Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "After Wicked Storm"multi-author book number two
14 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ooooo... I do like the catastrophic feel to this one... one might almost be inclined to read more into it than just the imagery... hmmm. ;) Thanx for sharing, Gypsy! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Ooooo... I do like the catastrophic feel to this one... one might almost be inclined to read more into it than just the imagery... hmmm. ;) Thanx for sharing, Gypsy! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 11-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Yvette. I appreciate your time and valuable feedback.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Gypsy,
I enjoyed your Haiku poem. I count 5-7-5 syllables and the theme is nature. A storm has blown all night long on American Lake. But now it's passed. A complete turnaround.
I've got a wee suggestion, not that there's anything wrong with your poem as is. I'm just inspired to write it with a slight change,
"after wicked storm
rolled through American Lake -"
(sunrise split the dawn)
So is a Renga the original Haiku?
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Hi Gypsy,
I enjoyed your Haiku poem. I count 5-7-5 syllables and the theme is nature. A storm has blown all night long on American Lake. But now it's passed. A complete turnaround.
I've got a wee suggestion, not that there's anything wrong with your poem as is. I'm just inspired to write it with a slight change,
"after wicked storm
rolled through American Lake -"
(sunrise split the dawn)
So is a Renga the original Haiku?
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 10-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Renga is older than haiku. The first stanza in renga eventually became haiku.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is always an ambient calm after a storm and coupled with a sun rise, we see a fresh day emerge on the lake, a fine write creating a warm day break for the reader, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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There is always an ambient calm after a storm and coupled with a sun rise, we see a fresh day emerge on the lake, a fine write creating a warm day break for the reader, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Dolly.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
It's funny we tend to think in weather.as being intrusive, and if it's bad, we think that it had been here longer than it has. Beautifully written Gypsy, great poetic expression, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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It's funny we tend to think in weather.as being intrusive, and if it's bad, we think that it had been here longer than it has. Beautifully written Gypsy, great poetic expression, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy :)
hugs
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Well done
Comment from juliaSjames
Gypsy
I have to award you the sixth star for this exceptional post. The wicked storm wreaked havoc but nature will make all well. We only have to trust in the power of Divine Order and move forward in faith.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Gypsy
I have to award you the sixth star for this exceptional post. The wicked storm wreaked havoc but nature will make all well. We only have to trust in the power of Divine Order and move forward in faith.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Julia! I appreciate the fantastic review and six stars :) I look forward to moving forward in faith.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem and a great addition to the multi-author Renga book. After a severe storm the calmness in the atmosphere can be felt deeply when you look outside and see life still goes on.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem and a great addition to the multi-author Renga book. After a severe storm the calmness in the atmosphere can be felt deeply when you look outside and see life still goes on.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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thank you very much
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, I love the image and I know your poem is about the greatness of nature, but somehow I feel that your intention is different after the storm of the election people are expecting the calm to take over. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Wow, I love the image and I know your poem is about the greatness of nature, but somehow I feel that your intention is different after the storm of the election people are expecting the calm to take over. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Iza. I am grateful for the excellent review and kind words.
hug,
gypsy
Comment from June Sargent
After every storm, there will be a new dawn. The darker the night, the brighter the sunrise will be. Just wait with anticipation -instead of anxiety.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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After every storm, there will be a new dawn. The darker the night, the brighter the sunrise will be. Just wait with anticipation -instead of anxiety.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, June. I am grateful for the excellent review and kind words.
hug,
gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, excellent imagery here, Gypsy. The calm after a storm is always more reassuring than the calm before the storm, although storms can be so stormy there is a lot of damage to clean up.
Beautiful artwork and presentation. I hope all is well with you. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Ha, excellent imagery here, Gypsy. The calm after a storm is always more reassuring than the calm before the storm, although storms can be so stormy there is a lot of damage to clean up.
Beautiful artwork and presentation. I hope all is well with you. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your continued support and kindness.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
What a Lovely poem for 5-7-5. After wicked storm rolled through American lake. Sunrise broke at dawn. This is a Very Breathtaking photo such vibrant colours.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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What a Lovely poem for 5-7-5. After wicked storm rolled through American lake. Sunrise broke at dawn. This is a Very Breathtaking photo such vibrant colours.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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thank you