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The monster is hungry.3 total reviews
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture. It matches with the beginning of the story.
The author is good in telling a story. I can follow the story but a little confused at the end. Is Paul selling drug? Maybe I am tired or stupid today!
Happy writing. Good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I like the picture. It matches with the beginning of the story.
The author is good in telling a story. I can follow the story but a little confused at the end. Is Paul selling drug? Maybe I am tired or stupid today!
Happy writing. Good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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The pictures of the girl that Paul looks at should clue the reader in to the fact that he somehow abused and/or tortured the girl in those pictures. Caling John at the end is Paul wanting to do it to another victim. I am sorry that was not clear.
Comment from MissMerri
This is definitely a well-written short story, and it is clear to me the author knows how to describe a scene and bring a character to life through use of details and description. However, for some reason (perhaps naivete) I am confused about the ending. I don't know what the sentence means. I don't know who John is or what another target might mean. However, I readily give you, the author, the benefit of the doubt and I'm confident you know what you're talking about and perhaps everyone who reads this will also know. I have no doubt, you are an excellent writer. Good luck in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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This is definitely a well-written short story, and it is clear to me the author knows how to describe a scene and bring a character to life through use of details and description. However, for some reason (perhaps naivete) I am confused about the ending. I don't know what the sentence means. I don't know who John is or what another target might mean. However, I readily give you, the author, the benefit of the doubt and I'm confident you know what you're talking about and perhaps everyone who reads this will also know. I have no doubt, you are an excellent writer. Good luck in the contest. MM
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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The pictures of the girl that Paul looks at should clue the reader in to the fact that he somehow abused and/or tortured the girl in those pictures. Caling John at the end is Paul wanting to do it to another victim. I am sorry that was not clear.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I read this story about five times and can't figure out who "John" is. I know you have a 100 words constrain but you should make a story that is easy to understand.
Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I read this story about five times and can't figure out who "John" is. I know you have a 100 words constrain but you should make a story that is easy to understand.
Just my opinion.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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The pictures of the girl that Paul looks at should clue the reader in to the fact that he somehow abused and/or tortured the girl in those pictures. Caling John at the end is Paul wanting to do it to another victim. I am sorry that was not clear.