Mutated Virus
5/7/5 Halloween Horror Haiku contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a horror deluxe entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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This is a horror deluxe entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
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You're most welcome!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku contest.
This short piece paints a clear picture of horror.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku contest.
This short piece paints a clear picture of horror.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words, Sharon.
gypsy
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a brilliant Halloween haiku. The word "virus" brings up the Covid 19 which is everyone's lips. Excellent imagery, visuals and outstanding presentation and pictures.
Thanks for mentioning Dean Kuch. I was a big admirer of his talent and his big generous heart. I was away from site for almost 3 years when he died. It was a shock to me, and I hope he is at a place now where is no pain.
Good luck in the contest, love, Muse
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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This was a brilliant Halloween haiku. The word "virus" brings up the Covid 19 which is everyone's lips. Excellent imagery, visuals and outstanding presentation and pictures.
Thanks for mentioning Dean Kuch. I was a big admirer of his talent and his big generous heart. I was away from site for almost 3 years when he died. It was a shock to me, and I hope he is at a place now where is no pain.
Good luck in the contest, love, Muse
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words and six stars! I miss Dean, especially when I write horror haiku. We co-authored a horror haiku book. He was an excellent writer and friend.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Gypsy,
I enjoyed your entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku contest. It would certainly scare anyone to death if they came upon a zombie feasting on its victim's entrails.
You've connected zombies with a virus... timely with Halloween right around the corner. That's the trouble with viruses... they mutate, always trying to be better than the previous version. Corona has certainly done that.
I don't know a lot about Haiku poetry, and normally I stay out of these contests because there are just too many rules. And the Haiku police are always watching. Maybe you know... are just the first two lines supposed to be connected? or can all three lines be connected, as you have done here?
If only the first two lines are supposed to be connected, you could easily fix it by writing "turns us into flesh eaters".
But if all three lines can be connected, then I would suggest a hyphen for "flesh eating" ... (flesh-eating)
Good Luck in the contest! You certainly have nailed Halloween Horror.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Hi Gypsy,
I enjoyed your entry for the Halloween Horror Haiku contest. It would certainly scare anyone to death if they came upon a zombie feasting on its victim's entrails.
You've connected zombies with a virus... timely with Halloween right around the corner. That's the trouble with viruses... they mutate, always trying to be better than the previous version. Corona has certainly done that.
I don't know a lot about Haiku poetry, and normally I stay out of these contests because there are just too many rules. And the Haiku police are always watching. Maybe you know... are just the first two lines supposed to be connected? or can all three lines be connected, as you have done here?
If only the first two lines are supposed to be connected, you could easily fix it by writing "turns us into flesh eaters".
But if all three lines can be connected, then I would suggest a hyphen for "flesh eating" ... (flesh-eating)
Good Luck in the contest! You certainly have nailed Halloween Horror.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and helpful feedback. I changed it to flesh eaters-- and a dash.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Halloween haiku, Mutated Virus, has the right set up and definitely reminds this reader of our gone but still haunted by friend Dean Kuch. You are certainly filling that void, Gypsy.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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This Halloween haiku, Mutated Virus, has the right set up and definitely reminds this reader of our gone but still haunted by friend Dean Kuch. You are certainly filling that void, Gypsy.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I'm honored to be compared to Dean. Thank you, Bill.
Comment from Minglement
LOL - this one's a winner in the Halloween Horror Haiku! Wish I had a sixer :) Great parralell drawn, here and we so are all probably packing on the pounds! Well done, with great presentation. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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LOL - this one's a winner in the Halloween Horror Haiku! Wish I had a sixer :) Great parralell drawn, here and we so are all probably packing on the pounds! Well done, with great presentation. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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You are most welcome!
Comment from LisaMay
Urgh! This is definitely a horrific thought and image, well expressed.
Your poem reminded me of Dean's writings - I miss him. Then I see you mentioned him in your notes. He lives on.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Urgh! This is definitely a horrific thought and image, well expressed.
Your poem reminded me of Dean's writings - I miss him. Then I see you mentioned him in your notes. He lives on.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Yes, Dean lives on in fanstory. He loved it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written scary Halloween horror haiku. The virus mutating and we all become flesh eating zombies. Who may be the last one standing to claim victory.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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A very well-written scary Halloween horror haiku. The virus mutating and we all become flesh eating zombies. Who may be the last one standing to claim victory.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness! Dean would have adored this write and I am so glad you gave him a mention here, a horror write indeed and it made my flesh crawl! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Oh my goodness! Dean would have adored this write and I am so glad you gave him a mention here, a horror write indeed and it made my flesh crawl! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Boogienights
This is cool I'm not gonna lie. If I wasn't in the contest, I would definitely vote for this one. I like the animated picture, it gives me chills. When I was 11 years old my sister took me to the drive in movie to see Night Of The Living Dead. I haven't been the same since. Lol. Best of luck in the contest...I really mean that! :)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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This is cool I'm not gonna lie. If I wasn't in the contest, I would definitely vote for this one. I like the animated picture, it gives me chills. When I was 11 years old my sister took me to the drive in movie to see Night Of The Living Dead. I haven't been the same since. Lol. Best of luck in the contest...I really mean that! :)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your good wishes in the contest. I love horror. I created this contest :) I wish you good luck too. Have a wonderful weekend.
Cheers,
Gypsy