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Comment from dragonpoet
Jesse,
This little essay says you write to share the good and bad of life. We all post here to find outlet of our feelings and our doubts about our writing talent, whether in poetry or prose. Reading what is listed lets use live vicariously through others' experieinces.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Jesse,
This little essay says you write to share the good and bad of life. We all post here to find outlet of our feelings and our doubts about our writing talent, whether in poetry or prose. Reading what is listed lets use live vicariously through others' experieinces.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Good morning, Joan.
You always seem to pick from my portfolio something I have forgotten I wrote which is okay as long as you take into account how people change over time.
I don't even remember how I felt when I wrote that essay.
Yes, we have doubts sometimes about our writing talents but that is par for the course.
Staying healthy is my main objective now!
Take care, my friend,
Jesse
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You?re welcome,Jesse. I had to go looking for one I hadn?t reviewed yet.
Joan
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I guess I understand. I appreciate your efforts and your time.
Thanks for noticing me!
Jesse
Comment from Begin Again
Now, I just met you and have been thrilled by our communications so stand tall, dust yourself off, and don't ever doubt your ability to write. Sharing emotions and personal outlooks is difficult but it shows that we have something deeper hidden inside, raring to come out. We all have ups and downs.... especially me, but I could never stop writing. It's my outlet for whatever emotion is wrapping itself around me at the moment. Cheers to you, my friend. I saw all the ALL Time Best Ribbons - what an achievement. If you ever feel like tossing them out, I could use a few. LOL Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Now, I just met you and have been thrilled by our communications so stand tall, dust yourself off, and don't ever doubt your ability to write. Sharing emotions and personal outlooks is difficult but it shows that we have something deeper hidden inside, raring to come out. We all have ups and downs.... especially me, but I could never stop writing. It's my outlet for whatever emotion is wrapping itself around me at the moment. Cheers to you, my friend. I saw all the ALL Time Best Ribbons - what an achievement. If you ever feel like tossing them out, I could use a few. LOL Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you, for the pep talk and advice Carol, I appreciate them very much.
If you peruse my portfolio further you'll find, that I share my feelings and thoughts a lot in my work. I am proud of the All-Time Best ribbons, and all I can say is that it took a lot of hard work, reviewing and, getting to know people on this site.
Sending many smiles your way for these great reviews,
Jesse
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thanks - that is my thoughts as well. For some reason it says I have reached my limit of fans for the day... Haven't accepted any or asked...just must be a glitch, but I will try again this afternoon. Smiles, Carol
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Sounds good!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Jesse, many like you and me both struggle with writing poetry or even a story. Even the best writers struggle with their work.
However, the best support and teaching is here with the FS readers and reviewers. A few do get on their high horse and put out a holier than thou review, however, these are few and far between.
I like this self-reflection. Do not go crazy trying to rhyme, a free verse poem can be just as enjoyable and powerful as those who have perfected the art.
The last sea turtle line is powerful as is the beginning paragraph both show creativity.
Chin up my friend, you did well.
Mary
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Jesse, many like you and me both struggle with writing poetry or even a story. Even the best writers struggle with their work.
However, the best support and teaching is here with the FS readers and reviewers. A few do get on their high horse and put out a holier than thou review, however, these are few and far between.
I like this self-reflection. Do not go crazy trying to rhyme, a free verse poem can be just as enjoyable and powerful as those who have perfected the art.
The last sea turtle line is powerful as is the beginning paragraph both show creativity.
Chin up my friend, you did well.
Mary
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Mary, for this encouraging and supportive review. I am glad you like my self-reflection. Thank you for pointing out the parts of this that you liked best. I appreciate your advice about those on Fan Story, and I agree that they can help me. So far, I have had little suggestions and more comments than anything else.
Have a pleasant evening,
Jesse
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love this, Jesse, it's like blank verse prose. It takes a while to completely break away from rhyme, it's something inside us all. But, there is nothing wrong with that, today, everything is acceptable. Once you have written more prose your rhyme will disappear automatically. But as I said, I really loved this. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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I love this, Jesse, it's like blank verse prose. It takes a while to completely break away from rhyme, it's something inside us all. But, there is nothing wrong with that, today, everything is acceptable. Once you have written more prose your rhyme will disappear automatically. But as I said, I really loved this. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Sandra, for this positive review. I find your comments interesting. So it looks like blank verse prose. The debate continues as to whether it is a blank verse, or free verse poetry, or prose.
I kind of like the internal rhymes, so I am not sure that my rhyming nature will automatically disappear or not.
Either way, you loved it, so it is a win-win situation then.
Thank you for the excellent review and rating.
Have a great day and upcoming weekend,
Jesse
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I liked the internal rhyme, too. You should stick to what you enjoy writing, this style certainly suits you. I loved it. xx
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Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate your encouragement and support.
