Silver Threads
A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment94 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sharyn,
Wonderful piece of Supernatural Poetry as well as the Author Notes!
To write a Shakespearean Sonnet is actually a tough, but interesting job and you have performed it perfectly well in all respects i.e. theme, structure, rhyming and the role of Supernatural Powers as '...as the willing winds whipped from above' and 'as chains of lightning set me free.'
The couplet is particularly remarkable depicting the movie type staunch love and feelings of the lady.
Superb!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hello Sharyn,
Wonderful piece of Supernatural Poetry as well as the Author Notes!
To write a Shakespearean Sonnet is actually a tough, but interesting job and you have performed it perfectly well in all respects i.e. theme, structure, rhyming and the role of Supernatural Powers as '...as the willing winds whipped from above' and 'as chains of lightning set me free.'
The couplet is particularly remarkable depicting the movie type staunch love and feelings of the lady.
Superb!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Bless you for your magic six on this one, RP - sonnets are not an easy write, you're correct! I'm so glad you enjoyed mine :)Sharyn
Comment from PoesyPoet
WOW! The scribe really shows her anger by cursing the two-timing cheat to a life of hell in the black sea. Goody! Well done. PP
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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WOW! The scribe really shows her anger by cursing the two-timing cheat to a life of hell in the black sea. Goody! Well done. PP
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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hey there PP - thank you so much ... definitely in a Shakespearean mood yesterday ... easy to call up Lear or the Three Witches, always loved them!
How are YOU???
:)))S
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
OOoooo... gooood one! I love that she cursed him... serves the cheating bastard right! Your sonnet skills are terrific. I'd never even try one of these... far too many rules for me. :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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OOoooo... gooood one! I love that she cursed him... serves the cheating bastard right! Your sonnet skills are terrific. I'd never even try one of these... far too many rules for me. :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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You make me blush, Phyllis and I'll bet you'd roll out a super sonnet! :)
Comment from Darkhorse555
for gold our mortality the silver threads shining in the glory of the sun silver lightning cursed to the ocean beautiful piece
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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for gold our mortality the silver threads shining in the glory of the sun silver lightning cursed to the ocean beautiful piece
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thx so much Dh! :)S
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of sticking to the rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes. The writer delivers a message that is easy to understand by the reader as I see nothing in this piece that I would change.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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The writer does a good job of sticking to the rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes. The writer delivers a message that is easy to understand by the reader as I see nothing in this piece that I would change.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thx so much RR! :)S
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nice contest entry and the sonnet was excellently done. Read very well with great flow. Loved the story line and it fit the picture.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Nice contest entry and the sonnet was excellently done. Read very well with great flow. Loved the story line and it fit the picture.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thx so much Barb - glad you enjoyed this one!
:)S
Comment from Curly Girly
This well written poem has a haunting qualtiy about it. Betrayed by her lover, she curses him... And the two are doomed to a watery tomb.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This well written poem has a haunting qualtiy about it. Betrayed by her lover, she curses him... And the two are doomed to a watery tomb.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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You've got it Nicole - :)Sharyn
Comment from amarherig14
They were newlyweds on their honeymoon and he betrayed her with the Captain's daughter. She cursed at the sky and was killed by lightnings and the curse sent then both to the their resting place in the deep waters of the sea.I like the ending ,it was unexpected.Good alliteration:willing, winds,whipped. The picture was great , showing her emotion.Good rhyme.Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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They were newlyweds on their honeymoon and he betrayed her with the Captain's daughter. She cursed at the sky and was killed by lightnings and the curse sent then both to the their resting place in the deep waters of the sea.I like the ending ,it was unexpected.Good alliteration:willing, winds,whipped. The picture was great , showing her emotion.Good rhyme.Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Wow! Thank you so much my dear. The picture had to be the inspiration for the poem, and it was such a strange picture ... I had to dream about it a little first. Bless you for your lovely six on this one - so much appreciated!
:)Sharyn
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You are welcome,Sharyn.This my favorite kind of theme.You did an excellent job! The woman looked evil.My vote goes to you. :))) Margie
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Bless you Margie - yes, it was a weird picture, wasn't it!?
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Sharyn ,Silver Threads was a women store where I used to live.Much different than your poem.Lol.I think to come up with that poem you had a lot of thinking to do.Weird picture but just right for your post. Blessings going your way,Margie
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Silver Threads' is an extremely-well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is a perfect example of "a woman scorned". It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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'Silver Threads' is an extremely-well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is a perfect example of "a woman scorned". It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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thx so much your Grace! :)S
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S, you're very welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from Rondeno
Excellent Shakespearian sonnet, Sharyn! So smooth, so evenly adept! (And, of course, with your father's nautical theme as a background!) Quality.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Excellent Shakespearian sonnet, Sharyn! So smooth, so evenly adept! (And, of course, with your father's nautical theme as a background!) Quality.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Bless you Michael! Yes, the ocean definitely runs salt thru my veins. I'm so glad you appreciated this one - I've only written a few, and I'm finding I'm enjoying them more and more. Though I have NO clue what I'm going to write when I sit down. Thank you so much for your wonderful six! big hugs, Sharyn
