The Wall
brick by brick37 total reviews
Comment from phill doran
Hello G
Writer's block? You must come in at the door...
Very good, and very much in your style (you have a strong voice) - I was expecting a supernatural twist. Nice and tight and a fresh turn of phrase in "blood pebbled" (fresh for me, at least).
Overall, nicely knocked out - and I mean that as a complement: it is efficient, interesting and polished.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
Cheers
phill
ps: I read your piece about Michael - nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Hello G
Writer's block? You must come in at the door...
Very good, and very much in your style (you have a strong voice) - I was expecting a supernatural twist. Nice and tight and a fresh turn of phrase in "blood pebbled" (fresh for me, at least).
Overall, nicely knocked out - and I mean that as a complement: it is efficient, interesting and polished.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
Cheers
phill
ps: I read your piece about Michael - nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, Phil. Yeah, the eternal flame thing just struck me and folk like Michael are sorely missed, I think. G
Comment from Dana Starr
This was so good. I had no idea what to expect and it wasn't that but Bravo. The ending caught me by surprise. You basically wrote about my 2020 writing journey.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This was so good. I had no idea what to expect and it wasn't that but Bravo. The ending caught me by surprise. You basically wrote about my 2020 writing journey.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Always nice when the surprise remains until the end. lol Much appreciated. GMG
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Giraffmang:
I didn't see this ending coming, for sure, but it does make sense.
How many of us use our computers to imagine great things, but
then find that we don't have what it takes to get it done. I found
this to be quite an interesting story.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Giraffmang:
I didn't see this ending coming, for sure, but it does make sense.
How many of us use our computers to imagine great things, but
then find that we don't have what it takes to get it done. I found
this to be quite an interesting story.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for checking this one out. GMG
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Gareth,
I recall that old campfire song. "Ya gotta go through the door!"
It seems like you've hit a brick wall. Is this why I haven't seen any posts from you in a while? Writer's Block? I battle with that constantly. It's just as well, though, because I have many poems to review. Over 30, in fact. I can't seem to catch up. But member dollars are directly proportional to how many poems or stories I post. It's always about money.
You make your point in good fashion, as always. You don't suffer from writer's block. You just need a good night's sleep!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Hi Gareth,
I recall that old campfire song. "Ya gotta go through the door!"
It seems like you've hit a brick wall. Is this why I haven't seen any posts from you in a while? Writer's Block? I battle with that constantly. It's just as well, though, because I have many poems to review. Over 30, in fact. I can't seem to catch up. But member dollars are directly proportional to how many poems or stories I post. It's always about money.
You make your point in good fashion, as always. You don't suffer from writer's block. You just need a good night's sleep!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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lol, I don't really get block but I do suffer from apathy. I really can't be bothered a lot of the time. Too much else going on. lol Much appreciated as always. G
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, The Wall, is a nicely paced short story that takes the reader on a little jaunt with Cameron as he tries to deal with writer's block. Perhaps he could paint a door on it.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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This story, The Wall, is a nicely paced short story that takes the reader on a little jaunt with Cameron as he tries to deal with writer's block. Perhaps he could paint a door on it.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Cheers, Bill. G
Comment from greyson ernst
honestly i have seen your character before but none of your writing but i love it!!!!!!!!! and as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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honestly i have seen your character before but none of your writing but i love it!!!!!!!!! and as always keep writing and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, my friend. GMG
Comment from Susan Larson
Writers block and being up against the wall all rolled into one. You really had me reading along as I had no idea what this wall was all about. And maybe tomorrow. What a great ending, at least for today.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Writers block and being up against the wall all rolled into one. You really had me reading along as I had no idea what this wall was all about. And maybe tomorrow. What a great ending, at least for today.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Much appreciated, Susan. GMG
Comment from equestrik
The title interested me at first as we had a writing assignment in high school to write about a wall. I think I was a bit dissappointed to have it be a part of a game but you wrote it well.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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The title interested me at first as we had a writing assignment in high school to write about a wall. I think I was a bit dissappointed to have it be a part of a game but you wrote it well.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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Many thanks. GMG
Comment from Leann DS
I love that your story is a simile in itself. I thought you were talking about a real wall until the end. of course, that was your unique story design, and you pulled it off! Well done. Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I love that your story is a simile in itself. I thought you were talking about a real wall until the end. of course, that was your unique story design, and you pulled it off! Well done. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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It's always nice when the surprise remains until the end. many thanks GMG
Comment from tfawcus
There are innumerable accounts of writer's block on this website, both in the prose and the poetry sections. This one beats them all. You've taken a well-worn cliche and made something quite remarkable from it. Well done. I'm glad you stopped at pebbles of blood and didn't work your fingers to the bone.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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There are innumerable accounts of writer's block on this website, both in the prose and the poetry sections. This one beats them all. You've taken a well-worn cliche and made something quite remarkable from it. Well done. I'm glad you stopped at pebbles of blood and didn't work your fingers to the bone.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2021
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I'm never in danger of working that hard! lol Many thanks Tony. G