Pantoum Collection
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Comment from Titanx9
This is a well-written pantoum that talks about tourist's demeaning elephants as they ride them for their pleasure. These lumbering pachyderms sway side-to-side carrying their hedonistic burdens. I like how you summed it all up in the last stanza:
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Ganesh the god must shed a tear
The elephant sways side to side
Her wistful eye so full of fear
At what dire cost our tourist ride."
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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This is a well-written pantoum that talks about tourist's demeaning elephants as they ride them for their pleasure. These lumbering pachyderms sway side-to-side carrying their hedonistic burdens. I like how you summed it all up in the last stanza:
"
Ganesh the god must shed a tear
The elephant sways side to side
Her wistful eye so full of fear
At what dire cost our tourist ride."
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your very kind comments about my poem, Titanx9! Much appreciated.
Comment from mfowler
Your pantoum is very well ordered and constructed to show the message in an effective way. This is a great topic full of emotion, questions and narrative strength.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Your pantoum is very well ordered and constructed to show the message in an effective way. This is a great topic full of emotion, questions and narrative strength.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Mark. Appreciated!