Lucid Obscurity
Falling through cognizance without a net...11 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This presentation provides foot for thought and is an interesting write. I enjoyed the picture you chose as well and feel it goes well with your write. What a powerful thing the mind can be.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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This presentation provides foot for thought and is an interesting write. I enjoyed the picture you chose as well and feel it goes well with your write. What a powerful thing the mind can be.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review - glad you found it interesting and enjoyed the picture. Have a good weekend!
Comment from karenina
I love a well written Kyrielle. It is my nemesis. I long to write a quality one, but alas, have had little success This is why I so appreciate reading your offering. Your repetition line is so elegant it is not cumbersome at all--in fact it adorns each stanza as, well, should be so in a Kyrielle! Beautifully written--interesting image as well! --Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I love a well written Kyrielle. It is my nemesis. I long to write a quality one, but alas, have had little success This is why I so appreciate reading your offering. Your repetition line is so elegant it is not cumbersome at all--in fact it adorns each stanza as, well, should be so in a Kyrielle! Beautifully written--interesting image as well! --Karenina
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks bunches for such a wonderful review, karenina!! May you have a beautiful evening...
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Good luck to you! I hope you win...anonymous or not!--Karenina
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Mystery Writer.
Looks like you made the Kyrielle work according to the definition. You know I don't do things like that. HAHAHA. Using the last line as the repeated line is clever because it works as bold repetition in a bit of an abstract tale. I recognize that style.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Hi Mystery Writer.
Looks like you made the Kyrielle work according to the definition. You know I don't do things like that. HAHAHA. Using the last line as the repeated line is clever because it works as bold repetition in a bit of an abstract tale. I recognize that style.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks bunches for such a wonderful review, (*_*)!! May you have a beautiful evening...
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Yoou're very welcome whatsyername. HAHA
Z
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle about the perks of life we have to deal with and our minds can mull around for hours to try and find answers for our problems.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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A very well-written Kyrielle about the perks of life we have to deal with and our minds can mull around for hours to try and find answers for our problems.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks bunches for the review, Sandra!! May you have a beautiful evening...
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks anything obscure will never support as clear evidence or impression of an act or performance to be accepted as true; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This poem speaks anything obscure will never support as clear evidence or impression of an act or performance to be accepted as true; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks for such a wonderful review, Alcreator!! May you have a beautiful evening...
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was an exquisite Kyrielle, boasting all the intricacies of the form. Poetically, it was flawless, and I enjoyed it enormously. It's not an easy form, and I tried it a few times myself. I like its musicality.
Best of luck in the contest. I think it will do very well.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This was an exquisite Kyrielle, boasting all the intricacies of the form. Poetically, it was flawless, and I enjoyed it enormously. It's not an easy form, and I tried it a few times myself. I like its musicality.
Best of luck in the contest. I think it will do very well.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Wow!! Thank you, thank you for such a wonderful review, Eternal Muse!! Those stars are enough to brighten the cloudiness all the way over here! May you have a beautiful evening...
Comment from Susan Newell
I'm very impressed with your writing, but stumbled in a couple of places. The word "self-built" is a little jarring. I think you could find an adjective that is more fluid. Also, when you say it is morning and the sun is gone, it doesn't make sense. If you are implying that the sun is in our dreams, I think that's a big leap for the reader. What is it that really leaves with morning? Otherwise I really, really like this poem and its message. I'm sure it merits multiple readings.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I'm very impressed with your writing, but stumbled in a couple of places. The word "self-built" is a little jarring. I think you could find an adjective that is more fluid. Also, when you say it is morning and the sun is gone, it doesn't make sense. If you are implying that the sun is in our dreams, I think that's a big leap for the reader. What is it that really leaves with morning? Otherwise I really, really like this poem and its message. I'm sure it merits multiple readings.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Your time for the review is so very appreciated.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I so enjoyed the sentiment here and the clever rhyming and melody, such well chosen words and your words delighted me here and I reckon this is a winner for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I so enjoyed the sentiment here and the clever rhyming and melody, such well chosen words and your words delighted me here and I reckon this is a winner for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Wow!! Thank you, thank you for such a wonderful review, Dolly!! Those stars are enough to brighten the cloudiness all the way over here! May you have a beautiful evening...
Comment from kmoss
A very creative repeating line used in this poem: Not once or twice but hidden well
'Neath currents of the mind's cascade...
I had it highlighted from the beginning as my favorite line but then was like oh wait, there's more. Nicely done
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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A very creative repeating line used in this poem: Not once or twice but hidden well
'Neath currents of the mind's cascade...
I had it highlighted from the beginning as my favorite line but then was like oh wait, there's more. Nicely done
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks bunches for such a wonderful review, K!! May you have a beautiful evening...
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem that does what all good poetry should do and that is create an image in the readers imagination. A dance that could be interpreted many different ways.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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A poem that does what all good poetry should do and that is create an image in the readers imagination. A dance that could be interpreted many different ways.
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Comment Written 25-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thanks bunches for such a wonderful review, DonandVicki!! May you have a beautiful evening...