Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Falling Green Leaves"Musings of an old man -2021
19 total reviews
Comment from djsaxon
Love it. I was unfamiliar with the form until reading your poem. I like the connection between earth and sky. Economic write, and evocative. I baulked initially at "spewing", but that is simply an odd Australian thing. In the OZ vernacular "spewing" means to vomit or to react negatively to a situation. eg; "I'm spewin', mate!" Thanks for sharing = DJ
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Love it. I was unfamiliar with the form until reading your poem. I like the connection between earth and sky. Economic write, and evocative. I baulked initially at "spewing", but that is simply an odd Australian thing. In the OZ vernacular "spewing" means to vomit or to react negatively to a situation. eg; "I'm spewin', mate!" Thanks for sharing = DJ
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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DJ rhanks I did not know that --I appreciate the input.
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent rictameter poem, J. Your verbs are vibrant, your nouns create solid images and the tone is one of overall jubilance.
Very well done and I wish you much luck in the booths. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Excellent rictameter poem, J. Your verbs are vibrant, your nouns create solid images and the tone is one of overall jubilance.
Very well done and I wish you much luck in the booths. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2021
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Gloria, thank you, unfortunately the voting booth was not so kind, but I so value all the comments, including your own, off we go to write for the love of writing...
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very lyrical piece, and so well described that one could imagine it even without the beautiful image. It suits the format, gradually lengthening, then reducing. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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This is a very lyrical piece, and so well described that one could imagine it even without the beautiful image. It suits the format, gradually lengthening, then reducing. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2021
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Wendy thank you
Comment from hager
Smooth and flows Very well, one can see the process and progress... great use of every word as they have life and once again this is a great Rictameter... depression, spewing a heavy wet mist ... hager
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Smooth and flows Very well, one can see the process and progress... great use of every word as they have life and once again this is a great Rictameter... depression, spewing a heavy wet mist ... hager
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the strong validation and six star review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You certainly had some action in this Rictameter, I even heard those leaves falling here in the heavy mist, with movement with words like cascading and whooshing, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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You certainly had some action in this Rictameter, I even heard those leaves falling here in the heavy mist, with movement with words like cascading and whooshing, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you, I hope you are well, we just ended a wonderful sonnet class with Jim, I have learned so much and will start pushing some work out or comments . Thank you again for all your help.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Anonymous,
Great entry for the Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent presentation and imagery. Well-chosen words very expressive and with a clear message of the river. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Hello, Anonymous,
Great entry for the Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent presentation and imagery. Well-chosen words very expressive and with a clear message of the river. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you good friend!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author of your wonderful entry for the
Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest writing of the sounds that one could hear of the whooshing, of falling leaves
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Hello author of your wonderful entry for the
Write a Rictameter writing prompt contest writing of the sounds that one could hear of the whooshing, of falling leaves
Gert
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Hi Gert, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my Rictameter!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
What a lovely rictameter. I can picture this all perfectly in my mind. I love the vivid word choices. I'm a big fan of nature poetry.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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What a lovely rictameter. I can picture this all perfectly in my mind. I love the vivid word choices. I'm a big fan of nature poetry.
Good luck in the contest!
Cheers.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Erika, I am very grateful for your review and comments! Nature is the nectar of the God's for certain....
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Beautifully written rictameter for the contest. Nature poetry always speaks loudly to me, there are endless ways to describe it's beautiful gifts. Thanks for sharing and best of luck!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Beautifully written rictameter for the contest. Nature poetry always speaks loudly to me, there are endless ways to describe it's beautiful gifts. Thanks for sharing and best of luck!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the good wishes...
Comment from victor 66
I really enjoyed this form of poetry and your submission in this contest. So far, this is my favorite poem in this genre. I may give this contest shot, if I can follow the prompt correctly. I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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I really enjoyed this form of poetry and your submission in this contest. So far, this is my favorite poem in this genre. I may give this contest shot, if I can follow the prompt correctly. I wish you luck.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2021
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Victor, thank you for the strong validation and six stars! I do hope you give it a go. Let me know if you post I would enjoy reading it.
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You are most welcome. I did post but I don't think it is as good as yours. Best wishes.