Comment from Jacqueline O.

Average

The subject matter is compelling...who hasn't enjoyed a beautiful dawn sky full of promise? However, there seem to be a few syntax concerns. For example, "breadthways" is not a real word, perhaps a typo? Also, the line "that lets know of its presence" isn't grammatically correct. Additionally, there seems to be no discernible structure, syllable count, stress pattern, or line count. The subject itself, however, remains consistent. With a bit of polishing this could be truly stunning!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021

Thanks?????

reply by Jacqueline O. on 26-Mar-2021

I?ll totally improve my review if you make changes! This could be so good if the gramatical errors are fixed.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

So amazing and original: "
I feel the steps
of an aurora
that lets know of its presence
sneaking through the cracks
from my memory, its light announces ...

has broken the silence
the sonorous dawn and restlessness
of a thought that awakens ...." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2021

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2021

For you...Is this poem grammatically correct? ...let me know...please...very important...for me...thank you for your review!

reply by Iza Deleanu on 25-Mar-2021

Unfortunately English it's not my first language, so I can't help you too much in that area:(