Have a great day,
Jesse
Comment from Adwin Clark Ace
I like the self reflection in this. Also, enjoy the internal rhymes, especially "anything, to help me face the banality of my reality". The title lured me in. I was looking forward to reading what you had to say about swimming with sea turtles. That's one of my favorite past-times. However, I was even more pleased that the writing wasn't at all about sea turtles, and liked how you drew me in as the reader.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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I like the self reflection in this. Also, enjoy the internal rhymes, especially "anything, to help me face the banality of my reality". The title lured me in. I was looking forward to reading what you had to say about swimming with sea turtles. That's one of my favorite past-times. However, I was even more pleased that the writing wasn't at all about sea turtles, and liked how you drew me in as the reader.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Hello Adwin. Thank you for this thorough and positive review. I appreciate you choosing your favorite line in the prose. I love to self-reflect, as you put it, and this is another one of my introspective posts.
I am glad that the title drew you in, even though I didn't really write about swimming with sea turtles, too much.
Have a pleasant evening, my newfound friend,
Jesse
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this short peice ( I can't seem to fathom out what exactly is prose) and can truly relate to it. I love the title and the artwork. All the best. Jen.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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I really enjoyed reading this short peice ( I can't seem to fathom out what exactly is prose) and can truly relate to it. I love the title and the artwork. All the best. Jen.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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I am glad you enjoyed reading my prose, Jen. I thank you for taking the time and effort to read and review this piece.
Have a nice upcoming weekend,
Jesse
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jesse,
There used to be a line between poetry and prose,
but things have changed and much that is prose is called poetry by some,
while much that is poetry passes for prose.
The key is to please yourself, there will always be critics, but also supporters.
My personal opinion is that you had very good prose up to just before the third paragraph where the tendency to rhyme distracted this reader.
The first paragraph works well with the excellent simile. (that is prose too)
The last line with the sea turtles is excellent.
But don't be distracted by me or anyone else. Trust yourself and swim all you like with those sea turtles.
Best wishes.
Robert.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hello Jesse,
There used to be a line between poetry and prose,
but things have changed and much that is prose is called poetry by some,
while much that is poetry passes for prose.
The key is to please yourself, there will always be critics, but also supporters.
My personal opinion is that you had very good prose up to just before the third paragraph where the tendency to rhyme distracted this reader.
The first paragraph works well with the excellent simile. (that is prose too)
The last line with the sea turtles is excellent.
But don't be distracted by me or anyone else. Trust yourself and swim all you like with those sea turtles.
Best wishes.
Robert.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hello Robert.
Yes, the debate continues as to whether this is prose or free verse poetry. I can't seem to steer away from rhyme for some reason, I'm just hooked on the songs I grew up listening to on the FM station and how they rhymed yet changed the flow and meter at will. I seem to be entering new territory and most of the reviewers are encouraging me further into prose. I would even like to write short stories and essays if I would only allow myself to. So what you're saying is to trust my gut and go with what makes me happy. You are one of my mentors and I value your opinion highly. I will try not to rhyme but it won't be easy. Thank you for this marvelous review and excellent rating.
Take care, my friend, and have a good rest of your week,
Jesse
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Jesse, Do not feel badly just because your first attempt at prose does not come out perfectly. Habits are hard things to break, and only change over time, with a lot of practice.
If you read just the last two lines of this post, you will see what I mean.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Dear Jesse, Do not feel badly just because your first attempt at prose does not come out perfectly. Habits are hard things to break, and only change over time, with a lot of practice.
If you read just the last two lines of this post, you will see what I mean.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Suzanna, for this sympathetic review. I would appreciate your clarification, as to what you mean, by reading the last two lines of the post. What will I see?
Thanks for the excellent rating and for taking the time and effort to read and review my prose.
Have a great evening,
Jesse
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Dear Jesse, can you not see how many words in those last two lines Rhymed ! Go read and COUNT THEM.
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And your point is? Some folks seem to think that prose has poetic devices and others don't. I am happy with the way my prose is. I am sorry that you are not.
Have a nice day,
Jesse
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No offense intended !
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Truce.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
A very good first attempt. Very beautifully written. A writer will always be a writer. You're a good one. Many thanks for sharing such an elegant piece, even though it was your first! Blessings and good health!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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A very good first attempt. Very beautifully written. A writer will always be a writer. You're a good one. Many thanks for sharing such an elegant piece, even though it was your first! Blessings and good health!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Precious, for this uplifting and positive review. I appreciate your encouragement and kind words.
Best wishes to you and be well,
Jesse
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture. The writer looks so attentive and yet confused... Good choice.
We all, I guess , have the same feeling that we sometimes know why we write, other times, we have no idea what to write...
Your writing is good. Happy writing.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I like the picture. The writer looks so attentive and yet confused... Good choice.
We all, I guess , have the same feeling that we sometimes know why we write, other times, we have no idea what to write...
Your writing is good. Happy writing.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I am glad you like the picture and found it a good choice for this post. I appreciate you taking the time and effort to offer this kind review. And, I thank you for the excellent rating.
Have a good rest of your week,
Jesse