thank you for a marvelous review and the kind words. I am so glad you liked my crazy account of my two worlds colliding. My childhood must stay there as I am really strange about keeping it alive and intact in my memory. Thanks for understanding. Thanks also to Theodore for recommending my weird story for you to peruse :-)

Karenina, I love your work and I am a big fan.

Thanks again,
Senyai

reply by karenina on 26-Jun-2021

Theodore was right. It was very endearing! Glad our worlds collided!
(smile)
Karenina

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is an unusual autobiographical story. I found it interesting how you were initially intrigued by a memory of the past, and yet when presented with the opportunity to renew the acquaintance, turned it down on the spur of the moment in order to preserve a golden memory from way back. A most original idea.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021

Hi Pantygynt,

Oh thank you for such a superb review and thoughts on my crazy story. Yes, only an oddball would do this. You pegged the message sent exactly, lol.

A lost opportunity on my part for sure. But for reasons I stated or rationalized. Something about childhood memories getting diluted in the present ?

Your input on my work is much valued and appreciated!

Have a great weekend,
Senyai

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Exceptional

Hello my friend,
wow, what a wonderful short story. I love the details. It's perfectly written, nuanced, poignant, self-aware, and insightful. How have you been. Haven't gotten any comments on my recent posts. Hope you are doing well. this one is a masterpiece.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021

Hi Theodore,

I am well, and you? I hope this June weekend finds you and yours in fine form :-)

I just finished reading Candlelight and it was so poignant and cut me sharply in your amazingly written poem. You are a talent to be reckoned with, for sure. So glad I became your fan, sir. Some of my own early marriage memories were entwined in this poem I just read. So I?m back in my kitchen with my memories of losing a child. This touched me deeply.

I am pleased you liked my strange little story. Thank you so much for your wonderful review and kind thoughts.

All the best always,
Senyai

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

I like this wee bit personal reflection and revelation. Hoorah, for a story that is eschews melodrama for quiet slice-of-real life--a rare product on FS. I often write about the neighborhood kids I grew up with. I think that's my way of preserving my memories.

Well done.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2021

Hi Lee,

Thanks again for reading my little story. Your review frankly made my day, sir.

All the best,
Senyai

Comment from Dilettante junior

Excellent

Dear Senyai,

Sorry have been away. Need to catch up on a few.

I find your little story fascinating! Your description is crisp, highly evocative of you being in full command of the words and not the other way round which is amazing. The conversation blends right in too. I went through something similar when I was younger. I wondered why I denied myself to that person, prolly coz I didn't want to be recognised.

Well done!
Cheers,
DJ

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021

Hi DJ,

Hey, thanks for an amazing review and interesting comments too. I truly appreciate your expertise in this critique.

Have a great week,
Senyai

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

A great story written to share a particular event in your life. It was interesting and mysterious. You were traveling alone to be alone, and you kept it that way, even when confronted by a childhood friend.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Hi Rhonda,

I found your review uplifting as well as your thoughts. You pegged the meaning of my story to a tee.

Your input is greatly appreciated!

Have a great Sunday,
Senyai

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is a very interesting tale. That you would be recognized after thirty years, so strongly is amazing.

notes:

"Ron Henley[.]"

- add

Rose Minton." {his} voice carried with it

- His

Johnson." {but} I smiled up at him and his confusion.

- But

"I could have sworn...," he retreated, quite puzzled.

"I'm sorry to have bothered you ma'am."

- combine these lines.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Hi Lancellot,

I have corrected except for the last and wish to leave it as two separate sentences to instill a brief passage of time.

Your review was most helpful. It is truly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai

( If I sent this to you before, forgive me, as I changed computers and maybe didn?t hit send. So if this is a duplicate, sorry :-)

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I think I understand. It is disconcerting to go back and see someone who in your mind has remained that kid who was so much a part of separate past you would like to remember as it was. Now they have aged and you don't really know them anymore, It destroys some precious you can't really recapture. This is an excellent story. I'm not sure everyone would get it, especially Ron.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Hi Beth,

I think you?re right ... Ron wouldn?t have understood :-)

I thank you so much for an excellent review and interesting thoughts on my short short story. It is truly appreciated!

All the best,
Senyai