The Night
This poem describes the mysterious beauty and magical music of the night.139 total reviews
Comment from God's Writer
A great little poem. It ceases to amaze me what can be done with such few words. You have done an excellent job conveying the feelings and imagery you put in this grand poem. Thank you
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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A great little poem. It ceases to amaze me what can be done with such few words. You have done an excellent job conveying the feelings and imagery you put in this grand poem. Thank you
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.I am glad that you like the poem.
Comment from playinaround
I love the presentation and the interesting wording and ideas. The only line that sounds a little choppy is the last. Night sings lullaby. Maybe Night sings lullabies? Just my humble opinion. I really like the origionality and thinking outside the box. Loved it!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I love the presentation and the interesting wording and ideas. The only line that sounds a little choppy is the last. Night sings lullaby. Maybe Night sings lullabies? Just my humble opinion. I really like the origionality and thinking outside the box. Loved it!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Ah! Thank you so much for your kind comment.Much appreciated.
Comment from Cedar
This is an excellent entry for this contest. The picture
that you have chosen matches your words perfectly. I
wish you good luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This is an excellent entry for this contest. The picture
that you have chosen matches your words perfectly. I
wish you good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.Much appreciated.I am very glad that you like it.
Comment from Dragus
A nice cheeky picture of the moon to accentuate a solid poem. I particularly like your final line, the night truly is a wondrous place with melting, senile moons. Well written.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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A nice cheeky picture of the moon to accentuate a solid poem. I particularly like your final line, the night truly is a wondrous place with melting, senile moons. Well written.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review..Much appreciated.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This doesn't make much sense to me. How can the moon be senile? Yes, it's old, but not everyone who is old is senile, and besides, it's no older than the earth. As for melting, I can't see that word with the moon. Moonlight doesn't appear to be melting nor does the moon. Only the last line makes sense, but it doesn't relate to the first two in any way.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This doesn't make much sense to me. How can the moon be senile? Yes, it's old, but not everyone who is old is senile, and besides, it's no older than the earth. As for melting, I can't see that word with the moon. Moonlight doesn't appear to be melting nor does the moon. Only the last line makes sense, but it doesn't relate to the first two in any way.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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sorry that you did not like the poem but thanks for reviewing.
Comment from l.raven
This is just beautiful. I love the quiet and the dark of the night. It is so peaceful. I love the picture and the poem is perfect.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This is just beautiful. I love the quiet and the dark of the night. It is so peaceful. I love the picture and the poem is perfect.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.Glad that you like the poem.
Comment from DanielEkine
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
Beautiful art.
When the old moon slowly disappears, the night evolves.
It's really beautiful and I like how you used the night time.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
Beautiful art.
When the old moon slowly disappears, the night evolves.
It's really beautiful and I like how you used the night time.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so very much for your kind review.Glad that you like my little poem..take care.
Comment from TELLER OF TALES
Though a very short poem it is very powerfully written it explains in a very lovely way, how the nights are silent, serene and calm, in the authors words they are quiet and they sing their tender songs, excellent work it is beautifully coordinated......FROM THE TELLER OF TALES...
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Though a very short poem it is very powerfully written it explains in a very lovely way, how the nights are silent, serene and calm, in the authors words they are quiet and they sing their tender songs, excellent work it is beautifully coordinated......FROM THE TELLER OF TALES...
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the excellent review.It means a lot to me.I am glad that you like it.
Comment from _maynard_
Great flow it gave me a picture on how the night can melt into your dreams and bring your nightmares to life nice line night sings lullaby
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Great flow it gave me a picture on how the night can melt into your dreams and bring your nightmares to life nice line night sings lullaby
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.I am glad that you like it..take care
Comment from rjuselius
"When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby"
i'm not so sure to understand this piece of art. i like the satori but not so keen on the second line. i'm not sure that senile moon leads to melting?
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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"When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby"
i'm not so sure to understand this piece of art. i like the satori but not so keen on the second line. i'm not sure that senile moon leads to melting?
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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You'r welcome and sorry that you did not like the poem but thanks for the review.
