One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from L. Kalere
Once again you prove that you've earned your ranking (actually higher), and still keep on giving. What a sense of longing and nostalgia. With my mom it was lilac. Beautiful imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Linda
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Once again you prove that you've earned your ranking (actually higher), and still keep on giving. What a sense of longing and nostalgia. With my mom it was lilac. Beautiful imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Linda
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Linda. You are very kind and I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
This is a fine Kanshi poem Gypsy, the fact that your writing longer style poetry reveals your versatility and willingness to experiment, which is most admirable. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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This is a fine Kanshi poem Gypsy, the fact that your writing longer style poetry reveals your versatility and willingness to experiment, which is most admirable. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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I write longer than haiku poems.... haibun, free verse, tanka, shadorma, sijo.... Etc...
Thank you very much for your review and feedback.
Gypsy
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I never suggested that you did Gypsy
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Sorry, I misunderstood.
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I was merely applauding your versatility Gypsy, well done
Comment from Mark Schardine
reminiscent of mom's scent --
I drown in wistfulness
Is it remorse, or nostalgia? Do you simply recall fond memories of Mom's generosity? You allow us to meditate a long time on these questions.
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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reminiscent of mom's scent --
I drown in wistfulness
Is it remorse, or nostalgia? Do you simply recall fond memories of Mom's generosity? You allow us to meditate a long time on these questions.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Mark. It's nostalgia.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
Your Kanshi poem awakened my senses.
I can feel the breeze, see the moonbeam and smell the jasmine.
Scents and sounds have the ability to instantly transport us back in time and remind us of people, places and moments.
Your final line is perfect. It makes me think of being completely enveloped.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Hello Gypsy :)
Your Kanshi poem awakened my senses.
I can feel the breeze, see the moonbeam and smell the jasmine.
Scents and sounds have the ability to instantly transport us back in time and remind us of people, places and moments.
Your final line is perfect. It makes me think of being completely enveloped.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Debra.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and certain scents bring memories to life, that's for sure. Some good, some painful, but all there at the table, and I have NO idea where I'm going with this; it's early!
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and certain scents bring memories to life, that's for sure. Some good, some painful, but all there at the table, and I have NO idea where I'm going with this; it's early!
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Mike.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ginnygray
Thank you, Gypsy for a lovely poem , but also a form that I do not know much about! I always enjoy learning something new each day for then my tome has been put to good use. I really loved the lines describing your Mother's scent because I still have some of my Mother's perfume. I can relate with this poem because I understand your wistfulness! A lovely writing!
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy for a lovely poem , but also a form that I do not know much about! I always enjoy learning something new each day for then my tome has been put to good use. I really loved the lines describing your Mother's scent because I still have some of my Mother's perfume. I can relate with this poem because I understand your wistfulness! A lovely writing!
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Ginny, you're very kind.
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I love the sense of nostalgia that you wove into this poem! You start with the moonbeam and then help us feel the cold breeze and smell the jasmine which trigger that memory of your mom.
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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I love the sense of nostalgia that you wove into this poem! You start with the moonbeam and then help us feel the cold breeze and smell the jasmine which trigger that memory of your mom.
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Helen.
Gypsy
Comment from kahpot
A new form I will have to try, to me it is saying the breeze is carrying your mothers scent leaving/drowning you in wonderful memories, of which you have told beautifully, very well presented and thank you for sharing****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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A new form I will have to try, to me it is saying the breeze is carrying your mothers scent leaving/drowning you in wonderful memories, of which you have told beautifully, very well presented and thank you for sharing****kahpot
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Kym.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a most interesting form, and I'm fairly certain I've never read one before. I truly enjoy the concrete imagery, that involves the senses fully before the wistful memories.
I will be giving one a try sometime in the future, in the meantime many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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This is a most interesting form, and I'm fairly certain I've never read one before. I truly enjoy the concrete imagery, that involves the senses fully before the wistful memories.
I will be giving one a try sometime in the future, in the meantime many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Gloria.
Gypsy
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a new format for me. I like what you've done with it. I especially like the last line which is a great send-off. "I drown in wistfulness" is a perfect ending to an excellent representation of Kanshi poetry. Thank you for sharing this new art form and for sharing the history of it in your author's notes.
Have a beautiful evening,
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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This is a new format for me. I like what you've done with it. I especially like the last line which is a great send-off. "I drown in wistfulness" is a perfect ending to an excellent representation of Kanshi poetry. Thank you for sharing this new art form and for sharing the history of it in your author's notes.
Have a beautiful evening,
Jesse
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you very much for the lovely review and kindness. I appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome, Gypsy, and thanks for the Gypsy hugs.
Jesse